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Last panel is superb. Jess back muscles are looking great. And even if you wanted to show a different look, i think defeat and resignation is better. In her mind, the chance of remaining trapped forever must be an option. With a deranged mind like the Hangman has, the "protection" must be permanent, keeping her body captive, alive, dead, awake or asleep. It might be a good idea to finish her days as a heroine inside a trophy case, for better preservation.

Jsab

I'm 100% confident the gagging will be shown

Wonderverse

I enjoy it as well

Wonderverse

It is indeed the patreon I more gladly give money to. I think it is due to the ambition of the whole project. The fact that it's only the first issue really blows my mind

Wonderverse

This is such a great next page. Great to see how helpless SW is, hanging there. The bowed head is a complete acceptance of defeat. A bit of dialogue from her then what I’ve been waiting for ….. a gagged damsel. Unlike the original comic, I’d like to see Hangman gag out heroine in the pages

Regarding your edit: I love that Jess is silent and appears defeated. It jibes with the previous page where it appears she is undergoing Hangman PTSD, and that she'd be affected so dramatically. Not to say she can't come out of it, but it makes sense, adds tension (no pun intended), and of course, it's super hot. Just my two cents on the "silent Jess" controversy...:)

As nice as that sounds, think they’re about to be murdered instead

JeanWorm

This is fantastic! I'd love to see those guys swear loyalty to Hangman, wanting to follow his ways, so he takes them in and demonstrates on Jessica, the proper way to restrain a heroine. They could even try themselves and miserably fail only for him to have to clean up their mess.

Amaniwolf

I like how he nonchalantly carries her under his arm and his "calming" words to her show how helpless he thinks she is, Jess looks defeated in the last panel but I hope she is building up to a good rant, I think it's better when a damsel is gagged because she is being loud and mouthy and not just because the story requires it.

Agreed on all counts.

Yep. That about says it all.

What I really love about this panel is the way he's handling her. Like, it ain't no big thing. All in a day's work. And her pose at the end is scorching. Just, wow. I love that she's helpless and defeated. That's what I'm here for, after all. I'm sure it's partly mental, but no doubt those cords are a Hydra/AIM joint effort and have been graded for use against SW, right? Of course. The color shift is good. Real good. You've hit on something here. It's gritty and very fitting and it does indeed look "grown-up". I've said this before but now even more so: this is a real comic book, and the fact that it's Spider-Woman and bondage and we're living the best version of her worst day is blowing my mind up. Continue to take my money please.

The new coloring is noticeable, but I don't think it is either worse or better than your previous one personally. Feeling neutral on it. Jessica hanging her head at the end there, makes me wonder if she's already in a defeated mindset or just a bit disoriented. Might look up next page with a scowl on. Poor robbers though, they were cheering this guy a second ago.... they're about to be disappointed.

Bluejazzysongbird

Maybe she's trying to process what just happened. Hangman strung her up pretty fast after all.

AluminumBands

For a first attempt, this turned out amazing. I can only imagine how good it's going to look once you've mastered the technique. Jess' body looks so hot in that frog-tie.

AluminumBands

But... But... We don't want to see you taking care of the ruffians, mr Hangman sir. We want you to take care of Jessica

Wonderverse

I think the color looks AMAZING - can't wait to see more!

C.J. Mack

Jess.exe has stopped working.

You have such an incredible talent Telikor! this is my fave panel so far - the detail of Jess in that last panel tells you everything you need to know about what she is going through without seeing her face at all! amazing!

I love the sense of defeat from Jess in the last panel. Incredible!

CaliBurrito

I completely agree. I half expect a "You haven't said a word! I'm beginning to think you don't like me anymore." at some point.

Masterpiece scene…very well done!….but the fact that She didn’t say anything or even thought something in her mind leave this scene a bit incomplete….

Kenfalco

I think the colors look fine. Bright colors are a staple of comics anyway, and you do a good job of balancing bright and muted tones.

SinisterMarauder

Whoa, waitaminute... Talk about mood whiplash! I thought he was our (the criminals who cheered about the bondage) side! :o To his point, she seems remarkably calm. She hasn't said a word since he showed up...

I think it looks great! Love the addition of the rain. I do t know why but I think that the coloring on this page makes it the most cinematic yet.

This does look noticeably different from the previous few pages, though not in a bad way. I'm sure you'll improve even more as you go on, as you always do. I'm also somewhat surprised at how relatively subdued Jessica has been so far. I guess the speed at which she was bound and the shock of being caught by Hangman again, plus the bad memories associated with that, has taken her out of it a bit. Not that there's much she can do, but I would like her to speak at least a little bit to him before she's gagged. But I'm sure you have something planned and know what you're doing, so I'll just wait and see.

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Oh, let's get this party started!

tcltojsp

The dramatic arrival of the rain feels a bit cheesy, but I love it; and I find it tremendously enhances the mood of the last panel.

Owen Wazdaka Chivot

DAYUM.

Ronin