[Alpha Draft Insiders] Toxic Attraction Chapter 14
Added 2024-01-25 02:58:12 +0000 UTCWhew, last chapter was quite eventful huh? Not
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You are not the only one to request this :)
DonSilver
2024-01-29 16:31:26 +0000 UTCGreat chapter :) would love to see some more dialogue and Sarah blowing Lester in the wedding outfit with her veil on. 10/10
ojapa O
2024-01-29 09:19:26 +0000 UTCFantastic! I love where you’re going with this!
Joe
2024-01-29 04:02:07 +0000 UTCGreat work and good length although I do think you need to end the chapter a little better. Maybe some thoughts from all characters. Not sure where you want to take the story, I know you say you read some of the comments for inspiration. I'd like Sarah to start taking a little bit more control now. I know she's fucking Lester more without Dan and fucking him without a condom and stuff. I'd like her to start making her own decisions when she fucks him. Actually starting to cuck Dan, her semf self. For example if Dan does find a job that involves him being away for length of time. This job will sort out there financial problems. He says he wants to turn there life around no more Lester atleast untill he's back. But Sarah gets lonely and can't stop thinking about Lester. She tries to instigate it with Dan over text but Dan is strong this time. Sarah becomes more frustrated and tells Dan she's going to meet with him anyway. Just an example but I'd like her to take control a little more. Think it would be hot to hear Dan's reaction hearing his wife start to make her own rules.
Mrmanmr
2024-01-28 11:41:58 +0000 UTC
