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Writer's Blog: If I Only Had A Brain

Added 2022-05-20 16:05:36 +0000 UTC

I've been so distracted lately that yesterday I forgot to push the "Publish" button for the post notifying everyone that the 2.0 version of Chapter 6 was up! Sorry about that, and Chapter 7 should follow by this Sunday.

There's less changes to Chapter 6 than there were to Chapter 5, in large part because Chapter 5 was twice the length and thus had more stuff to be changed. Ultimately, I decided not to merge 6 and 7, especially since this new version of Chapter 6 ended up being 2,500 words longer than the initial draft.

What's New:

-Much rewriting and general polish.

-Additional options on how Button can react, including new questions about the attack and Button being able to simply blink in confusion when Nick expresses jealousy.

-Ace Buttons interested in Rosy will no longer think prurient thoughts (and other tweaks).

-More nuance with Nick's dialogue throughout the entire chapter, reactive based on his relationship with Button.

-It's now much more obvious that Adsila is being a manipulative beepity-beep. (Sidenote: I adore Adsila and would pay to see her and Reese cage fight.)

-Repetitive dialogue over Hope's BRS was taken out. I'm looking into using some of this scene to flesh out John's Chapter 5 departure, mostly because I can't bear to completely delete the phrase "my composure is being held together by bobby-pins and dental floss."

-Button and Nick can now engage in a pseudo-mini-fight over Nick keeping secrets. This tension doesn't fully come to a head yet, but it revolves around the new clue added in Chapter 5 and also makes it a lot clearer that Nick is hiding things about Unity/the explosion from Button. (Things which will be completely revealed by the end, but no longer in a way that blindsides readers. I added foreshadowing, y'all!)

-Starting in Chapter 3, Buttons who call John by his first name will have their internal narrative refer to him as "John" instead of "Dad."

Link: https://dashingdon.com/play/wildelight/mind-blind-20/mygame/