Circus Freaks pg 18 draft (script)
Added 2025-05-27 14:22:59 +0000 UTCP1: Striker goes quiet.
P2: Glam reaches out her hands to place on his.
GLAM: What happened to her?
P3: He sneers.
STRIKER: Blue blood.
P4: Silhouettes of a Goetia bowing to Striker's love, taking her hand.
STRIKER (narration): Some noble Goetia comes strolling into town, Satan-knows-why, and sets his eyes on my girl. He lavishes the town with riches, buying this and that, while I was struggling just to buy a single diamond smaller than your nail. He starts wooing all of us low-class folk about life in the city among them nobles.
P5: A young Striker scowls.
STRIKER (narration): He framed it as some sort of fairy tale, a dream for all of them to try to achieve. But I saw right through that malarky. Sunnovabitch was bragging, telling us straight to our faces just where our ilk stands: the bottom. And just like any good con man...
P6: A silhouetted shot of the lover, but her eyes are wide open, glistening with hope.
STRIKER (narration): ...he saw the stars in my girl's eyes. He promised her a new life, if only she would follow him there. Maybe she thought she'd come right back. Maybe she thought it was just a tour. But she stayed and never came back.
Comments
It sounds to me like Glam and Glitz went a little overboard when they called her "the one who got away", it doesn't look like a missed chance, "the girl" was probably lured by the knight in shining armor, his luxury and maybe she didn't even like Striker enough to come back for him. (Tom and Jerry: Blue cat blues). On the other hand, it could indicate that Striker is mentally unbalanced, if the motivation for his life as an outlaw is a betrayal in love, which occurred about...15 - 20 years ago.
Sandos
2025-05-27 18:14:23 +0000 UTCThank you for continuing this story. Sad as it is, it appears Stryker was too much of a traditionalist and missed his chance. Should have proposed with whatever he had on hand and gotten a proper ring on first anniversary.
Pinhead
2025-05-27 16:08:14 +0000 UTC
