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AMA: The Boyfriend Ch. 465.5-466

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You are the first person to point this out, and I totally used Jeremiah from FoF's last name here by accident. D'OH! I'll get that fixed.

BreaktheBar

Antoinette Elizabeth Grant? Robert Blane? Kendall was happy to recite almost Toni's entire name but couldn't be bothered to add Blane to the end or what? Why does Robbie only have a last name, this family likes to give girls a bunch of middle names but boys don't get any? What is going on here?

Tee Kay

Oof, I must have missed making a note of that. Thank you for pointing it out! I'll go back and adjust ch407 for the bundle releases. I think I like Antoinette/Toni better too. Cheers!

BreaktheBar

Just a note—I was looking back at Chapter 407 about the AMA and Robbie’s sister is identified as Tiffany or Tiff. I do like Antoinette “Toni” better, particularly for a guerilla journalist—and I love the scene in this chapter.

Bill

Right there with you! Propane Grill, griddle or pellet grill. Anytime of year, so much better and cleaner! Although the author didn't say if he had a balcony in the apartment/condo...

BarneyGumble

Break tends to write pretty close to real-time in my experience. Its a side-effect of these kind of stories staying "in the moment" with sex scenes that are detailed out, taking up alot of the word count each chapter. It used to bother me too in the beginning but I've gotten used to it over time as this is the MO of most erotic fiction. I don't even think about the timeframe anymore unless he mentions "it's hard to believe it's only been *this* long since everything started...".

Mehntal1st

Broiling a steak??? Grilling is easier IMO and also no nasty pan to scrub....I grill 12 months a year, even in the snow

Robin Holden

I love his family already :D *note to myself: never offer to play Monopoly with Robbies family*

Darkflint

Ah yes another absolute slam dunk on this chapter

ReadingRed

I love this story but I hope the pacing sorts itself out. It's taken at LEAST 60k words to cover 36 hours. You wrote about robbie landing to meet becca and Wanda in June. Its 5 months later and only 3 days have passed in-story....

Mikhail Chelpon

You're really on a roll right now! One small correction: "Vanessa managed to lock down another bartender" should be Dayana I think.

Ctolm [the t is silent]

She's only been mentioned once or twice. When I went to write these chapters and checked my notes, I had to ask myself "Why is 'Guerilla Journalist' a thing I decided for her???" Sometimes past-me leaves future-me little gems like that.

BreaktheBar

I forgot Robbie had a sister.

Jason Hatter


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