A Third Path to the Future Chapter 55
Added 2023-05-25 23:07:40 +0000 UTCI… am really not happy with this chapte
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I really think you managed to do justice to the Harry v Thanos fight. You built the first one up so high-level that I was somewhat worried you might not have been able to top it without going entirely over the top. Ebony Maw was definitely on point in both character and strength! Supergiant was slightly one dimensional, but that was mainly from her superpower over-specialization. (Found the chapter, I had to search for specifically ch 55, because it wasn't listed under ATP in the search.)
FormVIEnthusiast
2025-01-08 08:28:41 +0000 UTCIs it just me or did that telepathic vampire or whatever you called the black order in China feel a little to specific op? I love the stories but I think her powers were a little too bullshit for me to like that section very much. I think you made it a little to plot armor for me. I mean I'm biased against telepathy never liked how they seem too get into anyone's mind unless your super scientist. One that can just break through your defense unless it's a living self defense ( aka The Hentai bonsai Trees) just through that campaign off for me. I would say I liked the Harry vs Thanos Round 2 but something just felt off about it. I think it steems from the set up felt a little to artificial with Thanos steem rolling everyone except Jean. But I still think this is one the best fanfiction I have ever read and got a lot of enjoyment out of it. So thank you for your time and effort. Hope everything in RL works out.
Brandon Henderson
2023-07-06 00:50:15 +0000 UTCgood chapter, very fitting end for the Mad Titan, and still of the quality I have come to expect from you despite minor mistakes.
Alek Sander
2023-06-01 04:32:18 +0000 UTCLOL. Doubt it matters, true.
vimesenthusiast
2023-06-01 03:24:19 +0000 UTCLove the chapter! Excellent final battle. I realize that this probably doesn't matter to you, but you're definitely demonetized in China now. Not for any comments in this chapter, just for acknowledging Taiwan's existence. I'm looking forward to the final wrap-up chapter, maybe with some time with Jean's twins. Can't remember their names, and I am very curious what their powers are. Great job!
Beleriond
2023-05-31 16:39:21 +0000 UTCSeen and corrected, thanks!
vimesenthusiast
2023-05-26 23:44:20 +0000 UTCYeah. Unfortunately editing is something i can't do while driving. Which, along with house hunting, packing, etc. has eaten up my time something fierce.
vimesenthusiast
2023-05-26 22:54:11 +0000 UTCLOL
vimesenthusiast
2023-05-26 22:51:17 +0000 UTCYes, it's a little rough but still an enjoyable chapter and a fitting end for the mad Titan. Thank you for your work.
zagan
2023-05-26 21:49:03 +0000 UTC"We will continue to watch career with great interest, Harry Potter." Possibly should be: "We will continue to watch your career with great interest, Harry Potter."
Ampws
2023-05-26 20:46:39 +0000 UTCThe groans of his people made the Fleet Overlord although not as much as the sight of the enemy fire slackening off and then stopping entirely. Something wrong with this sentence - missing words after Overlord perhaps ?
Ampws
2023-05-26 20:33:49 +0000 UTCEither jean's telepathic shout or his squadron commander's over the commissioned to do the trick. over the commissioned???
Ampws
2023-05-26 19:32:11 +0000 UTCWincing at the play of energies so close to her body, Skadi hung there, ironically protected by the sh by that purchase for a second, then flipped herself up and over, landing behind the throne on the tiny area surrounding it there. Are there several words missing @ sh ?
Ampws
2023-05-26 19:19:11 +0000 UTCWhere before a series of mountains had stood, now was a series of jagged hills the remnants of my team mountains laid low by the power of the Asgardian and her opponent. my team - I think you mean - mighty
Ampws
2023-05-26 19:09:57 +0000 UTCThis allowed large numbers of Rippers and Death Claws to come through, along with construction equipment designed to build more anti-air and anti-??? Anti what?
Ampws
2023-05-26 18:21:15 +0000 UTCHmmm, lots of little oddities in the current version of this. Like Skadi somehow recovering from being hit hard enough to shatter her bones and break something inside her , knocking her unconscious. Thor recovering from the hit makes sense. Skadi recovering enough to play a major role in finishing off the portal is a lot weirder. Still, you did say this is basically unedited...so meh.
Novus
2023-05-26 12:22:41 +0000 UTCI think that the fact you use a Speech-to-Text program in your car whilst I use a Text-to-Speech program on my walks is a cool dichotomy
link01742
2023-05-26 02:29:28 +0000 UTC
