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Finally, the survey! please take your time and comment ^^

Well, as you all know, the first act of What a twist! is done ^^ now it's time to start with the act two, where I'm going to focus on some sexy experiences that Romeo and Bastian had together.

But first I want to know your oppinion about the first act. I'll use your suggestions to improve my work ^^ so all the feedback is very welcome.


Ok, the questions are here:


1 - The first part of the comic has been an introduction of the characters. I wanted to show the personality of Romeo and Bastian and how they act in some situations. I wanted you feel empathy with the characters. Now the question is, do you think that part has been too long?


2 - This question is about the art. I know the panels in my comic are very 'static' like square panels (simple layout page, easy to read) however I was wondering if you prefer more 'dinamic' pages, with characters jumping out from the panels, big onomatopoeias, less panels per page but with more details... what do you think?


3 - The last one, what do you expect to see in the comic? you know, before the final act with the 'hourglass game' there's a 2º act (full of sex of course :P) with some experiences with Romeo and Bastian. I'll show you some experiences they had together when they were teenagers, for example ^^ So the question is, if you're interested in know the sexual past of the characters, this act will be longer, if you're not interested in their past, I'll do this chapter shorter.


Thanks to all

<3 you can answer this survey in the comments or write me an email ^^ many thanks!


All the patreons can comment ^^

Comments

Thanks a lot Lobo! ^^

Leobo

Ok, ok, I know that I´m late, but here is my apportation 1- As introduction was a nice length, enough to get an idea of how they are and what will this comic about...and It wasn't boring or slow 2- Panels are simple and easy, this is great for keep the attention on each scene and not on how is the page organized and I like it. Maybe, for make a critique, could be nice not to do it so geometric. 3- I hope that this act be longer, and expect to know how their friendship grew, some youth follies, past problems.... and yes, dont forget the sex XD Summarizing, I like to know more about Romeo &amp; Bastian, their lives and how they are on the next act

Lobo

Thanks ^^ in the comic won't happen things like that again, I mean, you can expect humour and nice things from now. Also if you all like to know more about the Rabbit and the Deer, I have plot for a spin off for these two.

Leobo

Thanks a lot Arthur! Yeah, they had... something in the past, you'll see hehe

Leobo

Guess the enter button posts the comment! 2. I think the layout of the panels are perfectly fine. If you wanted to go ahead and try out a new layout with them I encourage you to do so. Its a new chapter and you can test new layouts. I will say during the really "intense" scenes I think more detail wouldn't hurt. 3. I expect to be teased more and more with whats to come. I honestly expect both characters to be kinda hesitant to start considering both their normal top roles. Especially Romeo since hes been with his ex for so long. I also interested in seeing if they had any kinda interest in each other before all this went down. They seem to have flirted a bit before this so I wondering if they did anything at all. Even if its just kissing.

Arthur Adams

1. Liked the first part of the comic. I felt bad for both of them. I was actually more upset with how the deer acted then the rabbit. I think that it was just right. If you actually wanted to do a few more pages after I think that would have been fine too. Mostly because you kept on teasing us with little hints on what is to come.

Arthur Adams

1. Liked the first part of the comic. I felt bad for both of them. I was actually more upset with how the deer acted then the rabbit. I think that it was just right. If you actually wanted to do a few more pages after I think that would have been fine too. Mostly because you kept on teasing us with little hints on what is to come.

Arthur Adams

Thanks a lot Daitenshi!

Leobo

A little late on the ball here, but i still wanted to try and help by giving my input! First off and to answer the first point, i really like what you've done so far. i don't think it's too long and i, in fact, like a good backstory so this has been really nice and i wouldn't have complained if it was even longer! On the second point, something that i've noticed in art - manga and comics, is that the layout can itself give a sense of feeling in the imagery. This may not be the case for everyone, but i tend to notice it. Static rectangular layouts are used often with story and tale-telling - sometimes with a spread or singular offset bubble to add visual cue. Static layouts using more angled boxes (parallelograms) are used as emotion and tension are being displayed and give differing angles for the background when spreads, close-ups, or features are used. Static layouts with a focus on vertical imagery tend to be used when attention is trying to be drawn to something in the imagery and is often also accompanied by or the focus of close-ups. Dynamic layouts focusing on unbound images and mostly spreads or close-ups usually come into use with more action or dominant/power related imagery. (Again this may be just my own personal bias and be a load of nonsense, but it's just what i've seemed to observe over the years.) On the third point, i'm honestly just excited to see where you plan on taking the story. I like backstory and the romps are fun to see as well. I will say that i'm honestly a little apprehensive of seeing them as 'teens' though. I don't really like the idea of 'underage' if it might lead to things getting explicit for them... i'll trust your decision though. Sorry for the long post, keep up the great work!!

daitenshi

Thanks a lot! ^^

Leobo

hehe nice, thank you!

Leobo

Awesome, thanks!

Leobo

Genial, muchas gracias!

Leobo

okay took my time to think it off and not speed it up so i can give honest answers 1: no it wasn't to long and gave the general misunderstanding or stereotypes that people have about doms 2: you details was good sincerely 3: sincerely i never been someone stuck in the past. some of my past isn't that great to remember and the rest well it doesn't help to live on it. so i would personally skim through it. like "remember when we nearly got discovered that time?" and such but not make it as long as the first part. here is my "two cents" hehe

Karmakat

1. I don't think it took too long at all, we had to know the characters or their backstory or at least a bit of what they had to deal with who they were with and how they will act in certain situations. Well I don't think I would really act any different if I had to deal with a rabbit that wasn't being.... Well rather not wanted to be with him unless he started playing nice. Which he wont, but I loved it no matter what and wouldn't change a thing with it. 2. I have no issues with it but I do love the art and I don't really care how long it takes or how many panels but would keep doing what you're doing because it's amazing. ^-^ 3. Yays backstory time! Gimmie gimmie gimmie! I mean... When it gets there but I can wait, besides this is worth the wait not matter how long it'll be but it's worth the wait. :D

1.I think the first act was great, it did a good job of explaining how each of them act and what they are really about as individuals. 2.personally the detail in each panel is good for me, I have no issues with it. 3.Personal experience in the past would probably be pretty hot I think but also I would like to see if possible while Romeo &amp; Bastian are fucking if one of there roommates comes in and than its a three way but if not no biggy. Love the comic so far can't wait for the next pages 😜

Sparky1989

Te contesto en español mejor :P 1: No, las introduciones son necesarias y utiles, has usado muy bien lso recursos de las historias para mostrar tanto su personalidad como su relación, las escenas de sexo están muy bien pero son mejores si como has hecho le pones un buen transfondo 2:Personalmente me gusta como lo llevas ahora es un estilo propio y lo de las onomatopeyas grandes...no me llama 3:Me gustaria saber como se conocieron, siendo su personalidad como es tuvo que ser divertido el encuentro.

Naki


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