Mind Blind Bl**per Reel: Shut Your Mouth, Grayson Black
Added 2021-03-28 03:03:39 +0000 UTCSome of you were surprised when Gray dropped the f-bomb in last week's Saucy Side, and even more taken aback when I admitted on discord that Gray is the Mind Blind character who curses the most. (I edit his dialogue.) For some reason, the man keeps cursing when I'm writing--I've had to curtail him back to a single "f***" in Chapter 3.
Anyway, I thought it would be fun to share how Gray's dialogue usually comes out naturally. I found my first drafts saved in my computer, so here's Gray's unedited dialogues (as well as a couple excerpts that didn't make the cut to the game):
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You almost collide into a barricade of muscle. Grayson, your brother’s best friend, steps quickly backwards and points to his ear. You take out an earbud.
“Shit!” he exclaims. “Sorry for getting so close.” Gray’s always been considerate to not eavesdrop.
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The stream of profanity that poured from the British man's mouth was enough to make your eyes widen. Perhaps you should commit some his adjectives to memory, because using them would get you expelled from school for sure. Bullying problem, solved!
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Gray was silent for a long moment. “Bloody hell. That's devastating.”
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“Fucking tired. But I’m more concerned about you two.” Gray’s gaze lingers, checking you from top to bottom in search of injury, before he turns to Sally. “What did the doctor say about your foot?”
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Gray swipes the cookie before you can take another bite. “Don’t eat the goddamn thing!” he exclaims. “I know what they taste like. I’d hoped my efforts would give you something to laugh about. Not that you’d eat one!”
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“Screw Miss Marple,” Gray scoffs. “She isn’t even the best British TV detective. That honor goes to Sherlock Holmes.”
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"It's colder than a witch's tit," Gray grumbles. "Fuck Chicago, fuck the snow, and fuck America's Fahrenheit system for misleading me think it was warm enough to wear a T-shirt today."
P.S.
I hardly ever curse, so I have genuinely no idea why Gray insists on being like this. Please pardon his profanity--his natural instinct may be to cuss, but he's on his best behavior around Button.
Comments
Oh I love this, please let him curse more.
2021-04-02 10:46:54 +0000 UTCGray also has a very old fashioned chivalrous streak (it's both his best trait and worst flaw). Even if he'd met Button when they were older, he'd still not cuss around someone he was romantically interested in (at least in the newer phases of the relationship).
Jo O'Connor
2021-03-29 01:46:19 +0000 UTCHm, that makes sense, although the curbing his tongue around Button almost seems like he's treating her like a kid, which is weird if he's actually the LI 😭
Mich
2021-03-29 01:31:04 +0000 UTCIt's mostly because I like to use profanity sparingly for emphasis when writing! That way when someone curses, it lends more weight to the scene. I also feel that though Gray might curse around Nick a lot, he would probably try to curb his tongue around Button. So his cussing gets tempered around them except when he's passionate (like in his Chapter 3 speech to Confident/Morbid-Confident Buttons).
Jo O'Connor
2021-03-28 18:51:39 +0000 UTClet 👏 gray 👏 say 👏 fuck
Ema
2021-03-28 18:48:58 +0000 UTCIs the reason you edit his profanity because of the "rating" you want the game to end up being? If not, I think you should leave it! It adds something to his personality, tbh. Lol.
Mich
2021-03-28 18:48:01 +0000 UTCThat is so ENDEARING for some reason. Probably because he tries not to swear around Button 😂
Cas
2021-03-28 12:47:59 +0000 UTCwhy is the knowledge that grayson black typically swears like a sailor make him even more endearing??
emeraldgreaves
2021-03-28 12:32:20 +0000 UTCI love Gray even more know, he's a proper Brit! Please let him curse! 🙏
Bluebell09
2021-03-28 11:32:33 +0000 UTCstarting a new movement called 'let grayson say swear' jdkdjdkd but we do swear a lot in the uk. like. A lot a lot. So this is accurate.
2021-03-28 11:25:03 +0000 UTCAs a fellow Brit, i can confirm that swearing is second nature over here 🤣🤣
Ellen Dickens
2021-03-28 08:47:57 +0000 UTCNow all I can think about is that one comic format: Gray says fuck and Nick GASPS and puts his hands over Button’s ears. Cut to Button saying fuck and Nick being like “thats it I have to strangle my best friend there’s no other choice”
2021-03-28 08:41:32 +0000 UTCOh my gosh, I second Ignits, every single one of these is amazing and I will be saying them in my head in the relevant book chapters 😅
2021-03-28 05:43:44 +0000 UTCAmazing 😂
Iwona J.
2021-03-28 05:23:14 +0000 UTCOmg, I wish we had that in the finished book. Unfiltered Gray is amazing 😆
Ignits
2021-03-28 04:24:02 +0000 UTC
