[Insider] Toxic Attraction: Chapter 19 Alpha Draft
Added 2024-06-19 19:38:42 +0000 UTCHey there guys, I hope all is well in your corn
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I think dan will ultimate take control or "" over Sarah by adding other people, maybe is something that Lester start but the way dan will reconnect with her... idk, maybe.
Sly7G
2024-06-27 23:44:25 +0000 UTCDan in ultimate turn on will offer Sara to Jesse that is the biggest reward excitement
h mon
2024-06-26 03:59:25 +0000 UTCSP, top notch and constructive analysis. Loved the suggestions around the kids and how Lester could help Sarah at work. Much better way to go than nuclear annihilation of Sarah’s work and family life that Lester seems to be planning, or at least mulling over. I confess though I would love to see Lester sharing her with “others”. Yes, it is a bit of stretch, given Lester’s personality. I get that. However, two factors lead me to think it is more plausible than you think. 1) It could be argued that it would strengthen his psychological hold over her if he was able to get her to do anything he wanted, including two dicks. As long as he could control the situation I think he would go for it. This is because he realises it is one of her deepest desires and he could spin it as , look I am fulfilling your fantasy. 2) I am not sure he will have a choice in the matter as Jesse and Byron may take that away from him via Dan. Anyway, as you say we can suggest, but only Don can deliver.
Royston smith
2024-06-25 17:14:38 +0000 UTCFirst, loved the new chapter. Huge fan of DS and anxiously await each new alpha draft and each finalized chapter. Since he is open to suggestions and let’s us see the alpha draft, I’ll offer a few suggestions. Maybe he’ll find that a couple are helpful. Wonder if DS has a photo of Sarah in her white blouse with black pencil skirt and black heels ready to go with final version of Chapter 19. During the initial scene when Lester is going down on Sarah, she might think that no one has ever made her feel so good… that no one else, especially Dan, has instinctively known how to touch and lick her so exquisitely and wonder how could a man like Lester be the one to do this for her. While Lester is tongue-fucking her asshole, Sarah has some thoughts about how Lester knows her body better than Dan ever could or would… that a part of her feels that she has missed out by confining herself to Dan and marriage…. This expands on her thought that “today she realized how naïve she had been” it’s unhelpful for Lester to fantasize about getting rid of kids and Dan. After the phone call with Sarah’s mom, seems that it would be much more realistic for Sarah to agree with her Dad’s suggestions and ask her parents to take the grandkids indefinitely while sarah and dan are trying to deal with all of the stresses of their work situation. Sarah would then have flexibility to interact with her kids at limited times. If there was a scenario where Lester actually met the kids, then he could use his hacking skills to know the girls favorite video games and know their favorite performers and get them tickets to those concerts through his hacking and money making skills. Thus, the girls would find him physically “troll=like” but actually understand some of their gaming interests and help them get to see their favorite concerts. When Lester has Sarah on the kitchen counter, that’s where he needs to slow it down again. Keep Sarah hanging on the edge of her orgasm while sharing more feeling with Sarah, acknowledge that the call is from Dan but that they will be ignoring it. Finding other spots (kissing at the nape of her neck, etc.) to heighten the lust. With her final orgasm on the countertop, would be great if she spurted… and she realizes that dan had never made her spurt (unless I’m missing something from past chapters). Of course, the activities make Sarah late for work …. It contributes to her feeling that her life is breaking down and becoming unstable and feeling that Lester is the only “island” of safety and comfort and excitement in her life (although Lester contributes to the instability). During the hospitali board meeting, Sarah feels her life is out of control because she is tardy and gets criticized for this publicly. Would be interesting if John or other board members went out of their way to support Sarah by emphasizing that Sarah and her team/external contractors saved the day for the hospital’s security breach. Importance: further establishes in sarah’s mind, that her positive standing in the company at this time is due to Lester’s work. I agree that sarah would be incredibly upset with lester if she was caught with him at the hospital and it led to her getting fired. Instead Sarah would better respond to Lester manipulating a situation where sarah can save the day with lester’s help. I agree that lester needs to separate sarah from the kids… temporarily with her parents…. Then, maybe have a training program where sarah is absent from the house for a couple of months while Dan is back at home taking care of kids or grandparents are taking care of kids. Not as farfetched as it sounds, active duty military rely on this all of the time during deployments. Not cool to have thoughts about having dan lose the kids in public. Again, identify situations where lester actually interacts with the kids and uses his computer skills and hacking skills to identify what they like and ingratiate himself as much as this troll-like guy could. During the dinner scene, lester provides a sympathetic ear and allows sarah to vent. Would be interesting if Lester found a couple of deficiencience in the hospital system and suggested that Sarah could bring them up as interventions at hospital board meetings to raise her prominence in this setting. During the blowjob scene, Sarah finds herself trying to assert herself. She then begins a dialogue to say much more strongly that Lester’s cock belongs to her. That she questions Lester about who give the better blow jobs-her or Lizzie? Who would he rather fuck-her or Lizzie… who has the better body.. who gives the better blow job…. Who would he rather have a baby with… Not so sure about the stuff about having someone else join them… can see how lester would want someone else to observe… just doesn’t seem like lester would actually want to share sarah after “conquering her” although sharing her would be a different way to demonstrate his dominance…. Yet sarah is special to him and woudn’t want to share her. Would be terrific if the final version of Chapter 19 included the shower scene, but I’m probably being greedy. Would be interesting for the shower scene to open with Sarah feeling aroused, but unfulfilled. Beginning to touch herself and finds herself fantasizing about Lester… contrasting him with Dan and admitting to herself that it’s Lester who is helping her at work and that it’s been ages since Dan mader her dinner and that Lester is actually financially much more stable than Dan. Of course, It’s all part of Sarah succumbing to Lester’s mind games, but she starts thinking that the sex and repeating to herself that something that feels so good can’t actually be wrong. Then finds that she can’t actually bring herself off because she needs Lester and his big cock… that she can’t get “her sweet release”. Then, Lester walks into the shower (or whatever other scenario DS is planning… like finding Lester ready to do another massage with candles lit and music playing and fresh sheets on the bed, which Lester put there earlier in the day) and she feels that it represents a “real connection” between them. So, Sarah initiates the sex, which becomes more emotional lovemaking. In the midst of this, she actually remembers enjoying being out to dinner with Lester and how much fun it was to tease his friends during D&D and then leaps to thinking about other possible scenarios where it’s her and Lester as a couple. Maybe Lester is already aware of these things (like going to the farmer’s market) that Lester is aware of because of snooping around the house or because of his hacking skills. As Sarah stated earlier: “a sorrow and a longer for a ‘what if””. Lester talks about these things to further mess with Sarah’s mind, leading her to feel like there is even a stronger connection and having her spontaneously tell Lester that she loves him as she orgasms. General approach after this? Dan finds them and there is some kind of argument and Sarah actually says that she needs some space and that Dan should go back to Chicago (while Lester stays)…. This might represent the end of the 2nd arc where it seems that Lester has truly replaced Dan. Again, these are just suggestions. I’m happy to follow along wherever DS takes the story. If he finds any of these ideas useful and incorporates them, then that’s great. If not, then that’s fine, too. Will just be anxiously awaiting the next chapter!
sp
2024-06-25 07:01:38 +0000 UTCInteresting thoughts. I am thinking the latter. If he is low budget there may also be weaknesses Lester could exploit on behalf of Sarah, if he wished. I can’t see Sarah being attracted to him. There may be tension between the two though as he sounds like the kind of inadequate jerk who treads on others to make himself look better.
Royston smith
2024-06-25 05:58:12 +0000 UTCWhat are your views on Sarah's description of Thornhill? She remarks that he isn't as distinguished as his LinkedIn profile, his hair needed a trim, and under the expensive "looking" suit was an old, discolored shirt with a frayed collar. So I'm wondering two things: Is his negative appearance actually attractive to Sarah, in that his appearance is beneath her (much like Lester?). Might that actually become a turn-on for her? Did the hospital board go low-budget on a new CEO, one who isn't spit-shined and polished, not a top tier executive but maybe one who comes from the trenches? After all, this is a community hospital and not one that's part of a major health system with a big budget.
Sigma
2024-06-25 03:32:09 +0000 UTCSorry that should have read loose ends.
Royston smith
2024-06-24 20:58:31 +0000 UTCLoose ends
Royston smith
2024-06-24 20:57:14 +0000 UTCOk Tim, I missed that. It may have been on discord which I don’t have access to. However, if that were true we are in arc/phase 3 now, so that means there will be 4 arcs, as the current one will seem to be ending soon with Lester’s final victory ( or Dan’s comeback). There are simply too many ends for it to end soon though. Until I see the evidence in Don’s own fair hand I will go with what I know from the story itself to be true. Lester talks in phases. Phase 1 was getting his cock inside Sarah and phase 2 he mentions immediately after that, but doesn’t say what it entails. That is all the evidence we have unless someone can show me a quote from Don himself.
Royston smith
2024-06-24 20:56:47 +0000 UTCIm pretty sure Don said the condom coming off was an arc
tim
2024-06-24 19:12:06 +0000 UTCI have one critical, but I hope, constructive comment on this chapter to make. But first, let me set this in context. In general, this is an impressive chapter, with intense, dark and comic elements and two fantastic sex scenes. It’s part of an exceptional series, which has me waiting expectantly for each new chapter. The only slight criticism I have concerns the inner workings of Lester’s mind in this chapter. I have already indicated my disapproval of the disappearing of the children, but there is something else that doesn’t sit right with me.Lester, reviewing his tactics as to how best to gain full control over Sarah, muses that his best case scenario would be for Sarah to lose her job due to being caught in sexual impropriety with Lester at her work. To me Lester is at his best using deception and low cunning. Not full frontal assault. Sarah was mad enough he made her late for work; she would go nuclear on him if he made her lose her job. Surely, Lester would be capable of manipulating the situation to look good in Sarah’s eyes whilst simultaneously dropping Dan in the shit. After all Sarah seems to think he is “evolving” . He listened to her unburdening of her job woes over the dinner table. It would be just like Lester to use that information to make him look good by intervening to get Thornhill the push while making Sarah the heroine in the boards eyes. Then, not only has he saved the hospital from bad rabbit but he has gained her promotion. All while Dan hasn’t even texted her to ask her if she has got the job or not. Lester has constantly been manipulating the situation to gain her approval. Lots of little touches , like the massage he knows she loves, cooking her a meal to relieve her stress etc etc. At the same time Dan hasn’t been satisfying her both sexually or emotionally. When was the last time Dan gave her a massage, or fucked her in the shower, she muses. To sum up, it would make more sense for Lester to use his manipulative powers to gain full control over Sarah and boot Dan into the long grass, than use the destructive tactics of destroying her home and work life completely. Using Dan’s fantasies to gain exclusivity over Sarah’s pussy whilst Dan is her helpless drone and Lester’s patsy is a win win situation for Lester. However, if he pushes the nuclear button, will Sarah, having lost her job and her self worth, still be the Sarah he desired originally?
Royston smith
2024-06-24 14:04:48 +0000 UTCLet's not wait a full month for chapter 20...number 2 after several rereads..Don...keep the kids out of it...it'll destroy the story
Mike Kogel
2024-06-24 13:58:04 +0000 UTCI did say that SD. “She.. knows she only slept with Lester during her current cycle”.
Royston smith
2024-06-23 18:43:52 +0000 UTCLoving the mounting storm that is ahead. Sarah is really becoming the corrupted (or liberated?) slut I was hoping to see. I like that she is playing with Lester's manner of speaking to her, calling herself momma. Cute. So was her wondering if her 'type' had changed. A beautiful payoff for so much build up. Once again, I have no substantial suggestions. I would have enjoyed Lester instructing Sarah to not waste any of his cum, after he blew all over her. She was specifically working for her pudding and he just made that harder. It also feels just that much dirtier than rubbing it in (n ot that that is bad). Also, and this is an odd point for me to focus on, but before the blowjob stats it describes Lester descending in Lester. I know that that word conjures images of a predator striking. but it also creates the mental image of Lester towering over her, when he is noticeably shorter than Sarah. I just wonder if another word would create a stronger sense of this (which in the context of the story is seen as a negative trait)? Even having her stooping down to his level (literally) would be good to describe at some point. As I said, very minor notes in a dark and compelling chapter. And now, things I'm hoping to see relatively soon: Sarah being the unambiguous initiator of sex (she's invited it, but still refuses to mentally acknowledge that she is there for sex with Lester; another date night with the new dynamic, just to witness what that would be like; Sarah professing love for Lester and treating him like a legitimate new boyfriend (with the honeymoon period and all); anilinguss and anal sex (hope so with all this teasing); Dan having a resurgence in the story (with a new and powerful employer at his back). And generally, hoping for much more dark and twisted storytelling! Well done, Don.
WJ
2024-06-23 17:56:46 +0000 UTCThere's a much easier tell for Sarah. When was the last time Sarah and Dan had sex? It hasnt been described for a very long time.
SierraDelta
2024-06-23 09:43:15 +0000 UTCDan in chapter 18 musing on Sarah’s admission she likes her dares with Lester: “it played into some of her fantasies, but she couldn’t actually like him. Dan reluctantly felt his cock begin to stir at the idea. He tightened his fist, trying to will the thoughts out of his head. His nails dug into his palm, causing a tinge of pain that he focused on until the thoughts receded back to the depths of the depraved parts of his brain”. He would definitely be turned on by Lester having exclusive rights over her pussy and having a relationship with him.
Royston smith
2024-06-22 22:05:37 +0000 UTCAn interesting thought. Sarah will know who the Father is if she is pregnant. It can only be Lester, as she knows for sure Dan is fixed, but only has Lester’s word for it that he is. She also knows she has only slept with Lester during her current cycle. But Dan won’t. As far as he knows Lester is fixed. So, the natural conclusion would be she has slept with someone else. He may think she has had another affair , or Lester has introduced her to a “stranger” for unprotected sex. After all if he finds her sleeping with Lester when he gets home and she admits that she initiated some of their liaisons, why would he not think she has become more promiscuous and started enjoying sleeping around. And Lester… well Lester would play the innocent to exploit the situation and drive a further wedge between them.
Royston smith
2024-06-22 18:22:26 +0000 UTCElfy, you need to give your evidence for that statement. In what hasn’t it advanced?
Royston smith
2024-06-21 22:17:17 +0000 UTCDan, make sure you don’t let Lester anywhere near your secure sentinel laptop. There may be trouble ahead.
Royston smith
2024-06-21 22:14:31 +0000 UTCNot sure of the logic that says the 2nd arc has ended. Arc 1 was chapters 1-7 and ended with Lester finally fucking Sarah. So, what is the theme of arc 2? It must be Lester’s complete domination of Sarah, getting her to admit her pussy is his exclusively with Dan willingly buying into that fantasy. That is why Don has spent so much time with Lester and Sarah only, developing their relationship and showing Sarah gradually being broken down. She lets him fuck her in her office, then he invades the marital home and breeds her, then he makes her late so she will begin to let her work life slip as har home life slipped when she was late picking up the kids. He wants her dependent on him financially, emotionally and sexually. Soon he will have his final victory. That could happen in the next chapter or subsequent ones. If anyone has a convincing alternative theory please air it because I certainly cant think of another credible theme/ ending for the 2nd arc.
Royston smith
2024-06-21 14:23:38 +0000 UTCI see discussion about the end of Arc 2/start of Arc 3. There’s also been comments of this topic on Discord (with some belief we are in Arc 3 already). I hope not but I see Chapter 20 as a great opportunity to end Arc 2. Hear me out…L and S have shower sex of course but afterwards S does not protest L spending the night again but tells L, “if you’re planning to fuck me again in the morning, we have to do it early because I cannot be late to work again.” So it’s during this early morning sex session that Dan arrives home (assuming it’s a minimum of 4+ hrs travel time from DC to Middleton). He enters and hears S and L having raunchy passionate sex and bursts into the bedroom screaming for L to get out (maybe he screams “pineapple!”…haha). L calmly leaves as Sarah gets up herself needing to get ready for work. D tells S they need to talk but S says they can talk tonight after work because she cannot be late. D pinches his nose and thinks, “WTF”. At work L seduces S again (as mentioned in Ch19) but this time Otis catches them and with Lester’s encouragement they have a 3-way to buy his silence. In middle of this they are caught by the CEO who immediately terminates Sarah. Sarah comes home early carrying her box and D is there still stewing about earlier. D finally gives S an ultimatum, quit Lester or he’s out. Next scene is L hearing a knock at his hotel door and opens it to find S standing there. “Happy Birthday Lester”. (If DS stays true to the timeline this is Thursday…L’s fake birthday). Ok ok probably none of that is going to happen but it’s fun to guess how DS spins this sordid tale.
J Lewis
2024-06-21 13:48:31 +0000 UTCI don't know where this is headed, but I will point out again, a lot has happened in this chapter. Basically, Don is jamming a lot of content in there, which does unfortunately create gaps. As an example, no thoughts from Sarah as she drove to work, which means theres a lot of things that could have gone on in her mind. But at the same time, leaving it blank provides lots of writing options. In any event, I think one of the things that may ultimately hurt this series is the actual length of it. It will impact readability and not everyone will want to invest their time to read so many chapters, which may then impact income for DS. Similarly, I imagine the draw of completing the other stories might be more interesting, since they have so much more scope to explore. Hopefully these all combine to ensure a faster ending than the 40+ chapters I guessed around chapter 14 or so (I think). Coming back to the story, I think this is a great way to create a bigger wedge between Sarah and Dan; Dan turning up and seeing Lester's car, entering the house, and hearing Sarah's moans. Hard to talk her way out of that, given how coldly she treated Dan last chapter. Either way, if Sarah/Dan win or if Lester win, Sarah and Dan have to have more pressure and stress in their relationship that makes it worse than how it is now, so they can rebuild it stronger. Else it will really challenge the readers (us) to buy into the premise. If they dont rebuild stronger because they cant set aside their differences, then thats how Lester succeeds. As for, Lester sharing Sarah, I suspect thats a fantasy - he doesnt want to share her, but would only do it to to break Dan, but even then he doesnt think much of Jesse either so it wouldnt be something he really would want to do. He wants someone he can control, and Jesse isnt that. I'm not sure what his plans are for her career, he cant fuck her all day so post-sex, what is he going to do with her (supposed) intelligence kicking back in asking questions. The only thing is, if it comes to pass (any of this), then I think Lester still hasnt experienced a single L in the entire series to date (the slight by Dan, as Lester felt, doesnt really count). That's not a good thing. [edit] I dont think I've said this, but I have now landed on wanting to see Sarah and Dan succeed over Lester. If anything were to make me switch back, it would be making Lester more human and fallible, but that would break the flow of the plot. He is an interesting character, but given his role as antagonist, its hard to develop who he is as a person without breaking so much of how this story works. If DS did that, he'd be better off writing actual novels.
SierraDelta
2024-06-21 11:52:43 +0000 UTCI think the next chapter will mark the end of arc 2, with Lester gaining full control over Sarah. Her pussy will be entirely Lester’s , with Dan allowed to watch if he behaves himself. If you think about it that would probably be Dan’s ultimate fantasy too, although he wouldn’t admit it himself. The interesting thing at that point, is in which direction will the story go then? Mr Silver has set up some interesting side plots that, I believe, will be fully developed in arc 3. Jesse/Byron/Cronos/Otis all may try to wrest control of Sarah from Lester, with Dan watching from the sidelines powerless to intervene. Dan has already given us a glimpse of his darker Sarah fantasies in 17. For example, he muses on her picking a stranger up in a bar and bringing him back to their hotel room for Dan to watch her being fucked by him. So, actually I can see him giving in to these dark impulses and capitulating to Jesse et al. We will see.
Royston smith
2024-06-21 08:29:38 +0000 UTCMonth
Mike Kogel
2024-06-21 03:03:36 +0000 UTCSarah admitted to herself if Lester took her upstairs she knew she was done Lester will wait till she's out of the shower...surprise..bam the downfall begins remember danwas boarding the plane during the end of the bj..he called..when all is done Lester has all night to claim a unprotected Sarah...I bet he's longer due to phone call to Dan that he's needed elsewhere still.lt maybe 2 days before Dan gets back...it'd be nice not to have to wait another one t
Mike Kogel
2024-06-21 03:03:23 +0000 UTCDead right, the children scenario is out of bounds. I predict Dan will catch them, send Sarah to the shower and proceed to kick Lester out. Before they reach the front door, Lester will tell Dan he has all of the video which he will spread to everyone important to them if Dan doesn’t cooperate. When Sarah enters the bedroom from her shower, she is delighted to find Lester on the bed naked with Dan in the chair in the corner telling her he wants to see Lester put a baby in her. Sarah thinks it’s all still part of Dans fantasy with no clue he is being blackmailed. From here the dark path will commence with Dan in the spare room whenever Lester is around and only permitted to have sex with Sarah when Lester permits him.
Mel
2024-06-21 01:13:41 +0000 UTCSo, the dark web is being woven tighter and tighter around Sarah. Soon she will be both unreachable and unrecognisable to Dan. Remember, one of Lester’s favourite sayings: “you wont recognise her buddy when i’ve finished with her”. Also, the iconic, “I’m going to take her from you dumbass”. Fellow travellers in the silver verse, we have looked inside the psychopathic mind of Lester Marshall and I for one find it shocking. Did he really contemplate disappearing the children? I have to say I hope he wasn’t serious. I, for one, would walk away if we ventured into such a dark place. To paraphrase Gollum “The precious will be ours… once the children are dead!” Don, don’t go there buddy. I want to continue reading the best hot-wife story I have ever read, not descend into serial killer land. However, I also found parts of this chapter quite comic. Lester parading around D+S’s house naked while a guy is walking by with his dog. Lester nostalgically watching cable and deleting Dan’s progress in his game. His creative “homemade meal” wheeze. His copying of the front door key. I am imagining Sarah’s reaction when he walks in on her in the shower! How will he explain it to her? Oh, not only do I have a bigger cock and more money than Dan, I can also walk through doors. Can Dan do that Sarah? No? I didn’t think so. I also found this the most intense chapter yet. Mr Silver is ratcheting up the tension and building to a climactic scene in the next chapter I surmise. Dan comes home to find Sarah lost in a world of sexual mayhem with Lester. Does he rise to Lester’s triumphalist challenge, or does he cave and relinquish Sarah to Lester? Will Lester even let him live I am wondering. I have wondered for a while if he has underworld ties. He seems to be pretty familiar with the seedier parts of Chicago and that throwaway phrase in relation to the children disappearing, “it could be arranged”. Hmm! Perhaps with the help of the mob? I also loved the references to possible scenarios for Sarah to fulfil for Lester. Watching/ 2 cocks, even a gang bang reference. Surely we will finally be treated to these delights. I am impatient to savour them. Please Don lets stay in hot wife territory and not wander down the road to perdition.
Royston smith
2024-06-20 23:12:17 +0000 UTCEither way would be good by me!
Robert Smith
2024-06-20 18:53:19 +0000 UTCDon't see a love making session , more of a non con forcefully taking session where at the end Sara is a reluctant willing participant and as she has forshadowed , they fall asleep and repeat the Same pattern as the day before , but this time Dan shows up.....
Fuzzy Shark
2024-06-20 18:39:32 +0000 UTCTotally agree. Have Lester and Sarah make love in the shower/bedroom and then they fall asleep together. Chapter ends with Dan pulling up to the house and seeing Lester’s car….
Robert Smith
2024-06-20 17:46:59 +0000 UTCIt's hard to find any validity in that statement. Sarah and Lester especially, but Dan as well to a lesser degree, have progressed as characters immensely over the past 6 months. What they want, how they act, how they blur the lines, how they prioritise things, is chalk and cheese compared to chapter 12 for example. This is proper story telling, and we don't want big life changing events to happen every chapter. The suspense in getting to them is where the fun is. Dan having a lesser and lesser role in proceedings is story progression in itself. Sarah thinks less about him, acts more on her own volition and desires. Lester had a plan to freeze him out and conquer Sarah on her own, and it's been working. That literally is story progression!
Gabriella J
2024-06-20 15:42:39 +0000 UTCIt's definitely an effective writing tool to show Sarah's mindset and how he has her under a spell. The drug reference others have used is apt. Knowing she shouldn't want this, but her body can't be denied it, it is akin to a drug addict.
Gabriella J
2024-06-20 15:32:22 +0000 UTCAs others have said, the dark side of Lester has really come out in this chapter. And I'm not sure quite how I feel about it just yet! His comment about Dan "losing" the children when he's out with them and that would make Sarah hate him and kill two birds with one stone. That was particularly chilling. Like a crazy child kidnap / murder plot is afoot. But it really does outline Lester's intentions for the future, to destroy the Sarah and Dan relationship, get her away from the family and make her his. And that was a key plot point, as that has been something we've all speculated about. It definitely feels like we've started on the arc toward the end of this story now we can fully get into Lester's end game and how he plans to get there. But there'll be more twists along the way for sure. Not sure how anyone is saying that this story hasn't moved on in several months. I love how the emotional framework of the story is unfolding. Emotionally, Sarah's and Lester's characters have travelled miles in the past 4 or 5 chapters particularly. If anyone thinks otherwise then they clearly want a quick stroke story that skims over everything quickly, and not a really good enthralling story.
Gabriella J
2024-06-20 15:25:28 +0000 UTCSara seems to be aware of how Pavlovian she has become for Lester and is not comfortable with her bodies reaction vs her mental state. I suspect Dan walking in on them at the house, kicking Lester out again. Lester will use the video of Sara role playing getting knocked up to sow doubt with Dan on how far Sara has separated from him. Also think Sara and Dan get back on same page to banish Lester. Unfortunately the true dark nature of Lester will become apparent to both Sara and Dan as the blackmail is soon to begin!
Fuzzy Shark
2024-06-20 15:04:03 +0000 UTCI disagree. Though, the story has focused on Lester and Sarah. Dan's time to regain a more active role in the story is near at hand. He's heading home and may soon have the power of a top tier security firm at his back. For better or/and worse, Dan will be back!
YouTensil
2024-06-20 14:01:35 +0000 UTCI think this is just Sarah getting into it. Sexy blob of a man. It's like a drug addict the smell of the cooking heroin, pain of the needle, leads to the euphoria of it.
RCH
2024-06-20 13:18:02 +0000 UTCAs Neegan pointed out this chapter is showing a very darkside to Lester! The beginnings of a plot to rid Sarah of the burden of her children?
RCH
2024-06-20 13:09:51 +0000 UTCBrooke and Saul yes! Saul and a friend double team Brooke Then Saul shows pictures to Mark, over the edge! Also remember Mark owes Saul a recording! HOT!!!!
h mon
2024-06-20 01:26:48 +0000 UTCI agree…The better cliffhanger would be Dan arriving home and seeing Lester’s car parked in the driveway. Has DS ever wrote three sex scenes in the same chapter before?
J Lewis
2024-06-20 01:02:00 +0000 UTCI think everyone has it wrong. There won’t be any more dates this week, in fact Dan will get home and catch them. All hell will break loose and Lester will be kicked out dashing his current plans as Dan forbids him from seeing Sarah again. Lester will hatch a plan to blackmail them into doing his bidding further corrupting Sarah which she will secretly love until Dan eventually wins with the help of his new contacts in the CIA and gets his family back.
Mel
2024-06-20 00:13:29 +0000 UTCMaybe Sarah is desperately trying to re enforce some walls on her defense? Convince herself that the cock is all that matters? Or, she will soon find out how ugly he really is?...
Chris K
2024-06-19 23:01:23 +0000 UTCPlease Don! lol
Robert Smith
2024-06-19 22:49:24 +0000 UTCI'm being greedy, but would really like Don to do the shower scene in this chapter and not make us wait until next month...
sp
2024-06-19 22:44:57 +0000 UTCLester's darkside really coming out now. Will she be latw in the morning, will Dan see/hear he begging for Lester's son? Will she finally say she loves Lester as Dan watches?
neegan
2024-06-19 21:48:13 +0000 UTCDon, a great chapter as always! I can hardly believe that we now have to wait another month for part 20. In this chapter I thought it was great that there were a few hot oral sex scenes and that Sarah came out of her shell a little. She seems to be slowly becoming more comfortable with Lester, who keeps surprising her and confusing her emotions. Now that the children have been out of the way for a few days, Lester has more free rein to finally win her over. I could well imagine him surprising Sarah and taking her out on a romantic date, something she would not have expected from him. This is followed by a passionate impregnating sex scene in which Sarah may scream out her indecipherable feelings of love... I am just excited to see what happens next!
JPaxx
2024-06-19 21:41:16 +0000 UTCThis story hasn't advanced in 6 months. And no, a few paragraphs about Dan don't qualify.
Elfy
2024-06-19 21:32:15 +0000 UTCDamn… can we get that next shower scene sooner than a month from now?!?
Robert Smith
2024-06-19 21:04:41 +0000 UTCIncredible chapter. Of all the chapters, note the negative descriptions of Lester's body: Fat thighs, chubby hips, "ugly mass of Lester's body," "fat rolls on his neck jiggled," "Obscene naked body," grubby hand, "her ugly lover," "troll-like man," "ugly beady eyes," ogre, "girthy cock and unkempt pubic hair," "bare pasty white skin," "ugly face." What are your opinions as to why Don wrote such descriptive terms for Lester in this chapter?
Sigma
2024-06-19 20:51:33 +0000 UTCEven Lester has to admit he's no better at getting her pregnant than Dan. He's cum inside her like a million times already! I was hoping he'd find her secret birth control while in the house. Hot chapter though!!
Chris K
2024-06-19 20:29:50 +0000 UTCI'm looking forward to Neighborhood Encounter very much! And I'm with you, I really want to see more of Saul and Brooke...see Brooke lose herself
neegan
2024-06-19 20:17:08 +0000 UTC
