Thoughts on this long summary?
Added 2021-02-11 10:32:55 +0000 UTC(Also need y'alls opinion on this long summary for vol. 1 - it goes up until Ky rips Scra's feathers out).
Scra never imagined that he would be at the lowest point in his life when he made his first friend. Wing clipped and initiated into a Murder he’d spent his life trying to avoid, a boy with Osprey wings and no business taking interest in a Crow like him drops in on him – and then refuses to leave. Night after night throughout the summer the two talk, building a friendship on a lonely cliff top. Until Scra disappears, that is.
Ky isn’t sure what he did to cause the Crow boy to stand him up, but he sure did regret not asking him his name beforehand. He also didn’t expect to have the opportunity to find it out quite so soon, as his new roommate at the military academy he’s attending looks awfully familiar.
Life at The Roost isn’t all flight tests and combat training, however, and Scra soon realizes that he’ll need some allies if he’s to balance his two lives in this manufactured utopia, and uncover the truth about the whispers of a superweapon – “The Croaking” – that are seeping from the cracks.
Comments
I like the backdrop of the summer leading to the roost, it flows well. Pick one perspective, Scra first and then Ky for vol 2. I second intro the world a bit more. Like..."On the sole inhabited island, Scra never intended to find a friend on his lonely cliff" or something.
Raven
2021-02-14 14:55:48 +0000 UTCI think it sums up the storyline very well
Julia Pearson
2021-02-12 02:17:23 +0000 UTCI think it might work better if it were all from Ky's perspective, with Scra framed as a more mysterious figure that he's trying to learn more about, since that's how the early chapters are. It seems unnecessary to summarize the prologue in such detail when that part is so quick and not so essential to the plot - better to focus on the uneasy situation between them as roommates who aren't sure if they can trust each other.
Cheri
2021-02-11 16:25:05 +0000 UTCI like it, but I would change the last part to something like "Scra soon realizes that he’ll need some allies if he’s to balance his two lives in this delicate utopia that breaks every day while the secret of "the croaking" push through the cracks" Or something like that :3
Valkiria Gaitán
2021-02-11 16:22:13 +0000 UTCYeah, thats a good idea. The contrast between The Murder and The Roost will make Scra an interesting character. The reader will want to know why is he living between two worlds, and which are his real allegancies
AlterPhoenix
2021-02-11 11:14:52 +0000 UTCI also think an introduction to the world would be good. It's so unique that some people might be intrigued by that. And I would mention that The Roost is the military academy. I'm also not sure if a sentece about the Murder would be needed. It would make Scra's situation clearer to people who do not know the comic yet.
Anamonique Nau
2021-02-11 10:56:07 +0000 UTCooo good idea. and ive always umed about that but it was always in the original description so wasn't really a spoiler, but I'm never sure what to call it otherwise?? I'll have a think
Megan
2021-02-11 10:44:17 +0000 UTClmao that's too much but thanks haha
Megan
2021-02-11 10:40:42 +0000 UTCMaybe you need an introduction to the world we are about to discover for people that don't know your work at all. Also I wouldn't metioned the croaking as a superweapon. Isn't that a bit spoiler?
AlterPhoenix
2021-02-11 10:40:38 +0000 UTCLove it !
Alyzee Hue- Renaudin
2021-02-11 10:39:41 +0000 UTC👀👀👀 absolutely gripping
Feather
2021-02-11 10:38:55 +0000 UTCI like it
Nijea Wyatt
2021-02-11 10:34:29 +0000 UTC
