[Insider] Toxic Attraction CH 12 - Bonus Scene
Added 2023-11-30 21:26:45 +0000 UTCHey folks, after much of the feedback received here is a new scene. Roughly 2k words in length that shows Dan's response to Sarah coming home after her date with Lester. This scene should be sandwiched between the car scene with Lester and the work scene at the hospital.
It's hot off the press and needs editing but here it is!
Enjoy!
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“Hey, wakey wakey,’ Lester nudged Sarah from the open car door. She opened her eyes and looked around getting her bearings. She was in the back of Lester’s SUV in just her bra and panties. She didn’t remember putting them on but she didn’t remember passing out. The last thing she remembered was the taste of old coffee.
The details of the last hour came flooding back to her, “Ugh.”
“Time to go upstairs,” Lester said from the car doorway, “We’re back at the apartment.”
“Give me a sec,” Sarah felt the cold night air against her soft white skin. She undid her belt and looked searched around for her clothes. She found her sweater and pulled it on over her head. She searched on the floor for her pants when he hand touched something sticky and wet.
“What the hell?” She looked down and saw it. Lester’s large condom just sitting on the floor, cum oozing out of it.
“Oh, would you mind getting that?” Lester smirked.
Sarah rolled her eyes and grabbed the condom, being carful not to let any of Lester’s pungent cum leak out onto her. She went to pass it to Lester but he didn’t react.
“I don’t want it, I just wanted you to get it out of my car.” he said.
Sarah stared at him flately, wondering what happened to Lester from the bookshop.
“Fine,” she said as she moved past him, got out of the car and walked to a nearby garabage can against the building.
Sarah knew Lester was trying to play games with her but she wasn’t having it. She was too tired. He wouldn’t expect her to walk out of the car in jsut her panties and a sweater so that’s what she did.
Lester retrieved her pants and shoes from the SUV and closed the door.
“Here,” He said, handing her the discarded clothing. Sarah took them and pult them on along with her shoes. After Sarah was dressed, they made their way into the apartment building.
Sarah looked at her reflection in the elevator’s mirror. She looked like a hot mess. Her hair was tusseled and she looked like she just had a marathon sex session which she had. Hopefully Dan was asleep so he wouldn’t have to see her like this.
As the door’s opened Lester held them open for her to step through first. The man was a walking conundrum to her, polite and chivearous one second and then he would talk to her like and jerk and do whatever he wanted. Her thoughts on Lester persisted until they reached the apartment door.
Lester stuck his hand against the door frame, barring her from going further.
“Before we go in,” Lester said looking into her eyes. “I want a goodnight kiss. I don’t want that getting taken away from me.”
As Sarah was about to respond, Lester grabbed her by her waist with both hands and pulled her body against his, mashing his lips against hers. Sarah closed her eyes and responded, kissing him back, his tongue pushing into her mouth waking up her tired body.
Lester abruptly broke their kiss, leaving Sarah reeling. He turned and opened the door to the apartment and walked in, leaving her in the hallway. Sarah blinked her eyes and followed him.
As she walked into the apartment she saw Dan standing there staring daggers at Lester. His gaze finally turned to her and his expression shifted. He looked worried, taken aback by her appearance. He clearly knew what happened and in that moment understood that she fucked Lester and hadn’t called him. He also looked like he either wanted to murder someone or fuck someone.
“Heh,” Lester chuckled as he left the couple standing there. Lester shutting his door made Sarah realize she was still standing in the doorway. She stepped forward and closed the door behind her.
“Dan,” she said moving toward him, “I’m so sorry, I didn’t mean to forget to call you. Things just kind of escalated and got out of hand.”
“What happened?” Dan was staring at her with intense eyes. They ran across her body trying to decipher what happened. He could put the obvious pieces together but needed to here confirmation from her.
Sarah shifted on her feet, she met Dan’s eyes, “Well we went to a farmer’s market and then dinner. After Lester drove us to a wooded parking lot where –”
“Not here,” Dan said as he turned and marched to his bedroom. Sarah was taken aback by him not greeting her with a kiss or holding her want and bringing her to the bedroom. He must be angry with her.
She followed him down the hallway and gently closed the door behind her. She closed her eyes and brace herself against the door for a second. She took a deep breath and turned around. Dan was sitting on the bed staring at her.
“Tell me what happened in the parking lot,” Dan said trying to stay calm.
Sarah sat on the bed next to him, “We pulled into this wooded lot. I told Lester I needed to call you to check in. He told me to call when something was about to happen. He said he would call, which obviously he didn’t. We both got distracted when another car pulled into the parking lot.”
“Another car?” Dan asked.
“Yeah, it drove slow and parked right next to us. It was so weird because it was a big parking lot and we were the only ones there.” Sarah glanced at Dan. “The driver got out and came up to our window and starting watching us.”
The intense look on Dan’s face didn’t disipate. It looked like he was trying to hold something in.
“The guy watched us through the window. And then he started to touch himself.” Sarah whispered.
“Touch himself where?” Dan asked hoarsly.
“You know where,” Sarah said.
“Tell me exactly,” Dan said.
“His cock. He started touching his cock while watching us.” Sarah admitted.
Dan shifted on the bed. She could see her was starting to breath faster. She still didn’t know exactly how he was reacting.
“Go on,” Dan said, not looking at her.
“Then Lester rolled down the window part way. To give the guy a better look. Lester took my bra off and got me to talk to the guy.”
“What did you say?” Dan said staring at the wall across the bed. He gulped.
“Honestly Dan I don’t know what got into me but I said all sorts of stuff about him watching me, him wishing he was Lester right now and he kept saying how much he wanted me.”
“Did you fuck this stranger Sarah?” Dan’s eyes snapped to hers.
“No! No I wouldn’t do that Dan. That’s something else.” Sarah said placing a hand on his thigh. Dan didn’t move to recpriocate the gesture. Sarah could see the tension in his shoulders. “Lester fucked…Lester and I had sex and the guy watched from the window.”
“Did you make Lester wear a condom?” Dan asked sharpely.
“Yes,” She said, “He wore one. I put it on myself.”
Dan grimmaced at the admission, “What else?”
“The stranger kept watching and saying lewd things. Then Lester pushed into me so hard that it pushed my head out the window and the man grabbed me and kissed me.”
“Kissed you? Jesus a stranger?” Dan said. Sarah could see that Dan’s dick was begining to grow in his pants, “What happened next?”
“Nothing, I broke the kiss and Lester finished. Lester told the guy to get out of there. I fell asleep in the back and Lester drove us back here.” Sarah felt a weight lifiting from her chest.
“Sarah…” Dan started, “I don’t know whether to pissed at you, pissed at Lester or pissed at myself. This is something beyond what I ever expected.”
“I know,” Sarah said. “I know. I didn’ plan this, its was spur of the moment and just happened. We got lost in the heat of the moment.”
Dan sat there silently.
“Can I ask you something?” Sarah said.
“What? What is it?” Dan said.
“Are you pissed it happened or are you pissed you weren’t there to see it happen?” Sarah asked.
Dan gulped and let out a long breath. He pinched the brige of his nose, “If I’m being honest, I don’t know. I’m not sure how I would have reacted in that situation if it was happening right in front of me.”
“I think you do,” Sarah whispered.
Dan looked at her, his expressions somewhat softened but a fire still raged behidn his eyes. Sarah recognized the look, it was the beginning of the lust over taking him.
Sarah slide her hand off his thigh and onto his crotch, “If you were there and this man started watching me. If I looked at you, would you have stopped it or would you have given me your silent nod?”
Dan’s cock twitched under his pants.
“Would you have let that stranger watch me get fucked? What if it was you and me in the car, what would you have done?” Sarah was now stroking Dan’s cock through his pants.
Sarah withdrew her hand and pulled at the bottom of her sweater. She pulled it over her head and let it drop onto the floor. She gently played with her bra strap as she laid back on the bed, “What would you do if the stranger saw me like this? In just my bra? Would you stop it Dan?”
Dan stared at her, she could read the turmoil on his face. Eventually one side won out. He crawled over to her.
“No,” he whispered, “I’d let him watch us.”
Sarah pulled at the waistband of Dan’s pants. He quickly pulled them all the way off and did the same with hers, shortly followed by her panties. Sarah bit her lip as Dan lowered his boxes and tossed them onto the floor.
“Show him. Show the stranger how you fuck your wife,” Sarah encouraged as she pulled her husband toward he.
The intense expressions returned to Dan’s face as he grabbed Sarah by the back of her head, his other hand on her waist. Without any hesitation he lined his cock up with her pussy and pushed his entire length into her.
“Uh, oh fuck.” Sarah breathed. “Fuck Dan.”
“Mmmhmmm,” He grunted, “You like getting watched while you fuck Sarah?”
“Uh, oh, yeah,” Sarah gripped Dan’s shoulders tightly. Dan was fucking her hard and fast just like she needed. “I love it. Someone watching us together.”
“Watching you,” Dan grunted as he pulled his cock out and pushed himself fully back inside of her. “Watching how you moan, how you cum, picturing you doing it for them.”
“Fuck Dan,” Sarah bit his shoulder as he fucked her, “Don’t stop baby. So good. So good.”
Dan just grunted in reply as he pushed his foot onto the floor to get leverage, he tweaked his hip and continued to push into Sarah with renewed vigor.
“Fuck,” Dan gritted his teeth and gripped onto Sarah harder. He looked down at his wife and saw her face contorting in pleasure. Pleasure from his cock. Someone came over him, some primal urge for vocitory. Knowing that he was pleasuring her was electric.
Sarah opened her eyes and saw Dan staring down at her with an animalistic lust. He never looked more attractive to her. She reached her hands up behind his head and pulled his head down to hers as she sucked on his lips.
Dan pushed his tongue into his wife’s mouth as she moaned around it. He kissed her hard and fast in time with his cock pumping into her naked pussy.
“God,” Sarah broke the kiss in order to catch her breath, “Don’t stop Dan, right there. Mhmmmm fuck. Uh. So good Dan. Keep going. Don’t stop.”
Hearing her words, knowing she was so close, Dan felt his balls begin to tingle. He pushed himself up on the bed and held onto Sarah’s hips as he rammed her cock into her faster than before.
“Oh fuck Dan,” Sarah moaned. “Uh, uh, yeah baby, uh, uh, fffFfffffFFUUUUCK.”
Sarah came on Dan’s naked cock. She felt like her body was melting into his as he continued to pump himself into her.
“I’m going to cum Sarah,” Dan breathed.
“Cum,” Sarah said through her teeth as her orgasm continued to wrack against her body. One of her legs lifted into the air as her toes curls, her nails digging into Dan’s back urging him to stay in place as she came.
“Fuck,” Dan said as his balls emptied and cum shot of his cock into his wife’s fertile pussy, “Fuckkkkk.”
“Mhmmmmmmm,” Sarah moaned as she felt Dan’s hot cum shooting into her, washing over her insides, looking for purchase. Feeling Dan’s cum inside of her caused her orgasm to intensify and prolong, her body rode it like a wave washing over a beach, never ending.
Soon both Sarah and Dan were lying there panting staring into each others eyes. Neither said a word. Dan rolled off his wife.
Sarah stared at the ceiling wondering what Dan was thinking. Whether he was still upset and just got caught up in the moment with her just now. What was going to be next for them with all the craziness that was happening in their life. Now that clarity was returining to her husband’s head, what would he say.
As if in response, Dan’s hand found hers. She encircled her fingers around his as they both lay there in bliss. Neither said a word, both just enjoyed the glow they both felt in that moment.
Comments
I like it! Foolishly, I'd actually not considered Lester visiting her! I was assuming it was simply a way of making Sarah more beholden to him. Elevating him to her knight in... sweaty t-shirt?
YouTensil
2023-12-01 09:56:50 +0000 UTCSpeaking of Lizzie - is she ever going to make a come back appearance? Maybe pregnant from Lester’s night with her?
Robert Smith
2023-12-01 05:57:55 +0000 UTCSounds like a great excuse to exclude Dan while he is in Chicago wondering where his roommate disappeared to for a few days. And Lester pays a surprise visit to the hospital to an unsuspecting Sara. He takes her in her office after she agrees to his terms of saving the hospital and no condom and no calling Dan! Again!
Fuzzy Shark
2023-12-01 02:36:19 +0000 UTCYes! The detail about her glancing at the peephole while Dan was reclaiming her 100% went through my mind. Lester once again creeping into her mind while Dan was inside her, just as Dan experienced earlier in this same chapter, is always a detail I love to see. I wonder if we're about to see Lester making a trip out to Middleton. Sure, he said he normally does his job remotely, but there are circumstances where he has to travel to his clients and an IT systems crash at a large hospital sounds like just that kind of job. I can't wait to see where exactly Don is taking this!
Jay Smith
2023-12-01 01:17:30 +0000 UTCI mean when recalling earlier chapters it's obvious Lester isn't a nice guy. He had a hard drive of Izzie basically blackmailing her to the events of that chapter. I think Lester is a great actor till he gets what he wants, then little bits of the facade fade allowing his real personality to come out.
achilles
2023-12-01 00:19:04 +0000 UTCRegarding point 1, I read that as part of Lester's manipulation. Unpredictability shifting between being suprisingly sweet, caring and misunderstood (rarher than truly a creepy jerk), and a powerful, primal, figure who talks to her however he wants. Beyond that point, I really like that even when he's being affectionate, he's still a monster.
YouTensil
2023-11-30 23:42:11 +0000 UTCThat would be good. Though, I am liking the cliffhanger of her phoning him.
YouTensil
2023-11-30 23:25:32 +0000 UTCAgree. But at this stage i feel it should just be subtle details. Little things, that are just between her and Lester.
YouTensil
2023-11-30 23:23:53 +0000 UTCYeah, I really enjoyed it! I liked the sprinkling of details, adding to the wider progression of the plot. Also, importantly, we get to watch Dan and Sarah reunite after the crazy date night. Having their relationship have (admittedly waning) weight and value really adds to the power of the rising corrupting influence of Lester. As I was reading it, I did wonder if Sarah might steal a glance towards the peephole, when she was talking about being watched. However, I think it's a great addition to a strong chapter. Leaving me with lots I'm excited to see expanded upon.
William
2023-11-30 23:08:10 +0000 UTCYes I agree he has the long game down. And part of that is keeping Sara off balance. Sara is addicted to the nice thoughtful Lester and put off by the Lester when he acts like a Richard.....at this stage she is hoping for the first but will tolerate the later as long as he keeps delivering in the car, bed, shower, living room. Kind of like an abusive relationship.....JMO
Fuzzy Shark
2023-11-30 22:45:26 +0000 UTCCompletely disagree here. Lester is into the long game. He’s already totally dominated her and taken her way out of her comfort zone in the previous scene. If he is who Don has written him as so far, he’s still thinking about future - bareback and beyond. There is no way he would be a complete dick after such a successful date. He would want to make her feel safe and appreciated. His character needs development in addition to Dan and Sarah’s. He has to learn to accept Sarah’s needs and wants to continue to dominate/manipulate her.
Robert Smith
2023-11-30 22:34:26 +0000 UTCI think the last line should be Lester on his end of the peephole saying “Soon”
Dingdonger
2023-11-30 22:33:47 +0000 UTCA good revision. The end should be moved to the beginning of chapter 13. I think she should do Lester again before she goes home. May b e in the shower.
John Lewis
2023-11-30 22:22:36 +0000 UTCI think that behavior by Lester is him in a nutshell....he alluded to that in past chapter about not having to clean his room and keep up appearances. It's all a show till he get what he wants ( Sarah) He did not need to charm her as he got what he wanted that night as per his plan.
Fuzzy Shark
2023-11-30 22:08:43 +0000 UTCThanks for the missing piece! Brings it together nicely.
Fuzzy Shark
2023-11-30 22:05:06 +0000 UTCI appreciate the closure on the date with this scene, Don. Fantastic details here! A few things don’t add up to me: 1) Lester turning into a BIG jerk again after all the positive connection during the date, doesn’t seem likely. Maybe the piece in front of Dan at the apartment door rings true but when he wakes her up, geez, he’s such a dickhead. 2) I don’t think it’s believable that Sarah could actually cum with Dan after three crazy climaxes with Lester’s much larger tongue/member only a few hours ago. Way more likely that she just encourages him and let’s him finish. In addition to her mind being all over the place, her body would be too sore and overstimulated at this point in the evening. Still enjoyed it! Thank you for your amazing work.
Robert Smith
2023-11-30 22:03:32 +0000 UTCIt's a good scene. I personally keep wishing she'd start keeping a lot more info from him. Also knowing that sex with Dan takes second place.
Chris K
2023-11-30 21:40:30 +0000 UTC