[Insider] Toxic Attraction: Chapter 34 Alpha
Added 2025-09-17 16:00:12 +0000 UTCHey everyone, hope its all going well on your e
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I think one of the more telling things of the new status quo is when Sarah wants to let Dan jack off in the bedroom. She asks Lester first if that's ok. When Lester says he can, but not inside the bedroom, Sarah makes Dan leave. Sarah has totally accepted that Lester is now in charge and loves it. Dan doesn't like it, but accepts it.
Mark Albright
2025-09-29 16:32:38 +0000 UTCI do feel like there needs to be more in the off limits room. Either she needs to squirt on the bed, he needs to cum, or needs to wipe himself using something on the bed. The goal being now that he has committed to crossing that boundary, they need to lean into more than what is in this draft.
GW
2025-09-28 01:01:13 +0000 UTCSo, Don, this was good in parts but needs work. The dirty talking Sarah was good, rewiring Dan’s brain to believe it’s all his fault. She has now embraced being the femme fatale who controls her cuck but gets controlled by her alpha, Lester. But you need some light and shade. The one sex scene drags on too long. Add in some cameos. For example a short para or two on whats happened with Jesse and the LG would be good. Those are two threads you cant leave dangling forever. You could also develop the Renee/Lester situation more. Perhaps have him actually visit her for a tete a tete on Dan’s malicious influence on her daughter, whilst developing her curiosity about him.
Royston smith
2025-09-22 21:52:03 +0000 UTCWow - this story has really gone off the rails. Some good ideas: Dan living down in the basement - then he could then be both figuratively and literally be low man in the hierarchy. Also, a mock wedding for L and S but have her given away by Otis and it could be officiated by that olde DnD master. Of course S would then be taken by the whole wedding party. Maybe have Dan be “maid of honor” lol! I just don’t where this is going anymore - sissyfication of Dan?
Vinny
2025-09-22 17:24:39 +0000 UTC
