Draconian Remnant 26
Added 2020-12-18 03:09:49 +0000 UTCAn unpleasant lesson, and a Titillating Twist.
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So, this chapter has my downvote. You're hamstringing yourself by having way too little character development, relying almost completely on exposition in a rush to get.... somewhere? You're teatering on the egde of this fic falling apart because you only seem to go into any detail during combat scenes, and then bum rush your way through cool down scenes. It feels increasingly like the chapters have gotten shorter, and that does not help the situation. Please slow the fuck down and add fluff. Fluff is what literally drives fics. Stop ignoring it.
Pope Yoda I
2021-01-04 02:06:29 +0000 UTCGo team griffindore
John MacKellar
2020-12-18 06:44:27 +0000 UTC
