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Added 2024-07-01 02:20:45 +0000 UTCI don’t own high School DxD or HP.
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Considering I am german, I am pretty sure your chosen title for the german magical director/minister/president should be changed. The direct translation of director to "Regisseur" is a word basically exclusively used in the context of moive/theater/circus directors. It creates an absolutely hilarious image for the comparision of politic leadership and the recording/directing of a movie. But probably not intentional. Should you wish to portray an ignorance to the muggle world and the NS time you could use "magischer Führer"(magical leader/director/guide), but because of Hitlers title having been "Führer" it is no name a non magical leader would consider. Otherwise you could use "Generaldirektor" ( general/managing director) Not that the name really matters, but it was obvious. the sentence:"...anyone who disagreed with Cu would simply drag along." should probably either be "...with her, Cu ..." or simply "disagreed, Cu would" Note: I am bad at punctuation, so those might be entirely wrong. The scene of Xeonvia and Irina meeting Asia: "...fortgot to include the are of the brain that includes tact with He made Xenovia." probably should be " when He " shortly after it say takes Iris and rachel's breath away, should probably be Irina and Xenovia, names Dragon probaly does not accept. There are also 2 instances of Isaac instead of Issei, as well as some of those in the last chapters.
Sarlisark
2024-07-26 11:32:43 +0000 UTCSolid chapter, if political and a bit long-winded for the show & tell to the politicians. It makes perfect sense that all this is coming out in the decompression chapters after the Pharaoh Debacle, but I'm very interested in what will happen to Danan (and it's residents) if it gets steady infusions of even more magic. Will we see a massive upsurge in muggleborn wizards among those who move to Danan, or will that population boom affect the residents of Tir Na Nog more?
FormVIEnthusiast
2024-07-05 19:36:41 +0000 UTC
