Constant in All Other Things: Chapter 10
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Hey, thanks for the kind words and feedback - very much appreciated! I've always had my doubts about the ending, especially getting the dialogue right. I think one of the casualties of the 14-year gap between chapters was some of the 'Noir' feel, intentionally there throughout Book 1 but sort of absent the deeper we head into the trilogy. Maybe I need to go back and watch Chinatown again...!
David Sanders
2024-06-27 10:27:55 +0000 UTCI've always loved the final phone call scene. Lots of action hero bravado in the exchange. Like John McClane or John Wick or one of the other shit talking Johns. The earthy language and joyful fury is a great peak. The whole dialog with Steele is David in pure machismo mode and in practice its the last time David gets to be the macho guy. That part of him may still lurk underneath his Cindy facade and comes out for fleeting moments in future chapters, but this is kind of it's last hurrah. The end works for me. It certainly stands as the end of a book, but one with a massive cliffhanger. It's almost Detective Noir with the fade to black but the trope itself lets you know this is only act one. The hero has been 'brung low' and double crossed by the dame (figuratively speaking), a thug has knocked him out and he's sunk into oblivion, but you know there's a lot more to come.
Julia
2024-06-27 09:18:40 +0000 UTC
