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Added 2023-04-22 17:41:38 +0000 UTCTsen told Unadi to get fucked, now Unadi' told her to go fuck herself...Turnabout is fair play I guess!
Seile is just focusing on his job like the good boy he is ;).
I'm trying something a bit different going forward, in that each little arc will be about 4-5 pages, then I'm gonna do a hard-smash into the next scene...so the next scene after this is actually gonna be a courtoom scene where we get to see what happens to Tsenaya because of what she's done.
What do you think? Do you like this abbreviated format for scenes, or would you rather they went on for longer?
In any case, please enjoy the plaps!
Comments
Well, I wouldn't mind a lot of dialogue... but I understand wanting to get on with the store. I will... learn to tolerate it ;)
Tygon Panthera
2023-04-23 08:53:18 +0000 UTCYeah I understand- I'll be doing lots of "smash cuts" in terms of storytelling for a bit, but it's either this or 20-30 pages of nothing but dialog. I'm afraid you'll have to get used to the "rushed" storytelling style because shorter arcs mean less foreplay. Hulk Smash >83
Scappo
2023-04-22 23:47:15 +0000 UTCLooking at these pages all done and in color, it feels a bit... rushed. Things go from trading swearwords to fucking/masturbating a bit... sudden. Not "dealbreaker" sudden, but it is a bit noticeable. I think an additional page with Unadi and Seile getting started and Tsen starting to finger herself after the initial surprise might have been a good idea. But I understand wanting to get to the good bits. I bring this up because the plan to make the scenes shorter. It can totally work when planned out properly, but I'm a bit afraid they will feel rushed too. Still, it would mean we'd get the actual story faster. And personally, I'm very curious to see what Tsen's punishment will be. So... probably worth a try. Regardless, great plaps :)
Tygon Panthera
2023-04-22 22:51:12 +0000 UTCUnadi is very sexy, wonder if she got plans for Tsen
Oscar Cruz
2023-04-22 21:52:21 +0000 UTCrats, we didn't see Tse pantsing herself :P
Vawlkus
2023-04-22 19:07:09 +0000 UTCTsen should definitely follow Unadi's advice
Synariel
2023-04-22 18:24:26 +0000 UTCThere are worse prisons...
Synariel
2023-04-22 18:24:14 +0000 UTCHopefully Tsenaya gets to enjoy that cutie too
Chrono Johnson
2023-04-22 17:45:35 +0000 UTCI’m looking forward to it I really hope she gets to keep the snake
Jorge
2023-04-22 17:42:56 +0000 UTC
