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Unexpected Affections Ch 106-108

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Its needs anothe Zara/Ollie/April 3some....and maybe some Zara/Ollie sex...maybe he visits her in Vegas while Margot/Hannah/Hiraku fall into a lesbian orgy....

Robin Holden

You just have to get to the part where Hiki gets the dicky and everyone will be happy! Cheers ๐Ÿป

Psychopuppy

Also.. I like the fact that he doesn't have to be a white knight for these girls. They are perfectly normal and safe. So it's interesting how you shape the romance bit - esp since they are have different interests. Zara is the only one that needs a white knight atm - which is why perhaps their relationship feels stronger

Bharath

Love the smut but IMO you can also add what makes Margot like Ollie for more than just being a good guy and friend. Surely, since she obviously likes the guy to the point where she almost says she loves him - there should be more than just helping her move in and being a nice guy to count on. I mean he's friendzone material and just having a hot gf and sex shouldn't be enough. Perhaps establish a more meaningful relationship between him and the girls? Hannah and he share a history ... not so much for Hikaru and Margot IMO. Zara's character has a deeper relationship with him already than Margot and Hikaru atm.

Bharath

TFTC! her big testicles - ... is there something you forgot to tell us about Margot? ;)

HN

That's the plan, alongside looking in on a couple of other things

BreaktheBar

Mmm. Maybe skip a few days in the next half? Margot keeps coming over, or Ollie goes to her, but tell don't show?

Jason Hatter

I'd say the pacing for the chapter is good. Overall, I'm really looking forward to adding Hikiro to the mix so it's a good balance of SoL vs just rushing to adding the next member of the harem.

Jeff Hughes

I'm gonna be honest on this one, folks. I'm not sure how I feel about these chapters. They felt a little rushed to me, but I'm also trying to keep this story moving because lingering on sex between Margot and Ollie would get repetitive to write, and drag things on. Not sure if I hit the right balance or not.

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