Tainted Conception: Chapter 5 - Final Chapter
Added 2025-02-25 20:35:33 +0000 UTCHey folks. This one took me a bit longer to edi
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Kind of prefer this to toxic, wish it went a few more chapters, ie Saul able to manipulate mark into having to travel away from work and he ends up in there' bed on a regular basis and real turning her mind from mark and when the baby is born Saul is the father and she tell mark she prefers it that way
Tony
2025-06-10 12:19:45 +0000 UTCAfter letting some time pass and re-reading the final chapter of Tainted Conception, I’m now more convinced than ever that this story isn’t over. The characters have plenty of interesting possibilities between them going forward for a delightful Tainted Conception 2 story line. This time Brook will want to be a hot wife, not because she thinks her husband, Mark, wants her to sleep with others, but rather because she misses the excitement of what she had with Saul. Mark will increasingly have doubts about his wife and manhood because he knows that she misses what she had with Saul and the specter of raising Saul’s baby is a constant reminder of his wife’s infidelity. Mark eventually will go back to sessions with Dr. Creed who will convince him that he has cuckold tendencies and that letting things “happen” with his wife will be good for the marriage. Indeed, Tainted Conception 2 could even be better than the first story line.
Ken Cara
2025-05-28 01:36:11 +0000 UTCPerfect ending. It's about time the husband got a set of balls in one of your stories and stood up for himself and his family
Tony Midwood
2025-05-26 12:22:29 +0000 UTCPretty meh ending for me. The initial part, when Brooke doesn't know what's happening and she gets off on Saul impregnating her hit the sex god power fantasy really well. The asshole is so good at sex, nothing else matters. But for me, the basic premise of the was that Brooke could do all of that only because she didn't know any of the truth. Once she finds out Saul raped her, drugged her husband, and lied and manipulated her, having her getting off on images of Saul fucking her no longer works for me. For the revenge side of this to work for me, I'd want them to turn the tables on him and see Saul's life truly ruined. Otherwise, just leave it at Saul switches to Dora once Brooke has his baby because he's not the kind of man who has any interest in being around children.
Your Best Supporter
2025-05-17 19:15:59 +0000 UTC🙄🥱
Jake4444
2025-03-03 18:37:00 +0000 UTC💯
Jake4444
2025-03-03 18:35:49 +0000 UTCI enjoyed the this chapter. Since it was intended to he a one off chapter with a NC beginning I think it was done well for a quicker paced story. I liked that Mark got his revenge. If it continues I guess we'll see if he got away with it. But overall I enjoyed this series. But I am looking forward now to more frequent NE chapters.
Mkm560
2025-02-28 13:42:30 +0000 UTCHe dead
Jack
2025-02-28 05:17:55 +0000 UTCI do like the way this story ended and am pleased to learn that Don Silver is at least open to the idea of a continuing Tainted Conception story line sometime in the future. There’s no question that Mark and Brooke will want a second child and with this story ending with an acknowledgment of Brooke being stimulated by viewing a video of her past indiscretion, and Mark becoming sexually aroused mitigates well for a continuance of theses characters. Next time, however, instead of a clueless husband being blindsided and cuckolded unwillingly, it’ll be by Mark’s initiative that Brooke rekindles an outside bedroom love interest. Maybe Dr, Creed will be the facilitator for this new dynamic with someone diabolically more interesting than Saul. Bottom line: The two main characters, Brooke and Mark, have plenty of interesting erotic options going forward sans Saul.
Ken Cara
2025-02-27 18:30:52 +0000 UTC💯 💯
Fred.B
2025-02-27 13:22:14 +0000 UTCAn entrapment scheme would have been fun.
Darrow
2025-02-27 07:37:22 +0000 UTCYour story ideas are great and you have great imagination, but this feels rather anticlimactic as an ending. The time from when Brooke and Mark realise Saul is behind everything to the story being over feels too fast. I would’ve preferred you cut this chapter off after the penny drops for the couple and then do a final chapter based on a revenge plot (with Brooke getting ploughed one last time by Saul for good measure, maybe as some sort of entrapment scheme by the couple or something).
Fergus Rauf
2025-02-27 07:20:48 +0000 UTCSo no blood test to make sure who the father is, or is not. Looking at a new born is not how you determine who fathered a child. How you ended Saul was not how this should have played out it felt lazy and wrong, like you were rushing the story to a quick conclusion, because you were ready to move on to something else, or you just ran out of ideas.
FU
2025-02-26 20:11:05 +0000 UTC💯
MV
2025-02-26 19:01:55 +0000 UTCThis is a story so not all of the events are going to be reasonable or tie together. But what is understandable is Mark’s rage at what Saul did to him. So I can see him going at Saul really hard the way he did. Good for him. Dan in TA needs a similar type of rage to counter Lester.
Rjh200m
2025-02-26 18:55:07 +0000 UTCHere is hoping Saul comes back to give Brooke more of what she really needs! Would love more Tainted Conception!
Reader79
2025-02-26 17:36:55 +0000 UTCMark noticed that Brooke also had her phone lying beside the tub. As she closed the laptop, she picked her phone up and lit a cigarette. "Oh, Saul, when can I see you again? As much as I like watching our video, I need the real thing, baby. Can I come over now?" Mark couldn't hear what was said on the other end, but Brooke's face broke into a huge smile. She took another drag on her cigarette, smiling contentedly.
Mark Albright
2025-02-26 17:21:55 +0000 UTCBrooke is now a size queen, Mark will never satisfy her.
Richardcat
2025-02-26 17:17:02 +0000 UTCI don't see how someone addicted to sex ever overcomes that addiction. So would be hard to Imagin Brooke & Mark with much of a future unless he is going to allow her to get some on the side. She has had the taste of dirty sex with less then desirable men and I can't help but think she would seek out more of the same. Should he move forward with story. Ending not so hot.
Earl0849
2025-02-26 17:02:02 +0000 UTCThere are enough of us who *do* want Dan to get Sarah back in some form, though, however damaged they are and however hard it is for them to re-build a relationship, if they do. Quite the dilemma for Don. I can't see how he gets out of it without upsetting one side or the other, apart from Dan bringing up Lester Jr, whilst Sarah is now a strong, independent woman who leaves Dan at home whilst she gets her kicks elsewhere.
MV
2025-02-26 16:25:26 +0000 UTCWell, Mark's conduct certainly makes the case for second degree murder. And his conduct afterwards would get him nailed for murder. I don't see how Saul isn't dead, given the fall down the stairs. I assume broken neck and/or fractured skull. Saul's body's disappearance makes no sense to me. If Saul survived, he would almost certainly be injured, there'd be ambulances, EMT, safety investigators, workplace adjustments, etc. His activities would be discovered. Things would blow open, even if he kept his mouth shut. There'd be a ruckus. If Saul survived and walked away, even if minimally injured, he'd be trying to do something about Mark. Mark just has too much dirt - multiple prison terms, on Saul. Maybe Saul survived, but Daphne came along, finished him off, and started trying to hide the body and cover the tracks. Or some other blackmail victim. In any case - Mark's an idiot.
Darrow
2025-02-26 14:19:07 +0000 UTCI agree. An accidental fall down the stairs and then a panicked Mark grabbing his keys to get all the Brooke evidence would have worked better. The reason I called it a murder is that mark exclaimed that he was going to kill him and then sought out the confrontation and even evilly smiled and put him into a position to tumble down the stairs. And the rest - the cover up - seemed planned rather than a spur of the moment thing done in panic mode. Which all screams pre-meditated for a court case. A good prosecutor could convict him of pre meditated murder I also don't understand that if Saul isn't dead, why he hasn't turned Mark in for assault or attempted murder. Saul isn't an innocent party, but with that evidence destroyed by Mark, he could probably get Mark put in prison, giving him a run at Brooke. The open-ended question of is he or isn't he was a rushed addition to the story that was poorly executed.
Gabby
2025-02-26 11:21:08 +0000 UTCWell Don you finished that story off quickly …eventually. Even the last sex scene seemed hurried. Disappointed is what I am. What I thought was one of your better efforts in a story obviously wasn’t one of yours!
Raymond Arnott
2025-02-26 06:49:09 +0000 UTCOnly slight issue I have is when Mark and Brooke are coming clean about their struggles, Mark either misspoke or there was a slight error. " I swear i will never want you" seems harsh.
Jörgen Tännfäldt
2025-02-26 05:37:27 +0000 UTCDam, poor Brooke stuck with Mark the rest of her life. Every time she looks at her son she will be reminded of her soul mate Saul. After all Saul's got to keep his promise of giving Brooke another child.
Nick Krueger
2025-02-26 05:00:18 +0000 UTCI liked the ending of Detestable Liaisons much more, albeit it seemed unfinished and perhaps needed more development. Saul's death wasn't technically murder, but if it ever gets investigated, Mark has handled it so badly he'd never be able to prove his innocence. I don't think it's an escalation of Mark's character - he was always an entitled bro jock, with a strong sense of territoriality and a willingness to act out. That was why it was so fun seeing him frustrated and emasculated. He is the sort that would punch out someone in a stairwell, and send them tumbling down a flight. I think he handled it really badly with his half assed cover up, but again, consistent to the character. Still you're right, it comes far too abruptly, almost a deus ex machina.
Darrow
2025-02-26 03:57:34 +0000 UTCHmmm. Well, Saul turned out to be as stupid and vulnerable as we all expected. His schemes unraveled with stunning speed, once the threads started getting pulled. It didn't help that Saul kept getting dumber. Bragging to Brooke that it was him that impregnated her that night - that's straight up confessing to rape. There's no way he could walk past that, or work around it. And that stunt on the Zoom, that was so insanely stupid on so many levels. It really only served to show how limited and pathologically hateful he was. I'm surprised he was able to blackmail another co-worker, on the way to building a harem. It's frustrating, he was narrow, shallow, utterly slovenly and really not motivated by anything more than superficial urges. He desperately needed to be a lot smarter than he was. The minute Brooke and Mark started comparing text messages, it was all over. In some ways, even once they started figuring it out, they were slow in figuring it out. And I have no fucking idea what Mark was thinking seeking out a confrontation. There were a dozen better options. Brooke and Mark confronting the fact that Brooke's been fucking Saul was clumsily handled. It required a lot of nuance and patience, but kind of went into soap opera farce. As it is, the punch in the stairwell, and the fall felt like a cop out. He may as well have fallen accidentally, for all the genuine dramatic impact. And Mark's handling of it basically guaranteed a murder charge - tampering with the body, covering his tracks, as ineptly as he had. Mark left tons of obvious clues and pointers around, and I seriously doubt he was able to erase all traces. A couple of good detectives working the case could have Mark sewed up in 36 hours, and confessing by 48. The disappearance of the body, the subplots with Malin and Daphne, none of it seemed to go anywhere. It was all destined to come crashing down, but instead, it just neatly folded away. I dunno. Disappointing.
Darrow
2025-02-26 03:41:32 +0000 UTCWhat Gabriella said.
Mark Albright
2025-02-26 01:47:53 +0000 UTCI think compared to the insider draft, Don added a paragraph where Mark was surprised that nobody had mentioned finding a body, to maybe indicate that he wasn't dead but he somehow got up and left to never be seen again. It was a little more finite in the insider version I believe.. However, he kept in the comment about using his open eyed face to unlock the phone. Generally if the eyes of an unconscious body are open then they are dead and not just knocked out. So I think it's supposed to be left as an unanswered question, but it wasn't necessarily done very well if that was the intention. A slightly clumsy edit to try and leave it up in the air rather than being so final. I'm sure in a few years, in Dexter fashion, we'll get the "Tainted Conception: Resurrection" spin off though.
Gabby
2025-02-26 01:24:02 +0000 UTCThe ending was a little severe for my liking. I don't know how I wanted it to end, but I don't think murder was on my cards. It's a big escalation for the Mark character, and it's hard to believe that Brooke would be okay with it. Mark getting the upper hand and maybe blackmailing Saul into leaving town would have been more appropriate for the traits of the characters. Honestly I've not been overly enamored with the ending to either this or Detestable Liaisons. This, as I said, being overly severe and a big escalation of behaviour that was somewhat out of character. And the DL ending just being more of a mid story plot point in comparison to the other stories. So I'm hoping that the eventual ending to TA is a little more satisfying to the pallet.
Gabby
2025-02-26 01:10:59 +0000 UTCWhat Chris said
Terminal Itch
2025-02-25 22:58:07 +0000 UTCI liked the ending, Saul got the last laugh in my opinion...and the last climax or three. He is dead though, right?
whiterhino
2025-02-25 22:26:06 +0000 UTCInteresting
Darrow
2025-02-25 21:37:45 +0000 UTCEndings are always hard, but this one works pretty well for me. I do hope it's not a sign of what's to come in Toxic Attrraction--where I don't want Dan getting Sarah back even a little bit--but this was ultimately a very different situation than in TA. I do like how the door is left open for future Brooke/Saul (and hopefully other women) entanglements.
Chris
2025-02-25 21:30:37 +0000 UTCFirst !!
Chris N
2025-02-25 21:06:05 +0000 UTC
