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Added 2020-09-30 17:25:04 +0000 UTCHonestly I am a bit worried about this page, for the first time I am anxious for your opinion because the second panel has been totally rethought from the BW version.
https://pleasurebonbon-next.com/comics/volume/1/page/36
I believe I have improved it, I hope have done well.
And for this I have to thank Symphony because, having access to the WIP pages, he suggested that I change it with sincere feedback and a good explanation that convinced me to follow her advice.
This is a benefit of my Patrons, you can always say your though and can be relevant in the final choice, because you are my support and deserve my attention, I care about your opinion.
Unfortunately it wasn't possible for me to put a pillow in front of it, I tried so many times and it always seemed like she was alone, and it was strange.
So in the end, I drew her partner in a less revealing view.
But now I'm afraid it's too explicit... :O
I do not know. What do you think? :/
HD lovely lone pin up girls from the first panel are coming soon!
Comments
I too have read some hentai, I have reading them free at a friend's house because I never had money to spend on hentai XD LOL luckily I had many male friends otaku and who let me access their libraries, which I sifted through while they did their RPG games, to spend my time since I don't play. Good times XD I have to say about the "black bars of evil" which really didn't cover a damn thing LOL! Or at least the ones I've seen ... the bar was so thin that it was really a joke in some cases, and even the white erasures were very small... What I would like to do is not to use this type of post-production type of censorship, but to make complete drawings in which the genitals are covered with bodies, objects, ornaments. Regarding William, however, I have a doubt. If you remember, I drew his member as an anthropomorphic character at times, with eyes ... and even arms. I would like to continue becauseit is humoristic for me... and the "kawaii penis" has been release online ... I don't know how to tell it ... but apparently now it is no longer a problem, not even on facebook, to show penises ... cute ... like gadgets. Here is an example of what I've seen on Facebook... https://cf.shopee.ph/file/1287f086689d9a4740da32749b738024 What should I do for William? Can I continue drawing his "friend"? Or is it perhaps excessive?
Vanessa San
2020-10-05 17:31:48 +0000 UTCI think you dealt with keeping it within the rating you were aiming for just fine. Not every page can be a 10. There will be some challenges. Do the very best you can, don't dwell on the past, and keep making your chosen art. It is drawn very well and it tells a great story. Can't wait for the individual pinups from the 1st panel. Great work Vanessa.
Michael S Marks
2020-10-01 10:09:23 +0000 UTCI think it looks great, all things considered. I know PBBN is suppose to be more toned down as far as the lewd stuff goes, but at the same, it's part of what made the original PBB so amazing and memorable.
ToddRogue69
2020-10-01 00:54:20 +0000 UTCI wouldn't say it's too explicit. It's a difficult angle to conceal that which would cause issues with the age rating you've chosen to go with. Personally, having nothing there wouldn't have been -too- bad. But, perhaps I'm biased. I read a lot of hentai/doujins and they frequently use "black bars of evil" to cover very specific parts of the genitalia, which results in either massive black bars covering "the good stuff" or a lot of thin, long black lines all over the place. It's very intrusive and distracting, making it difficult to enjoy the scenes. Mosaic pixelation is another form of similar annoyance. One of the less common forms of censorship is "invisible parts". This form simply leaves the offending imagery out of the picture entirely, usually leaving the penis looking invisible or the inner details of the vagina blank. I find this method to be the least intrusive and distracting, I think, because it's less blatant and "in your face" as the other methods; it's more subtle. And, one can simply use their imagination to "fill in the blanks". One of my favourite hentai comics uses this method, so, I suppose I'm used to seeing it and it doesn't bother me a lot. But, that's just me. Using a cushion to hide this specific bit of the scene wasn't a bad idea. But, it would certainly cover a lot of other parts, too. If Betty had had a lot of long hair, you could've used that... maybe, having it fall over her shoulders and perhaps just barely cover the penis. But, honestly, I feel like the angle itself is to blame as it is simply too direct to easily conceal -that- specific part of it in a subtle, indirect manner. It's like trying to throw a bed sheet over a mountain to hide it. XD But, don't be discouraged. There are still many pages to come and scenes to draw. Not all of them will be "out of this world" amazing, but, that can't be helped. Sometimes good enough just has to do lest you find yourself obsessing and progress never gets made. Chalk it up to a lesson learned for future times. Overall, the panel isn't bad. It's a good penal and Betty looks lovely. I'd still give it a solid 7 out of 10. I might have made her breast press against his leg, though, rather than hang over it. But, that's a minor detail of personal preference. Keep up the awesome work! :D
Silvador
2020-09-30 21:14:20 +0000 UTCI mean, I don't mind explicit 'cus I'm a very simple man. Not very romantic, I know. But the other comments were right in that it's the only way the scene worked as drafted.
The14th
2020-09-30 18:04:50 +0000 UTC
