[Insider] Toxic Attraction Chapter 24 Alpha Draft
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Enjoyed your appendix to story, I loved it, Dan loves getting humiliated
h mon
2025-01-23 01:46:50 +0000 UTCHi Don: In connection with what I will call censorship, I agree with you that making changes to Sarah’s actions would negatively affect, and perhaps completely change, the story. I recall that years ago, paperback porn books used to have a warning or moral before the story so that it could not be said that the work has no redeeming social value and hence could not be considered pornographic. Perhaps you could do likewise and have something like this: Warning. This is a cautionary tale of what can befall a couple who decide to experiment in extramarital sex. As the story shows, adultery can lead to negative, latent characteristics and desires being uncovered, which can lead to compulsive actions that negatively affect one’s professional and social standing. This is not unlike what a drug addict may experience, which is behavior that he or she could not have imagined he or she would have engaged. Hence, the story will show that staying to the straight and narrow and societal norms is the best way to go through life. I have also written down some of the things I would like to see in the next chapter. Take them and use them if you please or ignore them. I trust in your judgment as I appreciate what you have already written. I think that Lester and Jesse need to have some interaction with Dan after the “engagement party”. I can see Lester sending a message to Dan, saying he is sorry Dan could not attend the party celebrating Lester’s engagement to Dan’s wife, but not to worry because she was well taken care of by both Lester and Dan and that she herself entertained both of them admirably. Enclosed for your enjoyment is a audio tape I made of the event and you can hear for yourself how well she was satisfied by both Jesse and me. I think that Dan runs into Jesse after listening to the tape. He is completely confused upon seeing Jesse. Rage immediately surges up and he makes his way to Jesse to confront him, but the rage is supplanted by the erotic image his mind conjured up when hearing his wife say that Jesse was much better than he was when Jesse had his cock in Dan’s wife. Now, as that scene replayed in his mind, his cock starting to stiffen remembering hearing his wife say how much better Jesse was than he. He was deflated and defeated hearing that but contrary wise his cock got even harder. He jerked off to it not needing many strokes. And now, seeing Jesse, he could not help thinking of it. In his demoralized state, he could only recognize his diminished status with his wife and see Jesse, his former subordinate, as his superior. Upon seeing Dan approach him, Jesse literally ducked his head down as if expecting a blow from Dan. He immediately said, “sorry Dan. I didn’t know all that Lester had planned. I just did what he told me he took that picture and send it to you.” Jesse, nervously, awaited dance reaction. He thought there might be an explosion and perhaps physical harm will befall him as Dan was a man he was. However, Dan surprised him; he just mumbled some in response. Jesse felt a surge of confidence. Dan seemed downcast and defeated. He wanted to get back at Dan now with the fear that he had inspired in him and for the implicit threat he made against Jesse in Minneapolis. Jesse and Byron rethinking that they had Dan by the short hairs but Dan, in no uncertain terms, disabused Jesse of that notion. Jesse felt small after the encounter. Now, seem to be his chance to strike back. “Well, I understand that Lester sent you an audiotape of the party. Too bad you couldn’t make it. I’m sure you would have enjoyed seeing me mount your wife and see her reaction to my sliding my big cock into her married. She loved it, which I’m sure you heard on the tape. Don’t blame her. She just needs a bigger cock than what you have to please her.” Dan just stood there, continuing to look stunned. He was aware that he was getting sexually excited at the humiliation this little bastard Jesse was heaving on him. It seemed odd that this humiliation was thrilling. He was envisioning Jesse mounted on his wife and his wife loving it and saying that she loved it. It seemed to him that now there was another man who could have his wife whenever he wanted. Jesse decided to twist the knife a bit more now that it appeared that he had Dan on the ropes. “I just loved shooting my sperm into your wife’s womb and what made it even more enjoyable was that when I did, she came on my cock. She was loving it. Dan continued to look lost, dealing with his conflicting emotions and feelings, but again, as usual, his cock outvoted all. He just stood there, passively, accepting the humiliation Jesse was dumping on him. This was too good to be true for Dan’s former subordinate so he kept going. Payback was a delight for Jesse. When he and Bryon had formed an alliance, he felt on top of the world, thinking he had Dan by the short hairs and reveled in Bryon’s humiliation of Dan. Then things changed when Dan let him know in no uncertain terms that he had the goods on Jesse. Jesse now felt certain that he was once again in charge with his former boss. “Dan, I have a deal for you. You will not make any trouble for me and will do as I say and in return I will either let you watch me fuck your wife. We know she wants that now that she has tasted it and realized that I can provide much better sex than you. Or I will agree not to fuck your wife. It is your choice. Which do you choose?” Dan, stood there stock still. He could not believe the excitement he felt but did not want to say anything. Jesse said, “Speak up Dan. Tell me what you choose.” Finally Dan, hanging his head, muttered, “Watch.” “What was that, Dan? Speak up.” “Watch,” Dan said again his humiliation and defeat complete. “Good boy,” Jesse said.
Chris Casey
2024-11-26 15:28:25 +0000 UTCI would like Lester to keep Jesse in the running with him. The both of them fuck Sarah into complete exhaustion. For Sarah to be sexually hypnotised the entire night through the intensest pleasure, degradation and submission. I like the thought of Lester telling Sarah that Dan is being detained by police. With Lester saying he is responsible. All while Lester and Jesse continue to co-ordinate their sexual conquest of a willing Slut in training
Gee
2024-11-25 00:21:04 +0000 UTCI want the second sex scene to be expanded and want Lester to remind Sarah that he tricked Dan that night and remind her that she is Lester’s and to not forget it and then they fuck again
KB
2024-11-24 14:12:07 +0000 UTCScene expansion ideas: 1- Would like to see Jesse whispering in Sara’s ear so Lester can’t hear him, saying how he would be better for her than Dan or Lester and that he would never let her be taken advantage of like she currently is. Does Sara tell Dan or Lester what he said? 2- would love to hear some of the conversation after Lester Popped the question and Sara accepted. 3- as has been mentioned, Lester needs to get Sara to admit why it’s ok for Jesse to not have to pull out or wear a condom, what form of BC is she currently using. 4- definitely need to have Lester being more assertive to get her to stop the BC. 5- we need to hear Sara reflecting on how Lester is taking all the milestone moments in her life and making them better. He’s taking her on better dates, buys her nicer clothes, gave her a better wedding night experience, saved her company and her job, has been showing he’s a better wage earner, and now has given her a memorable engagement and has even shown her how sharing her can be handled better by someone that knows what they are doing. 6- these are just my thoughts. Love the story so far and will be looking forward to the finished chapter…
Dodge1109
2024-11-23 15:07:47 +0000 UTCMy preferred two expanded scenes DS mentions: 1) dialogue between Sarah/Lester at dinner before and after proposal 2) expand the sex at the hotel. “Round 2” is a shitty cliffhanger.
J Lewis
2024-11-23 12:44:31 +0000 UTCHi Robert Remember Lester tried to enter the Williams household with the key he had cut from the spare kept in the kitchen. Lester had a bottle of fertility pills, I believe he wanted to swap out for Sarah’s contraceptive pills. Lester’s key could not gain access to the home due to Dan changing the locks. Lester was filthy with Sarah for telling Dan about the spare key. Lester wanted to punish Sarah with pleasure, to make her fall from grace, more permanent. Lester’s back up plan is to muddy Sarah so she can never get clean. Probably by having numerous men and or women, involved with group orgies on Sarah. Imagine Sarah’s Mouth, pussy & ass filled with thrusting cocks, her holes being filled with cum, hands grouping her breast, men painting her face and chest with cum, in an all night long fuckfest! There is a high probability that Sarah would break and become Lester’s willing sex slave. Remember too Lester’s thoughts! He wants to be the first to breed her. Lester’s after thought was that he may let Jesse breed her next!
Gee
2024-11-23 00:41:21 +0000 UTCHe got a telling-off from Marcus, but I don't think he was let go. Things have been very quiet re the Lincoln Group. I can't help feeling they'll be involved in the story again before the end.
MV
2024-11-22 23:11:59 +0000 UTCThat’s what I’m hoping for and I think his relationship with Jesse will come back to haunt him. The guy is a weasel in his own right and can be used by Dan to his advantage. I’m a little confused as to Dans relationship with Byron and Lincoln group now - did he get let go with Jesse?
Vinny
2024-11-22 20:26:18 +0000 UTCThe other person we haven't mentioned for a while is Marcus, and his team of hacker-chasers. Whilst Lester is playing his power games with Dan, the net might be closing in on Lester behind the scenes?
MV
2024-11-22 14:17:15 +0000 UTCI miss the impregnation talk between the Sarah and Lester . That was always hot to read. Would have been perfect since they just got engaged. Don please play it up. Lester is well aware of Sarah’s use of birth control pills so have her admit it. Then Lester can finally sabotage them or have her agree to quit taking them since they are officially “engaged”. Lastly please don’t have Jesse around for round two. Let the couple celebrate their engagement. Or better yet have Jesse hear Sarah say pet names and “I love you” to Lester. It will tear down Jesse’s image of Sarah Lastly when is Lizzie making a return?
Charlie_Chuckles
2024-11-22 04:59:47 +0000 UTCMore impregnating talk yes
KB
2024-11-21 19:23:41 +0000 UTCI see it as he is forcing her to fuck whoever he chooses as he mentioned before. He’s showing her that she is his personal slut and will remain that way from here on out
KB
2024-11-21 19:22:37 +0000 UTCGod, what a hot chapter! I hope that Lester finally gets around to it in the next chapters and wins Sarah's fertility - maybe Jesse will play an unpleasant role for him here too! Overall, a really great chapter! But I would have liked a bit more of Jesse's POV and maybe one or two thoughts more from Sarah about him...since the question is always whether Sarah is using contraception, Lester could have asked: "Do you want to take the risk of pregnancy by him coming inside you?" - then he could have been sure whether Sarah is really using contraception....I also hope for a few details about the second round tonight...keep it up!!!
JPaxx
2024-11-21 02:18:40 +0000 UTCSome great points.
MV
2024-11-20 22:16:31 +0000 UTCThings will go sideways for Lester now - Dan has that picture of Jesse in front of the hotel door showing that he clearly has ties to Lester. How is blackmail supposed to work? He literally bugged the entire house and unlawfully invaded the privacy of his tenants. That will just put increased scrutiny on him and his hacker activities. I could see his blackmail attempts as being embarrassing at best for Dan and Sarah but makes him much more vulnerable. Can then pile on Lizzie’s claim as well.
Vinny
2024-11-20 22:09:28 +0000 UTCI enjoyed the chapter overall, even though I'm Team Dan/Sarah. I like the fact that Dan now has some green shoots of hope (starting to put the jigsaw pieces together, planning to plant cameras, etc). It's inconceivable that we aren't soon heading to a confrontation between Dan and Sarah. She will surely lie/omit/make excuses, making it look like she's taking Lester's 'side'. If Lester sees Dan's voicemail on the phone, he could delete it. He could then try for as long as he can to stop Sarah communicating with Dan? This buys him more time to work on her before she gets to talk properly to Dan. If Dan doesn't get out of jail in time, Lester would no doubt keep her busy on the Saturday. If he took her away from the apartment, she might have to go home (with Lester?) before she gets to talk to him. I would have thought that impossible in the past, but who knows now? A lot of things could happen between now and Sunday?
MV
2024-11-20 19:31:38 +0000 UTCThey must come into play at some point. However, now that Dan's suspicions are raised, can it be too long before he searches for cameras in the apartment? Maybe if Lester takes her on a date, but leaves Dan back at base?
MV
2024-11-20 18:52:41 +0000 UTCI’m guessing Dan will uncover most of Lester’s shenanigans. The question is other than telling Sarah, what will he do? I’m sure his intentions would be to inform the authorities. However if you remember in Chapter 20 ( I think) Lester is thinking to himself how his plan is unfolding and mentions “he hasn’t needed to play his ‘ace in the hole’ yet”. His protection is likely his sex tapes of Sarah and probably Dan too. Blackmail may be rapidly approaching.
J Lewis
2024-11-20 18:38:02 +0000 UTCGreat chapter. Loved the wedding ring part. Nice to see Dan finally beginning to put the dots together although my guess things will turn against him as Sarah descends into the vipers’ pit Lester has planned for her.
OdieK
2024-11-20 18:16:57 +0000 UTCWell I think Lester sees it a little differently. He thinks that Sarah is cumming so hard with Jesse because he ordered her to, and he's probably not far from the truth. This whole scene with Jesse is Lester's idea of a way for Sarah to point out her place, where she doesn't even get to choose her partners and her ‘daddy’ does it for her. So he's clearly not afraid of competition from Jesse.
Daniel
2024-11-20 16:26:04 +0000 UTCThe restaurant setup and scene itself were masterful. “Table for one Mr Dekuck?”
Vinny
2024-11-20 15:44:36 +0000 UTCI’m not a fan at all - I’d rather have Jesse in a condom. I think this is a big mistake by Lester. The way it’s written now, Sarah and Jesse go past just a fuck - with their simultaneous orgasms, it seems pretty intimate.
Robert Smith
2024-11-20 15:34:21 +0000 UTCWould definitely love to see another sex scene added to the front of the chapter. Even a quick Lester/Sarah office fuck. These chapters just don’t get it done with one sex scene, even if it’s longer. Would also love to see Lester kick Jesse out after he finishes. Maybe once Lester pushes back inside Sarah, he can say something like “oh, jesse, you’re still here? show’s over now, you need to get the fuck out. And don’t forget, I own her. Isn’t that right, Sarah?” “Yes, Daddy. Make me cum again!”
Robert Smith
2024-11-20 15:23:09 +0000 UTCThey should have let Ned play with her, he was watching correct, perhaps they can add him in the final. Would like a Lester/Otis scene as well. More impregnation talk and rimming would be good.
whiterhino
2024-11-20 14:25:26 +0000 UTCIt is long over due and about time for Sarah to take a cock inside her tight virgin ass. Sarah riding Lester big cock while sucking on Jesse's cock. Then Jesse pulls his cock out of Sarah's mouth, only to go behind her and put it in her tight ass. The synchronized rhythm of two cocks, one pushing in while the other pulls out until she has a mind blowing orgasm. Sarah sandwiched between them trapped as both cocks penetrating her simultaneously
Carl Greppi
2024-11-20 13:22:07 +0000 UTCGreat chapter in my opinion. Loved Lester’s master machinations. Also, Dan’s putting together of the puzzle. The sex scene was excellent. It’s not just the sex but the factors that surround it that make them so good. The blindfold/stranger, the sexy dress, the proposal/Jesse/Sarah loving being fucked by 2 men’s cocks. Her being turned on by making them come back to back. All the other scenes really well done. Improvements: make the final sex scene longer. Showing Lester, and perhaps Jesse fucking her through the night. A double team scenario would be good. Add a sex scene at the beginning involving Lester and Otis. Sarah’s denial of any such shenanigans to Dan later on could then be altered to fit by evasion or admission.
Royston smith
2024-11-20 13:10:34 +0000 UTCSo, this version is no different from the initial post as far as I can see. Even the spelling mistakes. So, how come it was taken down by Patreon Don??
Royston smith
2024-11-20 11:50:14 +0000 UTCTechnically, Lester is still only planning to make Sarah fertile through the machinations of the pill, i.e. at the time of sex with Jesse, she's unlikely to be pregnant. But from a psychological point of view, yes, it could be controversial here that Lester so easily let another man cum in his ‘property’. On the other hand, if it's all part of his plan to corrupt Sarah, why not?
Daniel
2024-11-20 09:18:13 +0000 UTCLoved it but first thought after the initial quick read through: if Lester is interested in getting Sarah pregnant, why would he let Jesse take her unprotected? That doesn’t make sense. I can totally see him letting Jesse fuck her, just with a condom on.
Robert Smith
2024-11-18 23:20:04 +0000 UTCYep! Corrected it! Thanks.
DonSilver
2024-11-18 21:17:00 +0000 UTCDon shouldn’t this be chapter 24?
OdieK
2024-11-18 21:06:05 +0000 UTC
