Stallion of the Line 28
Added 2021-09-27 03:43:06 +0000 UTCI can’t draw. ‘Nuff said.
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And now edited. Thanks!
vimesenthusiast
2021-09-29 14:09:53 +0000 UTCFor the record I like Hina a lot, and I really hope that she will have the chance to pursue a relationship with Ramna. Unrelated to that, I'm not sure if this is the right place to post typos and mistakes, but in any case here are my findings: Line 66: what I'm going to do to the right?" → what I'm going to do, right?" Line 68: Sanji chuckled but shook his head. → Sanji chuckled but nodded his head. Line 76: but Sanji dodged, although his kick combo for a split second. → but Sanji dodged, although his kick combo (missed verb, probably hit) for a split second. Line 98: or even 'how was she hiding those?" → or even 'how was she hiding those'?" Line 228: you spoke about the Tenryubito. → you spoke about the Tenryubito." Line 250: would be moving through the Calm Belt? → would be moving through the Calm Belt?" Line 322: "You want to get down to Business? → "You want to get down to business? Line 396: asking me to work with Flamingo! that would be → asking me to work with Flamingo! That would be Line 438: "What is the first goal of the Marines!" → "What is the first goal of the Marines?" Line 838: his leg caught in midair. GAAAhhh darn it!" → his leg caught in midair. "GAAAhhh darn it!" Line 884: to fight to control that buildup of power. → to fight to control that buildup of power." Line 898: a full-sized frigate. "That's a lot → a full-sized frigate. That's a lot Line 932: "Right! Your part of this crew → "Right! You're part of this crew Line 998: then a fist impacted the site of Luffy's head. → then a fist impacted the side of Luffy's head. Line 1004: never have occurred to me. "But I still do have → never have occurred to me. But I still do have Lines 1064-66: They moved through it, Zambai led the way through → They moved through it, Zambai leading the way through Line 1094: a cordon around Water 7 just beyond its territory. → a cordon around Water 7 just beyond its territory." Line 1312: that different here on the Blue Sea?"" → that different here on the Blue Sea?" Line 1326: Luffy stared at this and surprise, then smiled, patted the prow, then asked, → Luffy stared at this with surprise, then smiled, patted the prow, and asked, Line 1378: as he went. You're at the wheel, Nami. → as he went. "You're at the wheel, Nami.
lostone2
2021-09-28 18:05:16 +0000 UTCHina always speaking of herself in the third person seems to me to be mentally retarded. I don't really like her with Ranma, maybe pair her with Sanji? Which shadow will end up in the super zombie? Margaret may be betrayed by Gecko but the male zombie with the shadow of an Amazon inside would probably go mad because of the wrong sex.
GreedOnGreed
2021-09-27 21:59:23 +0000 UTC
