Kookies 'n' Cream Second Draft
Added 2023-06-29 21:16:14 +0000 UTCHello all!
The second draft is finally here!
I'm nearing the completion the animation now. There are however a few things that are left to do. Such things as a credits screen as well as MAYBE a title screen need to be made to round off the animation completely. There are also some timing tweaks I want to make for some scenes, as well as shortening and extending some scenes.
One complete oversight that I missed was also adding some pre in more scenes, since in some scenes it is visible, where as in others it simply disappears. So this will be another finishing touch I will add.
Finally there is the sound and music to add, which I haven't thought about too much yet, but I have a few ideas of how to flavour it.
I'm really excited to hear what you guys think so far. I hope you enjoy!
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Comments
Ohh, gotcha— totally understandable. Congrats again on getting this one done, your art style has progressed a lot lately!
Polymurr
2023-06-30 00:47:17 +0000 UTCReally appreciate the criticism here! I agree with everything you've said. I will definitely experiment with these suggestions, some of which are actually stuff I've noted down myself! ;O As for the male / male suggestion, that will not be something I will be doing, since the character (Kookie) is female (and is also a friend's OC).
Joji
2023-06-29 23:06:34 +0000 UTCOmg, this is really good. I'm pretty damn gay but even I wouldn't mind being in this situation lol. For the most part the pacing is on point. You might benefit from experiencing with some more fade-out-fade-in transitions— those would play well into the "sleepy" vibe and smooth out the timing in places where the transitions are a bit quick. A few specific pacing-related things: - At 0:38, when she pushes his penis down with her paw, the animation skips to the next scene pretty quickly. I think it would be good to let the animation sit in that position for 1 or 2 extra seconds as the current timing of rapid movement straight into the next scene is sort of jarring. - Similar thing at 0:48. I really like the part where she lifts her paw for a moment— I don't know how it would look if you looped that part one more time, but it's a really strong point of the animation (that whole scene is probably my favorite, but that last part is especially great) and I think repeating it might slow down the pacing a bit as well. - For the scene immediately following that, it might make sense to add one more frame of animation as the penis seems to jolt up rather quickly. You might also be able to experiment with starting this section slower and gradually increasing the speed, as this scene seems to serve as a sort of "rising action" in the animation before the thrusting begins. - For the loop starting at 1:40, I wonder how it would look if you added a "blinking" effect for the first couple of loops, since it is a POV shot from a character which is just waking up? That might add to the atmosphere. Those are all just small things, but this is really excellently done. I don't know if you've considered doing a male/male version, but considering there's only one scene where the female character is explicitly shown to be female, it could be worth doing. I know I'd love to see that! Then again, you've already put a lot of effort into this project and I totally understand if it's a one-and-done thing. Again, nice work here. Really looking forward to see what you come up with next.
Polymurr
2023-06-29 22:59:08 +0000 UTCThis is brilliant ❤️
Daniel
2023-06-29 22:22:09 +0000 UTC
