Bhaalson Remodel Chapter 11
Added 2022-07-21 16:06:55 +0000 UTCBSo, I kind of had trouble stopping thi
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Yay! More Bhalson! I think you did pretty close to an ideal job handling Viconia. I'm a little unsure of Jaheira and her husbano's reaction to her, though. If they were full elves, who had grown up with elves, the instinctive negative reaction makes sense. But for them...it comes across as a little odd to me? Not only are both of them only half-elves, but Harpers as well. And that organization is very much a judge-them-for-their-actions sort of group for the most part. Still, it wasn't too overly jarring...
Novus
2022-08-03 23:19:28 +0000 UTCI intend for Viconia and Harry to become a couple OH yes. Power couple indeed will also occur, though slowly at first. I intend to have Hermione and Fleur show up in the next chapter. PLanar Shift is an interesting idea for later in the story
vimesenthusiast
2022-08-03 04:24:15 +0000 UTCAnother great chapter, this has been a great story to read and I am loving everything that has been developed and the way that the characters are being developed. It has been interesting to see how without Harry in the party that the rest of the group cannot seem to stay together and how Harry's presence and personality has been able to provide a buffer and temper the harsher aspects of each individual character. I have been enjoying the budding relationship between Harry and Viconia. I think that they will both help each other grow not just in terms of abilities but also characteristics that would allow them to become greater individuals and also a powerful couple in their own right. It will be interesting to see what is happening in the HP world and how things are developing between everyone. It would also be interesting to see Hermione and or Fleur being pulled into the game world and seeing how things would develop with the inclusion of them. I know that eventually Harry will come back to there and I really hope that when he does so he is able to bring back some of the characters. Which depending on how high level you plan on having there characters get to there is a spell called 'Plane Shift' that could become the way to have Harry return to Earth.
Braeden1002
2022-08-01 14:30:08 +0000 UTC
