Spectre
Added 2018-09-23 18:27:19 +0000 UTCAt last, the book is ready!
As usual, please let me know if (when) you see any typos so I can make corrections before the public launch!
Comments
Chapter 3 spelling error Selorah replied. Frankly, I am fortunate have you haven't kept me restrained...get rid of the "have" ... Chapter 5 The stations facial recognition scanners will pick is up in a heartbeat ...change "is"to us
Darkroguex11
2018-09-24 17:19:13 +0000 UTCThanks! Got it
Sarah Hawke
2018-09-24 17:10:07 +0000 UTC"It has not been name" ->not been my name
WhiteRabbit
2018-09-24 16:23:10 +0000 UTCKind of did that in reverse in the last chapter. Also, the twist at the end was EPIC. Did not see that coming at all.
WhiteRabbit
2018-09-24 16:22:09 +0000 UTCWoot!
Paul Birchenough
2018-09-24 10:25:25 +0000 UTC...I mean, the major example from the very end of the book isn't that preposterous... I mean, they're both human and everything...
SpectralTime
2018-09-23 21:31:35 +0000 UTCi just searched and I did find that "no=not" thing, so thanks! I don't know about audience, but my #brand today seems to be "serious, emotional moment" followed by "preposterous sex scene."
Sarah Hawke
2018-09-23 21:27:10 +0000 UTCSo, while I am legitimately and pleasantly surprised that my favorite character survived this one... I am trying very hard not to spoil too much. So, the only major typo I can remember is a point between the rendezvous and the heist where Sekolah says "no" instead of "not." But, I also just searched the entire story for every instance of the word "no" and didn't find it, so... I guess you probably already got it? Also, I always thought Raxyl had a snake-tail instead of legs, so that time at the end where he "strode" somewhere surprised me, but I guess I was probably just wrong. All this time. Which is embarrassing. And I admit... I felt like the major reasons Cole would make a terrible ruler, namely that he has no training in statecraft, doesn't know anything about the polity he would try to take over, and also is a child inside, was something the various friends around him should've brought up and didn't for most of the book. But then, it *did* come up at the end, and I was glad. And it *is* weird that the Sekolah in his memories seems "warm and compassionate" now, when the one we actually met was... I mean, she was nice to *him*, but the implication is that she was also growing up to be her mother? I don't know. Might've been reading too far into it. I did like this book a lot, and it did a lot to develop and advance several characters, though I do feel Shandris is a bit... underdeveloped, considering she's on the cover. But that's barely a major complaint at all when I enjoyed the rest so much. I admit, I'm mostly reading for the story and romance more than the sex at this point, and lesbian stuff was never really my jam, so I'm probably not 100% the target audience anyway. Good job.
SpectralTime
2018-09-23 21:21:17 +0000 UTCAh, the curse of writing that last. I think I fixed both issues.
Sarah Hawke
2018-09-23 20:52:21 +0000 UTCSo... I don't know if you *meant* to offhandedly and unceremoniously reveal what I already knew about a certain character's identity in the middle of the interlude before Chapter Seven, but, considering you go back to using a very different name immediately afterwards, I suspect it's a typo.
SpectralTime
2018-09-23 20:47:11 +0000 UTC
