Chapter 261 - NSFW
Added 2022-05-27 08:43:26 +0000 UTCTHIS IS THE NSFW VERSION OF THE CHAPTER!!
If you're only interested in the -SFW- Version, which is half the length as I cut out a lot, go to the separate post!
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It's on Google Drive only!
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Comments
Haha, glad you enjoyed it! Unfortunately, this is kinda the only lewd chapter. There's tons of art instead, though xD
Teanam
2024-07-13 18:22:06 +0000 UTCImma be real, I've read a lot of erotic fictions, but i think this is the first one that made me cry (with joy of course)
Yolanda Squat Pump
2024-07-13 18:01:10 +0000 UTCWow, they really got invested in this... Well, I think everything should be dealt with between us now, so I hope it dies down...
Teanam
2022-05-28 08:27:28 +0000 UTCForli, probably the person you are referring to here, has been messaging people who commented on your story “about your lies”. They messaged someone in a discord I’m in.
Jessy
2022-05-28 03:40:27 +0000 UTCHappy to hear. I'll be posting something else really soon that also is a sequel in one way or another... Or maybe the result of a heartfelt suggestion~
Teanam
2022-05-27 17:03:04 +0000 UTCYa'know what, that's fair. I get what you mean. I don't write often, but sometimes I scroll back up once I'm out of ideas and then panic, thinking "WHEN DID IT GET SO LONG?!" But in any case, keep up the good work, and I look forward to the rest! "Sequel" or no, I'm here for the long haul!
Anderz Draconian
2022-05-27 17:00:18 +0000 UTCYay, I may do a sequel if I feel a little frisky again when writing a chapter~. Thanks for the corrections, too. I'll go ahead and ignore the last part~. It was actually the exact opposite because I just kept writing and writing without ever stopping. I wrote all of this in less time than I usually spend on half a chapter. Motivation had hit hard here. Once you have 6000+ words in front of you, where you didn't even realize having written half of it, making corrections becomes surprisingly hard.
Teanam
2022-05-27 16:53:58 +0000 UTCThat said, my inner grammar/spelling addict had some notes: "...Is it really for them having to match us..." (I think it's supposed to be asking the lines of "...is it really alright to make them match us...") "...She let go of the tigers hands and grabbed her shin..." (That threw me for a loop at first until I realized it was supposed to say "chin" which is on a completely different part of the body. "...Caused Ari to audible gulp..." (Should be either "audibly gulp" or "to let out an audible gulp" "... Once the two had /calmed down/ again, there wa..." (Missed an "s" after the transition) She of these are from the SFW version (which I read first) and I had already fixed it in my head so I didn't catch if they were in the NAFW version too... Been a minute since I found so many in one chapter... Harder to type with one hand? 😏
Anderz Draconian
2022-05-27 16:28:02 +0000 UTCI think you did great with it! Nothing too jarring, and it seemed like a relatively smooth transition between SFW and NSFW. Good work 👌
Anderz Draconian
2022-05-27 16:23:47 +0000 UTCIt probably looks weird because she is not looking where she is licking, but off to the side.
Jessy
2022-05-27 15:14:57 +0000 UTCHappy to hear~ I kinda dislike Ari's expression when she goes down on Anna, but other than that, I like them, too.
Teanam
2022-05-27 10:01:16 +0000 UTCOk, This was a great chapter. There was nothing about the lewd that felt off to me. the art work was great, and made the delay completely worth it.
Jessy
2022-05-27 09:45:49 +0000 UTCToxic people are really annoying
Jessy
2022-05-27 09:44:50 +0000 UTCHaha, thanks... I'm just a little sad that there is now a review on my page that calls my story disgusting. Not even counting in the part where they messaged me on RR after I blocked them on SH after I deleted their toxic comment and calling me a coward for deleting everything I don't like and blocking people... Just because of something they hate...
Teanam
2022-05-27 09:03:47 +0000 UTCIt's up now.
Teanam
2022-05-27 09:00:51 +0000 UTCOi, that 1* review should shove his head up a horses rear. this story is fucking great, dont let blind twats have a larger impact on your motivation than the people who love your story.
Jessy
2022-05-27 08:58:54 +0000 UTCWell, that happened… They finally stopped being dense. Like, for real. --- I’m still not sure how well all of this fits the story, but now it’s out. I’m actually not -that- unhappy with the result. It might ended up a little too hentai-like at some points and slightly awkward and too superficial with some other details, but what can you do? I didn't feel like writing anything too detailed or realistic and just had some fun. Don't read too much into it. Also, maybe take a look at the SFW Version and tell me if I should ‘drop the curtain’ a little earlier there… --- Helpful tips to make such scenes better (if I decide to do more), but please spare me with detailed critique… It was just an experiment and I also just got a 1* review from a slightly toxic person calling my story a ‘disgusting thing’… I’m already too miffed and de-motivated right now to hear even more. Sorry…
Teanam
2022-05-27 08:56:27 +0000 UTCDamn patreon, such a tease
Jessy
2022-05-27 08:44:13 +0000 UTC
