Effect of A Horse and A Dragon Chapter 7
Added 2023-10-27 18:02:51 +0000 UTCChapter 7: Kicking Over an Anthill
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Seen and changed, thanks!
vimesenthusiast
2023-10-29 20:59:25 +0000 UTCLOL. Yeah, I think Usagi's my favorite OC in a while. And thanks for the Alice, ugh.
vimesenthusiast
2023-10-29 20:53:54 +0000 UTCAbsolutely amazing. I enjoyed the chapter very much. Though i doubt Ranma used "key" blasts but ki, but that is Dragon for you. Also this paragraph at the end seemed kind of awkward:"Another backdoor route subroutine she had left in Omega’s operating system allowed her to have the same level of permissions as Aria would when she died, letting her see even more of the security cameras than the hackers the humans had brought along. A lot of Omega’s security was tied down by a biometric reader connected to Aria’s heart." I am not sure it adds anything to the story to have the biometric lock thing, since she is dead anyway, just that a backdoor was left in the system.
Sarlisark
2023-10-29 14:34:22 +0000 UTCRight in the first paragraph there's an 'Alice' which I assume is supposed to be 'Aria.' And, as someone else already mentioned, there are several instances of Samantha instead of Samara. Love the chapter overall though:-). Glorious chaos...and Usagi rapidly becoming my favorite character in this fic! To heck with Ranma and Herb, we need 300% more Usagi ;-).
Novus
2023-10-27 22:46:44 +0000 UTCAs always this is just really awesome and makes me eager for more
Ranma_Leopard
2023-10-27 19:21:13 +0000 UTC
