[Insider] Toxic Attraction: Chapter 12
Added 2023-11-28 17:47:54 +0000 UTCHey all, I finally have the Insider edition of
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really great writing love your work broke down and bought a sub cuz literotica is taking so long to update, kind of disappointed with Dan being fixed though, if Sarah gets pregnant all their family will know about someone other than Dan, at least if dan wasn't fixed they could lie.. DS you promised dark and gave it, thumbs up for that but still disappointed still love the writing going to keep reading to see how dark it gets. hoping the Sarah and Dan stay intact
time
2024-01-05 17:02:09 +0000 UTCI agree but i was referring to the car situation in NC where she hooked up with the uber driver, i would have like to see it go in more of that direction as opposed to the stranger just watching.
Eichelid
2023-12-01 01:16:36 +0000 UTCThere is a huge difference your missing here. In NC its always about the couple. She is always communicating with her husband afterwards. Then she has the idea of the "anniversary present" and starts filming in which she further tests boundaries. Yes sometimes the neighbor gets the video camera off but while the camera is on she is talking to her husband during the sex, blowing him kisses, mouthing I love you. Her main goal is to make it hot for them afterwards. Even when she is having a orgasmic experience from the neighbors Big cock she still finds him disgusting never falling to his attempts which pisses him off leading to the events in the last chapter. So far Sara just gets hit with the martian ray guy and goes nuts totally forgetting Dan till afterwards
achilles
2023-12-01 00:06:01 +0000 UTCIs Drew going to be involved somehow, noting this is the second chapter where it is mentioned that he was either gazing at Sarah's chest or saw her in a state of undress?
Jason
2023-11-30 23:52:22 +0000 UTCAdding in a scene here today!
DonSilver
2023-11-30 17:05:21 +0000 UTCI'm going to go back and clean this up and make it more explicit the condom stays on. My first pass at writing is basically a maniac. The condom coming off (or not going on) will be much more explicit.
DonSilver
2023-11-30 17:04:53 +0000 UTCAppreciate it Robert! I'll clean up the condom bit, it was still on (for this chapter at least). Appreciate the feedback as always.
DonSilver
2023-11-30 17:03:48 +0000 UTCI sent you a DM on discord but don't count out Dan just yet. He ain't no sissy.
DonSilver
2023-11-30 16:01:49 +0000 UTCLester is pushing using Sarah's own fantasies against her in ways that Dan was just beginning to discover with his wife.
DonSilver
2023-11-30 16:00:50 +0000 UTCDon't count Dan out yet!
DonSilver
2023-11-30 15:59:34 +0000 UTCYes sir. Next chapter will be a dirty one.
DonSilver
2023-11-30 15:59:04 +0000 UTCBig fan of the story and I like the introduction of the stranger further testing her limits and establishing more of his control. Me personally, I like when things go more on the dark side and do not work out well for the "good guys". With that being said I would have liked to have seen Sarah go even further with the stranger much like Amber in NC. Love the story and enjoying the ride, Thank you!
Eichelid
2023-11-30 14:46:49 +0000 UTCJust my opinion but if Lester doesn’t cum in Sara in this chapter I’ll probably find a new story. I loved this story but the condom part just kills the story now.
Joshua Kelly
2023-11-29 12:40:17 +0000 UTCOverall, I would say this was a very good chapter in what is absolutely the best series i've read in ages. Lots I really enjoyed. My favourite single exchange was between Sarah and Lester, when he asked why she reacted so differently in the message to when in person. I liked the simplicity of it, but wandered if it might have been a good point to breifly reintroduce/reinforce the idea of her becoming instantly submissive to him, when commanded. Echoing the amazingly hot exchange about him silencing her when she talks back to him (hope that gets to play out in future installments by the way!). I also like her being much more open (when explicitly directed to by Lester) about what she really feels. It creates an intresting way of creating a subtle devision from her time with Dan. With her husband the narrative would appear to be driven more predominantly by Dan's desires and their shared fantasy. I do feel that Dan may be becoming to sidelined and falling into a limiting hole of just ineffectual lover. I really enjoy that Sarah does, and hopefully will continue to, deeply love and desire Dan. I understand why the rest of the weekend was skipped, but do think this could have impacted the characters. A lot happened that Dan did not get to react to. Her not even attempting to phone, and the inclusion of a stranger. What was the dynamic when they returned? For me, the discussion about what happened and their 'boundaries' is a great part of the series. The build up to her accepting him bareback is bloody great and has been brewing away nicely. There is a concern that other activities (especially involving additional participants) could overshadow the climax of that moment. The other elements, night away with Dan, increasingly risky activities with Lester and the bluring of the 'home'/'apartment' devision are really interesting. Basically, what my minor criticisms boil down to is, I always want more dialogue (internal and external). Again, I want to say how much I am enjoying this series and admire the writing.
YouTensil
2023-11-29 12:17:06 +0000 UTCTotally agree that this date needs closure at the apartment. Maybe Lester carries her into the apartment and into his room, then checks in on Dan, who is passed out next to a cum soaked pile of tissues…..
Robert Smith
2023-11-29 07:07:43 +0000 UTCgraet story hope to see next chapters soon keep the good work
Migmig
2023-11-29 06:44:56 +0000 UTCAlso what is he going to demand from Sarah for his help maybe to be a whole week with her , convince dan to wear a condom while he goes raw, denying dan for longer periods
Migmig
2023-11-29 06:44:00 +0000 UTCLove that story and the slow burn . Would like to see much more talks of Sarah a Dan the way he gets deeper in his obsession till he’s ready to do anything ( eating lester cream pie and letting him take more control of their lives … in their home for examples ..)
Migmig
2023-11-29 06:41:13 +0000 UTCI understand the jump from the car scene to the drama at work, but I feel there needs to be some closure, either inserting or adding a reverie from Sarah about what happened when they got back to the apartment, did she go to bed with Dan or Lester, if Dan did she go to Lester in the morning to enjoy the total satisfaction once more? If she spent the night with Lester, did she get taken by him throughout the night with Dan watching once again through the peephole? Would be good to clean that part up some, because I'm sure Dan would be out of his mind when they return, but she could quell it by simply saying "I'm tired, I'm going to bed with the man who always satisfies me....totally" and she walks into Lester's room stripping as she goes.
robert
2023-11-29 06:38:50 +0000 UTCThe condom point you made here is HUGE. We've been waiting a long time for the moment Lester finally enters her bare and unload inside of her, so I hope it wouldn't happen in such an ambiguous way that would be revealed retroactively. That would be so anticlimactic. If this is when he finally cums in her, please let us enjoy in the moment. And more importantly, I would hope Sarah would be fully aware it's happening and eagerly accepting his cum in her.
Tim Rogers
2023-11-28 23:51:30 +0000 UTCThis is an absolutely awesome chapter, Don! I love how Sarah and Lester’s relationship is progressing. The sexual texting, an actual conversation on their date (with Lester also buying more things for her), her wearing his lingerie, her not trying hard to call/then forgetting to call Dan before sex, questioning the need for a condom, and most importantly, admitting that she wants to hide their true relationship from Dan - “I just,” Sarah started, “Don’t like to be so blantant in front of him.” It’s all fantastic. I absolutely agree with Lester encouraging Sarah’s exhibitionist/rough sex desires but I hope you keep it to looking/light touching from additional males - I really don’t think anything more tracks with Lester’s character and intentions at this point. He wants her to himself and he wants her filled with his seed. I only see him using others to further cement his control over her by expanding her horizons and providing gratifying sexual experiences she’s never had with Dan (he is also providing safety for her to explore these desires). Request clarification on the condom in the final sex scene: before Lester takes her from behind, does he take it off? A few items crop up after that lend doubt to him still wearing a condom - 1) He mentions how good she feels today when he enters her from behind (seems intentional and differs from previous cannon) 2) she’s feels him shooting his warm cum inside her (which doesn’t seem possible with a condom on) 3) does she see him remove the condom with its massive amount of cum? 4) where does the condom go afterwards? I can’t wait to see how you leverage Lester’s IT skills to further woo Sarah while rescuing her company (hopefully destroying Drew, lol). This could be Lester’s introduction into her life in Middleton that we’ve been waiting for. Side note - love Dan’s total cuckold style insecure premature ejaculation in the hotel and Sarah’s subsequent admission towards the end of the chapter that Lester completely satisfies her (when Dan couldn’t). I also wish Lester’s cum was leaking out of her in the backseat while she falls asleep. Thank you, Don!
Robert Smith
2023-11-28 22:14:22 +0000 UTCYeah. Agree with above. Serious foreshadowing in this chapter with Lester and Sarah and the dude outside. She even reflects on this afterward. Obviously Lester blackmails her for help with the company which he was the cause, thus condom comes off. Now that she "forgot" to call Dan during this enounter he will eventually be outside looking in with no voice. I hope this isn't the case because it just becomes another loving wife story published so often on lite erotica. Additionally, what's the end game here when Lester breaks Sarahs heart as Izzie cautioned. Is Dan going to forgive and forget when she's knocked up after staying with Lester all night. I doubt that. In this case as someone mentioned on the discord this story being Vixen and stag, no, disagree. It's becoming cheating wife and bull. Because she is/will be neglecting Dan.
achilles
2023-11-28 21:25:04 +0000 UTCBack to feeling forced and rushed, eventually after Lester has gotten bored with sara, maybe.....But just as he was seeing returns on getting Dan out of the picture? Can't see him sharing his conquest this way so soon.....thought he would be savoring the next step, which probably cums next chapter?
Fuzzy Shark
2023-11-28 21:21:21 +0000 UTCSorry Don, you've lost me now. I loved the story line being about the 3 of them and slowly doing more and more. The pinical being Dan watching them through the spy hole. Now Dan may aswell not be involved at all which sounds like where you want to take this story.
Mrmanmr
2023-11-28 21:09:11 +0000 UTCMore sex
John Lewis
2023-11-28 20:28:46 +0000 UTC
