The Great Rewritening Feedback Request: Chapters 4 AND 5
Added 2022-03-02 20:29:29 +0000 UTCChapter 3’s rewrite is complete, and John’s relationship variable count is now up to ten! Unlike the other eight variables that I listed in my last blogpost, these two new variables track John’s feelings based on your dialogue choices (determining how comfortable/cautious/apologetic he behaves towards Button). I keep bouncing between his scenes in Chapters 3-5, and at this point most of the scenes involving him have been either edited or completely rewritten (with the code completely overhauled for all).
I’m going to release the updated versions of Chapters 3 – 5 as a group due to much variable dependency in these chapters—not only because of John, but because I’m adding more recognition and flavor dialogue depending on Button’s response to the initial explosion. This means a lot of bouncing back and forth between chapters to tweak the code as I edit, so I figure it would be best to release it as a small block once everything is finalized. Because of this, I’m only having this post for both Chapters 4 and 5.
There's a lot that happens in this two chapter block, including the initiation of Sally and Glitch's committed romance paths, so I'm eager to read all your suggestions! If you can't decide which parts to focus on, I’d particularly appreciate feedback about the hospital scenes (because of their importance to the plot) and the scene where Button informs John about Nick’s presence (since I feel like this portion needs some of the most reworking).
There are 3 ways to provide feedback:
1) Leave a comment on this post,
2) Use the Great Rewritening Feedback channel via the Sanctum of Spoilers,
or
3) Send an email to mindblindbetatest@gmail.com.
Comments
Options to have a more neutral/complex relationship with Sally would be nice. It was interesting that Button gets to call their relationship codependence but if Button isn't outright rude, their relationship more or less progresses like an intensely close friendship rather than one with somewhat mixed but overall positive feelings. Some option to speak to/thank Kenna or be confused when she shows up to drive Sally and Button back home from the hospital, since if you haven't met her before apart from the assignment, the options don't let you address her at all unless you flirt with her.
2022-03-06 00:04:22 +0000 UTCI think certain Buttons should notice Sally’s injury. It makes perfect sense to not notice especially if she’s hiding it and Button is distracted by Nick, but if a Button is especially observant or has a high relationship with Sally I think it also makes sense for them to notice. It would probably eat at them even more that not only is their brother in a coma, their best friend/crush got injured, too.
Kian
2022-03-03 07:03:36 +0000 UTC
