[Alpha Draft] Toxic Attraction Chapter 9
Added 2023-07-28 21:10:56 +0000 UTCHello Lester Lovers,
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Great feedback - yes will definitely be expanding. I plan to add a little more to the scene at the end as well. Please let me know where else it felt rushed!
DonSilver
2023-07-30 15:58:26 +0000 UTCInteresting twist with the female issue. Never read that before.
John Lewis
2023-07-30 12:51:24 +0000 UTCAnother great one, Don. Some things happened a little quickly but I know you always expand with the final one. Also good to hear a further addition is coming. I feel like there needs to be a ‘fuck, what just happened again moment and how did it happen so quickly/ what is wrong with me for wanting this’ between Dan and Sarah now. There’s also the chance for that conversation to have the arc of initial regret, self loathing, then rationalisation which with some cuddles and kisses turns to more excitement as Dan gets Sarah to confess more about how the huge dick gave her pleasure and feelings in her pussy she’s never had before in her life, yet that it’s only sex, they have the control and her heart certainly belongs to Dan. In a twisted way perhaps that new ‘confidence’ in their predicament and Sarah reluctant confessions of the pleasures she shared with Lester in his bed moves Dan to get Sarah to go to him and perhaps in the night despite her insistence of no sex Dan is woken in the night to Sarah squeals and going to investigate he peeps through the key hole and sees Sarah being taken ending with him cuming against Lesters door as Lester blows in her. He is also unsure of whether Lester was wearing a condom which adds to his renewed angst. Also reference to the comment above perhaps now seeing first hand how Sarah is taken, the sounds she makes he begins to realise he can never compare to that leading perhaps to ED in future chapters ;)
Pater Noster
2023-07-29 19:22:45 +0000 UTC
