[Insider] Tainted Conception: Chapter 5 (Alpha Draft/Finale)
Added 2025-01-30 20:39:14 +0000 UTCAlright folks I know the wait has been long on
Comments
Saul getting unalived was not necessary for the story to end the way it did. Not that he didn’t deserve it, just wasn’t what I was thinking or expecting. Having Brooke fantasizing about him at the end, knowing Mark “took care of him” seems out of character. Would have preferred to see Saul be outed at work by Mark, fired and discredited. Maybe the happy couple is out for dinner and see him washing dishes or working at a convenience store and that awakens her desires once again. Otherwise, enjoyed this story a lot and hope a second installment happens.
Dodge1109
2025-02-06 15:19:46 +0000 UTCWay to end the story
John Lewis
2025-02-04 23:35:18 +0000 UTCA powerful seque" of Brookes submissive transition was in parking lot, alone deciding to follow Saul. Many fascinating dominance manipulations of her by Saul could have been described by you right then. Dive bar on drive to Sauls place, 3rd party to first anal by neighbor he owed at apartment, .......
WILLYBOY
2025-02-03 16:59:06 +0000 UTCJ267 ending: I see you, I respect it.
HyoominGarbij
2025-02-02 09:54:03 +0000 UTCThere is something very wrong with people who actually root for a rapist and wish he could continue his abuse and manipulation.
Elfy
2025-02-01 01:58:59 +0000 UTCGreat story, great final chapter. I like that mark figured it out but would have preferred Saul to have maybe lost his job and got beaten up but not killed so Brooke could seek him out in future. The scene over the webcam meeting is one of the best i think you wrote. Brooke fantasising about Saul was hot, but maybe she should have been reminiscing about a scene which we didn’t get to read about and got some detail about that. I think in the end the baby should have been Marks because hes not as weak as Dan from TA and was not himself due to medicine. Maybe that part can be changed still.
Jas D
2025-01-31 23:16:39 +0000 UTCI didn't have Murder pegged as an ending, so that was fun :D Like others have said, I'm sad to see this one go. TC was actually the first story of yours I read before giving TA a chance. that said, endings are tricky and you can't please everyone. Can't wait to see what the next story is. Great job, sir. Cheers!
clay
2025-01-31 19:56:52 +0000 UTCI enjoyed the series for what it is, and i agree with this comment. Ill add that i also didnt really like the ending of him killing saul. I thought it would have been absolutely hilarious if he thought saul had died but someone had found him in time and saved his life. Though overall i like the series
Super Mecha Godzilla Herpes
2025-01-31 18:30:13 +0000 UTCI know it's just because I want the story to keep going but the ending just felt a bit rushed. I so wanted to see Saul manipulate hubby some more into pushing his wife towards Saul. It just felt too omnicient that the husband figures everything out at once. I really think it would have been better if he never figured out about the drugging of his protein shake and always had a bit of performance anxiety going forward to get an erection or ideas of his wife fucking Saul turning him on.
Deprivedone
2025-01-31 14:41:50 +0000 UTCI now have a greater appreciation for Neighborhood Encounters. Saul talks about the what if scenario at the Christmas party. Similar to Lester telling Sarah he should have done this or that or even Jessie saying what he did in Chapter 6 of TA. Burt takes that BJ from Clara so it will be interesting in future chapters if he just takes what he wants. An interesting epilogue would be to find out that Saul was a millionaire and he has a trust setup in his will. The baby could claim rights where Saul is still winning providing financial security. Maybe even a clause where Saul has some frozen sperm and Brooke gets a payout for getting pregnant with said sperm. LOL
Dingdonger
2025-01-31 04:54:24 +0000 UTCThis was a good story hate to see it go. Hope a new story can replace it time will tell, thank you Don
Fargo
2025-01-31 02:12:16 +0000 UTCI agree whole-heartedly with Royston! Great story Don - actually my favourite. I love the addition that Brooke is forever tainted with the memories of the intense sexual experiences with Saul. Will she go hunting to repeat those memories with others? Will the therapist somehow intrude threatening to reveal Mark's role in Saul's death? Many possibilities. Thanks again Don!!!
OdieK
2025-01-30 23:02:07 +0000 UTCExcellent stuff Mr Silver. Fitting ending. The bastard got his just deserts, but Brooke is obviously missing his cock!
Royston smith
2025-01-30 22:23:03 +0000 UTCGive me a break. Why have them together at the end? Mark was clearly never into it. He didn't get off on this. He got revenge on fat ass and Brooke's a skank. At least be consistent with all your characters. That last scene is pathetic. Maybe for once ignore your weirdo discord club who all seem to relish the rape. I mean, Lester is a sick fuck as well, but Dan is practically useless and you have kept him that way.
Elfy
2025-01-30 21:58:49 +0000 UTCHonestly, I thought she would've been trying for #2 with Saul. Didn't see that end coming.
Chris K
2025-01-30 21:46:12 +0000 UTC
