Where should Cole finish?
Added 2018-10-06 00:47:38 +0000 UTCHey, guys. So I took a couple extra days with this in order to finish the Prologue. It's longer than normal but I think it's important to setting up the rest of the interludes in this one. Over the first four books I've intentionally left Wynn Mosaad as a kind of "wild card" character who we only see through an unreliable narrator (Cole). That's finally going to change!
On the smut side, I have plans for a nice "all the girls at once" seen in chapter two. :P In the meantime, where should Cole finish on Selorah?
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Then, as one random internet phantom to another... thanks. 's always good to be appreciated.
SpectralTime
2018-10-06 03:57:35 +0000 UTCWe'll get more Convectorate pov in another series with some things set up here. The first person really limits the scope (which is why I started doing these interludes). But I think generally speaking if I stick with longer stuff I can move back to third person and have a few PoVs.
Sarah Hawke
2018-10-06 02:17:30 +0000 UTCFair enough.
SpectralTime
2018-10-06 02:12:40 +0000 UTC:)
Sarah Hawke
2018-10-06 02:12:30 +0000 UTCHis heritage wasn't revealed to anyone last book aside from peeps on the ship. I have a few partial drafts of that convo in this one, but I decided they were all really boring - the reader already knows this stuff. So I pushed it forward a week where we can still see their reactions
Sarah Hawke
2018-10-06 02:08:35 +0000 UTC“All I’m saying is that you’re obviously the expendable one here. Cole is royalty, and I’m amazing. Don’t take it personally.” -had me laughing hard, that is a great line
WhiteRabbit
2018-10-06 01:59:58 +0000 UTC...Huh. For once, my preferred option is coming out well... I'm kind of against Mosaad here. Like, sure, Falric is kind of a jackass, but that doesn't make him wrong? "We've come too far!" is a terrible argument. It's literally the sunk-cost fallacy, and I haven't seen any evidence that Mosaad's critics aren't 100% correct about his just going to screw up this next part too. Do like the characterization on Greyson though. It would've been really easy to just make him a cowardly sycophant or a self-serving partisan out to secure his own personal power. Honestly, my only *real* complaint is that I absolutely sympathize with him more than Mosaad and I don't know if it's intentional. I still wish we got more of the Convectorate's supposed good side in these stories. They've kind of just been evil jackasses the whole time, with no indication there's a deeper complexity to the situation. The story's done a good job of showing the Dominion's downsides, but not the Vecs' upsides, is all I'm saying. ...Oh, so... that whole reveal just kind of happened off-page? ...I was *pretty* sure they were keeping it on the down-low last book, but I'm not in a position to check right now... “That was before he found out he was the Chosen One,” Cobalt sneered. “Now he’s Captain Serious all the time.” Hahahaha I fully recognize that statement isn't 100% accurate, but hahahahaha. ...Man, I hope Raxyl doesn't die. Can I say that now? I'm just saying, he's ticking a lot of Obi-wan boxes. Mosaad's a dead man, though, with that title. I don't think for a second you're gonna kill Kaveri. ...I just hope Cole calls Raxyl "father" or "dad" at least once before the end is all... On Page 17, "flit" should be "flitted." And also, awww. There really is a sweet story there, about her recovering her humanity. I almost wish she and Kaveri could just sit down and talk about the lives they've led, one as a slave, freed, then finding happiness in servitude, one as a noblewoman enslaved and only just having been freed. They're great foils, and I don't think they've ever had a chance to just bounce off one another as much as I'd like. Though how one could fit such a scene into Cole's perspective I don't know.
SpectralTime
2018-10-06 01:46:19 +0000 UTC
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