Can One Displaced Hero Save the Galaxy? Ch 52-55
Added 2024-09-23 04:56:22 +0000 UTCEdit - Typo corrections made on 10/3/2024, thanks to Foreign Traveller's help!
Whew! Just barely got this done before midnight. Editing took longer than expected! This set of chapters covers some hops and skips of time as we build toward the really big changes to the Star Wars timeline that I've been working toward from the start. I was a little disappointed that I didn't quite get to the start of those. But it felt like too big of a time skip to do all at once. Ergo, we see with this release a bunch of snippets that happen over the course of almost 2 years as they build towards the moment of Epic Derailment.
I'm also going to have quite a few authors to put in the comments section. Though I'm going to take a break for a bit before I do that. For now, the new chapters are, as always, attached to this post in a variety of formats. Likewise, I'll update the Master Files shortly. The total word count came in at just over 16,000 words, this time! So enjoy the slightly extra large content drop ;-)!
Note: About the ship images! Neither one are entirely accurate. The Volition-Class is an AI image (I don't know who made the original) that I want to tweak a bit. The ship in-story doesn't have the spikey claw bits forward of the wing (seriously, what even are those supposed to be). But this IS the image I used as a general guideline to describe the ship by. The Hammer Head is an image of one before they modified the design, so it's not quite a match for the ones they'll be using either.
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Hmmm, I still need to run an actual poll about that. I think I intended to after the last update and kinda forgot when I got sick right afterwards -_-. Ah, well. It will technically be better to run said poll after Izuku meets two more of the possible additions to their polycule. Which should hopefully happen in the next update. (Note: No, not all of them will be added. They are only potentials).
Novus Peregrine
2025-02-05 22:38:36 +0000 UTC+1 padme if that still a thing lol
Luke Matthews
2025-02-05 21:26:24 +0000 UTCEdits made! Thanks! And yes, commas are the bane of my existence. Have been for decades. I've MOSTLY got them sorted by now, after years of effort and the occasional editor wanting to hit me with something heavy...
Novus Peregrine
2024-10-03 06:45:17 +0000 UTCHey Novus! Here to continue helping you out! My proof reading structure will be the same like it was for HB and will be so for all future comments I'll leave here on Patreon! 'Let's get to brass tacks! Reading from the PDF! Displaced Hero Chapter 52 Page 2 Izuku shot her a betrayed look, with his lover only grinning cheerfully back at him as she refused to "walk" back her sentence of leaving him to her fate... Edit: "Take" back. Page 3: Though from what he could see the truth of that for things like trade, or even travel just travel in general, had rapidly taken a nosedive in the last century or so. Edit: Though from what he could see, the truth was for things like trade or even just traveling in general, they'd rapidly taken a nosedive in the last century or so. But, well...the utter dumb fuck of a "precious" chancellor that had let corporations start holding Senate seats... Edit: But, well...the utter dumb fuck of a "previous" Chancellor... Page 5: "I'm completely "unsurprise" by that, Master Yaddle. Edit: Completely "Unsurprised" Page 7: But, save in cases like Aayla's or Anakin's where they were "recused" from slavery, that just flat out wasn't the case. Edit: Where they were "rescued" "Skywalker doesn't have an initiate file. Reassignment only handles initiates... "But Skywalker never was an initiate." Edit: Initiate He'd gotten away with "is" mostly because they couldn't stop him, and he was otherwise a model Jedi. Edit: He'd gotten away with "it" If they'd done their due diligence, they'd have "been" reported up the chain, and most likely forwarded to Kenobi as the only real authority... Edit: They'd have reported up the chain, and most likely been forwarded to Kenobi as the only real authority... That will be need to be tracked down and the individual punished. Edit: The individual will need to be tracked down and punished. (?) Displaced Hero Chapter 53 Page 9 Aayla hadn't escaped the grip of the "archivists" and Council of First Knowledge after all. Edit: "Archivists" Instead, he'd been out "of" a mission with his master when Aayla first arrived. Edit: Instead, he'd been out "on" a mission with his Master... Bad because the "archivists" and First Knowledge people had gotten their hands on her... Edit: Bad because the Archivists and those of First Knowledge had gotten their hands on her... (You can keep the original if you want Novus. Just thought the edit sounded better. Just my opinion!) She was virtually certain he was seeing a Shatterpoint evolving around her presence here, and that the longer she stayed the larger and more probable it was growing. Edit: She was virtually certain he was seeing a Shatterpoint evolving around her presence here and knew that the longer she stayed, the larger and more probable it would grow to be. Page 10: ...only now was she beginning to see the fracture lines she'd missed as initiate Edit: Initiate Page 12: "...going to get pulled in for a lecture by the Seekers about how to properly handle new initiates." Edit: Initiates Page 13: 'Oh, Force, not another one.' Edit: 'Oh Force, not another one.' , so it's policy to take care of it, even if it requires bending laws... Edit: ,so it's policy to take care of it even if it requires bending laws... Page 14: ...Skywalker gone into a normal "initiate" position. Edit: Initiate. Page 15: ",plus the karking mess of us not doing this "soon", is giving to leave some baggage. Edit: ",plus the karking mess of us not doing this "sooner"... Page 16: Thankfully, the reason the Force had pulled them "too" him... Edit: Thankfully, the reason the Force had pulled them "to" him... Chapter "55": Putting the Pieces in Place. Edit: Chapter "54" Displaced Hero Chapter 54 Page 21 The sheer scale of what "Sage" Midoriya and Knight Secura... Edit: Shouldn't it be "Battle Master" or am I misremembering? The Five "Priestess"... Edit: The Five "Priestesses"... Displaced Hero Chapter 54 Page 23 Padme Amidala shook her head "as" Izuku's politeness... Edit: Shook her head "at" Izuku's politeness... Page 24: "It is "too" my great distress..." Edit: "It is "to" my great distress..." "I had, until "the Jedi Order" recently contacted me requesting what details I remembered of the event, previously assumed the Jedi Order had done so after taking in her son." Edit: I had, until "they" recently contacted me... (Again, seems to sound better but up to you Novus) Page 25: There was also no question that it had done the stressed-out Queen a fantastic "among" of good. Edit: Fantastic "amount" of good. "Well my people are proud..." Edit: "While my people are proud..." "As I'm sure you know, given how many of my disgruntled and angry citizens left for your own planet and companies, there was a major debate about if we should arm ourselves or not after the invasion was over." Edit: "There was another major debate about if we should arm ourselves or not." (I believe these three already went over the debate about Naboo arming themselves or not due to the invasion when they first met no? Especially since it's mentioned further down that the debate was "reignited". So I think you can take out the invasion portion of this sentence. Could be wrong of course but thought I'd point it out regardless.) Finally done! Again! Actually researched more in depth this time cause I "almost" put down a correction for Rumi's Hero Name. Mirko in English but "Miruko" in Japanese. Glad I did! Also, I had no idea "minutiae" was even a word! In my dictionary you go! Almost pointed the comma's you had before "but" so I researched again and was told that: "Yes, you should put a comma before "but" when it connects two independent clauses. You should not put a comma before "but" when it connects phrases" and "You should also put a comma after "but" when it is followed by an interrupter." Either I forgot or just didn't know this tidbit of information but I do now! Of course, any mistakes I made myself in my proofreading I apologize for. As the Writer, however, you know best how you want your story to flow better then "I" ever will. Anyway, keep up the good work Novus! Get plenty of rest and take proper breaks! Do NOT overstress yourself or I'm going to be very "unhappy" with you... Now to your other stories!
The Foreign Traveler
2024-10-02 00:38:41 +0000 UTCI'm aware of that. I meant that I don't know of any mythology that gives the North Star/Lode Star/Star of the Sea/Etc. that particular meaning. Maybe some sort of Astrology? I'm afraid that's one thing I've never looked into.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-25 02:02:12 +0000 UTCWell Polaris is another name for the North Star
JaunetheRNJR
2024-09-24 14:19:43 +0000 UTC*blink* Polaris as in the star? I don't think I've ever heard that as it's meaning.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-24 07:17:00 +0000 UTCI am curious if Polaris is a good name for the new faction. It sounds nice and if someone knows what it is named after it is more meaningful. Something that guides others to their destination in this case being a brighter future.
JaunetheRNJR
2024-09-24 00:39:07 +0000 UTCI agree with your thoughts on Her and Anakin's entire relationship raising a lot of red flags, as it did so for me also. And I really hope that Padme will be joining Aayla and Mai as one of Izuku's ladies, because as we have seen in this latest update from you, she fits in nicely! Thanks once again for your great work! Can't wait to read more!
Aeden Emrys
2024-09-24 00:04:04 +0000 UTC@Jamie Celtic Oh! Paladin would be a great name for one of their ship classes. So would Vanguard, actually. Though I think their might have been a gunship with that class name... I'm glad you like Chaos Aayla, she's fun to write ;-). As for Padme, I've always felt she was really Chaotic Good. What with constantly running off into warzones and fully capable of getting herself back out rather than being a damsel in distress. Not to mention the number of times she bent the rules until the rules developed enough sentience to cry and plea for mercy :-p. So letting her go off the rails and exploring that is very very tempting...
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 22:45:45 +0000 UTC@Keht Jelicho - Oh! I like some of those name possibilities. 'Free Star Unity' for the faction and the 'Unity Council' for the leadership is particularly good! If I don't come up with (or see someone suggest) something better, I might well go with those :-)! Thanks for the suggestions! And Autonomy-class would be a great ship name. I haven't actually named their Hammerhead class revision yet, and I think it might well fit with its type/role. Or, for that matter, it would fit well with a larger Carrier Class, which is something I intend them to have eventually.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 22:40:18 +0000 UTCI'm glad you enjoyed them :-). And, one way or another, Padme's canon pairing isn't going to happen. Her and Anakin's entire relationship raised like 900 red flags for me, even when I was a teenager and had a hard time focusing past Nataile Portman's boobs...
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 22:35:20 +0000 UTCShe'll serve at least one term in the Senate, but may or may not stick with that. Technically, she should already be a senator, but I choose to fiddle with the timeline a bit. Canon has her serving two terms as Queen, but somehow two terms only being a total of four years. Which is just...no. If the ruler of a planet had to stand for election every 2 years, literally nothing would ever get done, since they'd spend every other year on the campaign trail. I shifted it to a slightly saner 3-year term, so she's just finishing up as Queen now and will be in her first term as a Senator when Izuku's plan kicks off in full new update.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 22:32:28 +0000 UTCGreat couple of chapters! Loved the Padme bit and I feel that she would be a good fit for joining the pairing. Especially because they would be good for each other as Padme would get to loosen up and have a better support network, and she can make sure they don't go to far or understand more of the politics. Also is she going to still become a senator or is she going to join the League?
JaunetheRNJR
2024-09-23 15:51:47 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapters! A great many interesting things happen in these chapters and I am very much looking forward to seeing how events will develop! I love the changes happening on Naboo and the interactions between Izuku, Aayla and Padme really makes me look forward to seeing Padme join Aayla and Mei in a relationship with Izuku! So yes, I say go with your words of "Kiss canon Padme goodbye as she's forced to embrace her true Chaotic Good alignment instead of pretending she's Lawful Good ..."! Say goodbye to Padme's canon pairing and have her paired with Izuku! Thanks again for your great work on this story! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Aeden Emrys
2024-09-23 14:37:54 +0000 UTCReally enjoyed the padme bit at the end ,showing how naboo's dealing with their blinkers getting ripped off and how their adjusting to the galaxies harsh reality, also loving chaotic aayla and think it would be great if padme joined and we can read a chaotic good padme
Jamie Celtic
2024-09-23 11:09:29 +0000 UTCGreat chapter its got me excited for the next one loved how your showing izukus/aaylas plans coming together and even whats going on in the background to make it happen , love the ship design think it looks and sounds awesome with the name if your looking for a name replacement might i suggest paladin class as could see izuku liking it as paladins were known for there heroism and it would be a good bit of galactic pr as the public could associate with being in the right/virtuos, for the council name what about either vanguard council or even liberty vanguard as the name fits as the members will be leading the way in their movement , any way thanks for a great chapter now going to reread it 😄
Jamie Celtic
2024-09-23 10:59:57 +0000 UTCPerhaps using the word Unity somewhere? Union, similar to the Federation, has connotations with the techno Union and wouldn't really work, but perhaps Unity? The Free Star Unity, the Unity Council, The Liberation Unity, Freedom Stellar Unity, Stellar Unity of the Liberated or Stellar Unity of Liberation?. Or go with two names like the CIS/Confederacy of Independent Systems were also simply called the Seperatists. Since a big part of Izuku's plan lay on being outside the Republic/not beholden to the Republics rules, then a possible shorthand name for their faction could simply be the Autonomists as they are not a part of the Republic that is seceding, but rather they have never been a part of the Republic/have their own autonomy from it, plus they both fight to give autonomy to slaves and are made of former slaves that have been given (back) their autonomy. On the other hand Autonomy might make a decent name for a ship class (not sure if alternative for Volition or not) especially if said class is specifically designed to deploy solo/be extremely self-sufficient. Coalition of Autonomous Space? Fellowship of Autonomous Systems/Peoples.. er never mind not Peoples with that one, FAP as an acronym opens up too much room for jokes. Autonomous Association of Free Stars?
Keht Jelicho
2024-09-23 09:08:45 +0000 UTCYeah, that's the practical version of being peaceful in a world/galaxy that not everyone is. It's a truism that's stood the test of time and been restated a thousand ways. "Speak softly and carry a Big Stick" is yet another in same vein. There isn't any one great example of it in Star Wars. There are many mentions in the EU of Alderaan actually having a military and defenses, but those contradict other canon sources, and even in Legends that was never really resolved properly. As for specific events...well, you'll see in the next update why big enough butterflies might not even allow any one canon event to happen the same way. I won't say more on that yet. So far, despite all the hints I've worked into the story, no one that's actually said anything seems to have realized just what Izuku is up to ;-). The Katana Fleet. This has been brought up several times by different people. I'll say the same thing now as I have to them...I'm reluctant to use it. Technically, it would fit perfectly with what I'm done, and be a useful addition. Unfortunately, it's been used, a LOT, by a number of major star wars fics. It tends to be everyone's go-to solution to 'a new faction needs a bunch of ships!' Which makes me instinctively resist using it, as I hate treading old ground too much. I still might do it, but if I do it will be as a nice addition to bolster their forces, rather than super important to making them a major power.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 08:58:52 +0000 UTCI like this Padme/the Naboo becoming aware of the principles of a quote I have seen a few times recently: "You can’t truly call yourself peaceful unless you’re capable of great violence. If you’re not capable of violence, you’re not peaceful, you’re harmless. Important difference." As well as some others that came up when I tried to find the above: "Pacifism without strength is just weakness, to live in peace you need the power to keep all the threats away." And "Si vis pacem, para bellum" aka "If you desire peace, prepare for war". This being further shown in the example of the Gungans as they have come to realize: the Gungans Choose peace, but they have a significant ability to wage war/Grand Army. At the same time I also like, and find it fitting with their culture and social mores, that they are choosing to be as non-lethal as they can be in their building up an ability to wage war should one come to them again. A Padme with This background/set of experiences and viewpoint, and one that has been much more thoroughly shown the darker nature of the reality of the galaxy leading to a much more tempered and realistic outlook to her idealism, that is a padme I actually Can see becoming involved with Aayla and Izuku. Or more aptly, one I can see the two of them becoming involved with her like this than they would have to the naive version in canon. At this point, and especially if the council learns of the relationship Aayla has with her/Padme requests her because of the relationship/friendship, then I could even see Aayla actually being the one assigned to guard and/or investigate the assassination attempts and/or escort her back to Naboo. As opposed to Anakin and Obiwan doing so. Or Obi-wan and Anakin both investigating while Aayla plays the role of guard/escort. Or some other change that leads to Padme and Anakin having a much reduced reintroduction/interaction. Also, will you be dealing with the Katana Fleet at all in your story? I admittedly don't know much of what actually happened/where it ended up, just that it was a fleet of 200 Dreadnought class heavy cruisers (and I would, realistically, think a number of supply and support ships too) that had some kind of (AI?) Linkage/networking, that the fleet disappeared, and I think that viruses were the cause, both computer and possibly biological for the crews? It indirectly came up as a reference in another fic recently, and I am curious if/how they will be handled here.
Keht Jelicho
2024-09-23 08:26:51 +0000 UTCChapter 55: A/N 1: Padme! I wanted them to see her again before the chaos really gets rolling. Speaking of which, however, from these last few chapters...I think you can see what the effect of being around Mei too much has had on Aayla :-p. Chaos Aayla is kinda fun to write, and she makes total sense when you consider who her original Master was. Quinlan Vos was very much a chaotic troll type personality. Add in frequent exposure to Mei...and you get Chaos Aayla, who will continue to make appearances when and where appropriate. A/N 2: Padme is one of the very few additional girls that I'm considering adding to the pairing. Feel free to chime in on that thought. Though, be warned, if it happens? Kiss canon Padme goodbye as she's forced to embrace her true Chaotic Good alignment instead of pretending she's Lawful Good...badly.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 06:02:39 +0000 UTCChapter 54: A/N 1: I'm...not entirely happy with their faction name or the game of the Council. There's a reason I specifically left myself with an out of sorts, where it mentions the names might be changed even in-universe. Frankly, if anyone thinks they have a better name? Feel free to make suggestions. If I like it, I'll even throw in a credit for you in an author's note if I make the change ;-). A/N 2: I'm also not entirely happy with the name of the Volition-class. Though it does sort of fit and is less cheesy than, say, the Freedom class or something. I actually forgot that there's an AI image I used for the ship. I'm not fully happy with it, I want to tweak the image a bit, but I'm going to go back in a moment to add it in the post. Just keep in mind that the image isn't entirely accurate.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 05:49:24 +0000 UTCChapter 53: A/N 1: Jedi Factions. This is a thing I actually liked about the EU novels and games, as they made it clear that the Jedi Order isn't entirely monolithic. That, as with ANY organization that gets big enough, they have factions and internal politics. The Grey Paladins, Altisian Jedi, and Iron Knights are all Legends groups, I didn't just make them up. I'm making use of them and others to show the fracture lines and internal points of contention within the Order. A/N 2: So, this isn't a fix-it fic. Anakin isn't going to suddenly be all rainbows and puppies. He's still got ISSUES, and in some ways this might actually have made them WORSE, since he now has a reason to blame the Jedi for fucking up. Not to mention specifically blaming his Master for not doing things right. That said, I've set him up with the CHANCE to get better. Knocking one major crisis point out of whack, then insuring he gets at least some help from a qualified psychologist equivalent.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 05:44:58 +0000 UTCChapter 52: A/N 1: Woo. We get to see the Council get chewed out! On that topic though...I'm threading a VERY fine line with the Jedi Order in this story. Frankly, the Jedi Order in the movies, cartoons, and even to a lesser extent in the novels? They come off as cartoonishly incompetent. Which is...reallllllyy a hard sell for me. The Jedi have been around for a long, LONG time. The idea that they haven't codified some extremely basic rules of 'how not to fuck up epically' is just...not believable. As a result, I've tried to sort of reshuffle them a bit, without actually changing much. To treat them as if they are actually sane, competent individuals, rather than caricatures. There's no way they DON'T know that Jedi basically have a 'live in interesting times' curse. It's literally the whole point of their Order to go out and fix all the horrible things that throw the galaxy out of whack. Which makes the idea they wouldn't be 'genre savvy' enough to avoid pitfalls like leaving a student's family enslaved...nonsense. They literally teach kids to reach out and connect to information in the galaxy, and it routinely shows them horrible shit happening to people they care about. Why would they actively make that WORSE? Ergo, my explanation of what happened with Anakin and Shmi, that they fell through cracks in a system that had never been noticed, because normally no student that old (human at least) leaves taken in. The dogpile of exceptions regarding him, combined with the distraction of a Sith popping up, conspiring to create a fuck up that, in fact, the Council isn't actually okay with...
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 05:37:38 +0000 UTCThis comment is for Author's Notes! The comments nested under it are A/Ns for the new chapters. I highly recommend reading those chapters first, since the A/N's will be spoiler heavy.
Novus Peregrine
2024-09-23 05:27:32 +0000 UTC
