Font of Fertility Ch. 39 (Beta)
Added 2025-05-09 04:20:34 +0000 UTC====================================
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I absolutely love this story, as well as AMA, OFG, and others. I've been following this one for years at this point, and I recently got caught up. First, thanks for adding more sex into the stories. It was getting to the point where I felt like I was reading urban fantasy romance and not erotica. The added sex to each story is much appreciated, and it helps the work out. Second, please, please, please speed up the plot progression and slow down the character development. This series is not silly enough to be a suspend-your-disbelief-by-not-suspending-your-disbelief, which is actually fine by me. However, that's what you need to do in order to be able to write a story that's up to 39 chapters spanning over the course of a month with this many characters that have entered the picture. For the plot, I'm thinking, "Okay, this story will likely take hundreds, perhaps thousands of years to reach a satisfying conclusion, and we're a month in after 39 chapters. Do I keep reading this or do I move onto other stories?" Simultaneously, there are too many characters who have developed faster than they should have (Aidra basically falling in love at this point and Esmerelda letting her guard down too much). I think this is the greatest weakness in your writing style. I think you have too many ideas for too many different stories, and you struggle to skip over something that might lead up to something really hot, but it takes some doing to progress the story. Maybe give yourself a budget of story arcs you can have open at once and don't open another until one closes. And instead of killing an idea, maybe think of it more of setting it aside for another time or another story. You can endlessly develop your stories in serial, but the end result just feels unfocused and drawn out. Hopefully you can take this as constructive feedback. The fact that I have been following this story for years should let you know that I'm invested, but simultaneously, that won't last forever. I often find myself reading a story from the beginning where the pacing is more appropriate just to revive my enthusiasm for what else is to come. I hope future chapters will maybe skip a few weeks, months, or even years in between to make things a bit more believable. Maybe something can happen where Jerry and his Harem have to go into hiding and he has to bring his parents with him or something like that. Food for thought.
Mike Keathley
2025-06-24 21:43:59 +0000 UTCI just love this story it’s this in first place then it’s AMA and thirdly it’s quarantine those are your top 3 stories but it was font of fertility that I firstly discovered years ago on literotica and I’ve followed you ever since and joined you on Patreon as soon as you joined it. 8m so glad you can write for a living nowadays you and your wonderful imagination thoroughly deserve it and we are the lucky ones who benefit from it so much so thanks mr break and thanks to mr breaks imagination too.
Jim lynch
2025-05-13 00:12:27 +0000 UTCChef kiss, no other way to describe it
Darkflint
2025-05-09 23:33:17 +0000 UTC
