Divine Apostasy Book 9 - Chapter 36
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Comments
Ruwen is checking a bunch of this off his list. Slowly but surely.
A. F. Kay
2023-11-04 06:36:23 +0000 UTCIt’s effective at imparting sense of impending crisis where unhandled issues snowball into catastrophe. Might need to explicitly touch on that in a POV so we as readers know that it’s deliberate rather than the author having forgotten about unresolved threads.
George Hicken
2023-10-21 17:49:37 +0000 UTCOr asking Lir about his top 10 issues…. not even a quick triage pass to determine urgency/impact.
George Hicken
2023-10-21 17:46:46 +0000 UTCWell, it seems he is never caught up with each disaster and when he does seem to get close ... another disaster happens and everything that came before is put on the back burner. He starts one thing and never seems to deal with it in full. There never seems to be enough time for him to do what he needs to do. Poor guy hasn't even spent time with his dungeon. He doesn't even know how big it is. And don't get me started about him helping (what's his name) clean any more underwear. Hehe as sift would call it
Lena M. Lucente
2023-10-14 05:21:17 +0000 UTCI appreciate this feedback. I am concerned about this as well, a lot actually. I'm currently trusting my instincts that it will all turn out fine. But I appreciate you letting me know you are sensing the same.
A. F. Kay
2023-10-14 04:41:30 +0000 UTCGreat points as always Sam.
A. F. Kay
2023-10-14 04:39:42 +0000 UTCThis is great feedback Anna. I will look at the placement of that. I did have a similar concern when I was writing it, but I tend to just trust my gut in the first draft. I think alleviating some of the time pressure that Tarot created in the beginning might help.
A. F. Kay
2023-10-14 04:39:17 +0000 UTCditto...haha
A. F. Kay
2023-10-14 04:36:12 +0000 UTCI worry about this. I'm scared I have pushed things too far too fast.
A. F. Kay
2023-10-14 04:36:00 +0000 UTCI think of this as a prologue to Lir’s story we have only gotten bits and pieces of it from earlier in this book and I think one mention in the previous book the emotion is not there right now because we are not invested in him yet a few chapters ago he just started having emotions imagine 3-4 more parts with Lir then we will have that investment and I think Lir is going to play a very big role soon
Samuel Strode
2023-10-09 01:08:27 +0000 UTCI like that things are coming to a head but it seems like didn’t they just have this epic battle inside the rift and gain all these crazy revelations? And then Hamma and the femites? I feel like it isn’t so much too complicated as it is moving so fast through all this new information without a lot of time/events to digest it.
Elle Mahaney
2023-10-07 23:12:04 +0000 UTCI'm not sure about the timing of that piece about Lir's past. I just don't feel any emotional impact - I'm not sure how to explain it better. It's like here we talk about the crisis and by the way here's a rather tragic piece about my past and oh no it's so sad but anyway let's go back to our previous discussion. Maybe it deserves more screen time? Or just a different moment to be mentioned? Right now, for me, it's just a bit dry.
Anna Boratyńska
2023-10-07 12:07:06 +0000 UTCThings are getting way too complicated.
Lena M. Lucente
2023-10-07 07:57:33 +0000 UTCThings are getting way too complicated.
Lena M. Lucente
2023-10-07 07:57:24 +0000 UTC
