Publish!: Second Interlude (1/3)
Added 2023-12-18 23:40:50 +0000 UTCFinally pulled the trigger, and published the f
Comments
Argh, typos! No matter how often I read through these things, a few always sneak by - I wonder if ChatGTP or something could help with typo hunting? I should look into that. Glad it reads well, though - there's been so much tinkering (especially in 2/3) it's easy to get lost in the forest for the trees. And thank you for the continued support - I'll try to not let anyone down (or disappear again).
David Sanders
2023-12-20 07:15:31 +0000 UTCIt's been fun, and a learning experience. I'll write something up once I've got the whole interlude revised, some thoughts on the past year's (!) writing.
David Sanders
2023-12-20 07:12:30 +0000 UTCEchoing the Congratulations from Asklepios. Like them I feel a bit of secondhand pride in seeing the story let loose onto FM. It's been a long journey and there's still many miles to go but I'm prepared to travel with you and the rest of your patrons towards the end point and beyond. The story as posted is a lot cleaner and more concise than its earlier iterations and reads very well. Some minor typos in there but as they say perfect is the enemy of good and if you try working towards perfect it will make the paradox of Zeno look achievable in contrast. The introduction of Chad prefixing the introduction of Agent Foster is great. The dialog with Scooter bluntly explaining why he's not getting his manhood back any time soon and showing him exactly what "I'm prepared to take any risk" really entails is a very an effective way to hammer home the inevitability of David remaining as Cindy no matter how much he detests it. This will now let the photo shoot, the Crystal sessions and the rest of David's tentative resignation to his fate flow more naturally. He's very definitely hanging all his hopes on a breakthrough in the future but now he's being forced to confront the reality that He'll be sitting at Cindys desk at Volumnia for a while longer.
Julia
2023-12-20 06:21:57 +0000 UTCCongratulations on publishing! It flows well as a single piece. You've done really well this year keeping up the writing and moving the story on. Its been a fascinating process to watch the incremental improvements that come with your editing - Well done again! Really looking forward to where next year takes us and David...
Asklepios
2023-12-19 14:09:58 +0000 UTC
