Constant 3, Chapter 5-4: Circe
Added 2024-10-30 01:00:07 +0000 UTCAs with every scene in chapter five, this one's
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On the one hand, I think I was going for a sort of mental loop, as Julia works herself up to actually going through with it; on the other, it's leftover bits from rewrites in which I moved stuff around. I think chapter 5 will need some serious trimming when I give it a go-over. The core bit of the scene is the transition from 'maybe I'm done with this' to 'now it's time', which hopefully came off as believable.
David Sanders
2024-11-01 08:00:56 +0000 UTCI enjoyed this, but I agree with you. It seems too long, as Julia rolls more or less the same thoughts again, and again. Nice setup at the end.
OldHiker
2024-11-01 04:34:36 +0000 UTC
