The Great Rewritening: Chapter 5 In All It's 50,000 Word Glory
Added 2022-04-26 00:36:40 +0000 UTCI managed to get it down from 60,000 words with some judicious editing, but this chapter is still hefty. It's also late because I made the dumb mistake of having CSIDE (the program I use to test the coding) autoformat everything into spaces instead of tabs.
. . . Which meant I had to go over the entire first five chapters and redo all the coding. Or, at least, I would've needed to do this had I not given up halfway through Chapter 2 and just rolled back to older files. Which meant I needed to re-bug test everything, but that was still less of a headache than rewriting.
That being said, there might be bugs and typos from previous builds since the versions now up are from the original Word documents. So please let me know if you run into any issues that were un-fixed in this update.
Major Changes:
1) Ace Route Kisses for Sally and Glitch. (Grayson is tame enough in this chapter that none of his scenes actually changed.)
2) More foreshadowing about the bombing to be found in a conversation between Hope and John, which can be followed up on if Button chooses to walk around the city with Nick. This conversation with Nick foreshadows something else . . . which I can't yet disclose. But the letter will get mentioned again in future chapters as well.
3) Options to decide whether or not Button matchmakes for Sally and Nick during movie night (provided Button doesn't have a crush on Sally). Originally, Snickly activation was locked behind working with Sally when setting up Button's Podium profile--meaning those working with Glitch instead were locked out. Going forth, working with Sally will still be a secondary activation point for those who didn't do movie night, but for those who've already decided to encourage the relationship, it'll serve as Button's first real matchmaking opportunity. If you've already said you're not into their relationship, it won't get mentioned.
4) Speaking of Sally, Button can now be a bit timid and still get a kiss! Sally takes charge . . . and then profusely apologizes because OMG WHAT DID SHE JUST DO. Button can also directly ask how Sally feels about Nick before kissing her. Beware, though, continuing to doubt your best friend's word will lock you out of her romance. If Button doesn't want to kiss Sally with an audience, that's totally fine and completely understandable! It just means that you're on the ultimate slowburn path.
5) Sally's vision about Glitch has changed, and now reveals their reaction to Button's carnapping by Andy/Liz in later chapters.
6) An option to talk with Hope. Or not talk with Hope.
Plus too many other changes to count. More description of environments, new options when city seeing, and Buttons who told Glitch that they're vegan will no longer reach for the milk when making Grayson cookies. This chapter has variables out the wazoo, so my priority right now is making sure that nothing is broken when playing as I can only test so many pathways myself. (If you do find any issues, please report it here or on the Sanctum discord).
Oh, and Button's name will no longer default to Clarence.
Link: https://dashingdon.com/play/wildelight/mind-blind-20/mygame/
Comments
Small typo in hanging out with Grayson scene when he hugs Button. He says "I hug you now." I think you mean "I can hug you now."
2022-04-28 12:19:45 +0000 UTCHi. I think there are missing options in chapter 5. When I choose to watch movies with Sally, after "Alright, that's enough about your love life." I have only "It's time to turn the tables and interrogate Sally and Nick about each other".
Saeun
2022-04-27 18:08:59 +0000 UTCGray says โI hug you nowโ ๐๐ Oops (Also, Kian stop romancing Gray every time challenge)
Kian
2022-04-27 14:53:47 +0000 UTCAlso not entirely sure of the circumstances but hitting next on the page that says โwho the hell is in your headโ sent me to the same page Hitting next a second time moved forward
Kian
2022-04-27 14:38:01 +0000 UTCJust a note: Choosing the option when seeing John about him suddenly being okay with Buttonโs enrolment leads to the first line implying that we called him John when the option doesnโt say that!
Kian
2022-04-27 14:25:53 +0000 UTCGreat work! โค๏ธ Can't wait to read
Patch
2022-04-26 04:48:37 +0000 UTCThe fact that this one chapter contains as many words as a novel is both terrifying and amazing
John Q. Adams
2022-04-26 03:12:26 +0000 UTCLoving the rewrite so far, had so much fun going to the vegetarian restaurant with Nick and teasing him and Sally about their crushes!!
2022-04-26 03:01:01 +0000 UTCYou consistently put so much work into this- thank you for your story!!
Bacchanalien
2022-04-26 01:19:45 +0000 UTCalso all these changes are AMAZING Jo wtf ๐
Chigusa Eyes
2022-04-26 01:06:55 +0000 UTCwhatever will i do without being Clarence, the true name of the chosen one
Chigusa Eyes
2022-04-26 01:06:33 +0000 UTC