UTBW
Added 2025-05-15 14:04:54 +0000 UTCI want to rewrite UTBW, but not from the beginning. It should take a different route where he stays in the One Piece world longer. The original MC became so unbearable for me too. Any opinions?
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I don't understand his character arc. He just did things for the sake of doing them. There was no reason he provided or exemplified for his actions which made the story weird and not worthy of reading. The story was good in the one piece world, but it could've been explored more. Furthermore, he should've awaken conquer haki he share determination to save his clan makes him eligible for that. I think you should rewrite it partially. Explain why he's taking his actions and not make him too powerful too early. Otherwise you'll have to focus more on ethical dilemmas rather than power.
Hersh Jobanputra
2025-05-15 23:16:46 +0000 UTCYea I think staying in the one piece world a lil longer is better and everything when he got back to Konoha felt like everything went too smooth or happened to fast but overall loved the ride great story!!
Trashd
2025-05-15 16:42:06 +0000 UTCngl this mc went way to dark he practically just killed everyone who could have supported him
matt
2025-05-15 15:57:06 +0000 UTC
