Quaranteam: North West Ch. 29 (Alpha)
Added 2024-07-10 03:57:07 +0000 UTCThe following story is based on the fantast
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Great chapter love how the group interactions are developing. “Miriam had come to fetch us herself when it was time for us to,” To leave or to go maybe? “I grit my teeth for a moment,” S/b gritted “Laure Bloomberg” s/b Laura
Dragondoc
2024-07-12 22:55:36 +0000 UTC“Bitch, I’ve been waiting since you first showed up for this to happen,” yeah, me too!
TM
2024-07-11 12:56:26 +0000 UTC(My Perspective) After the Leo Pov chapter I did kinda feel bad how Leo's group has gone and rooting for Yvonne pairing soon. I think he might be hoping for more 7/10s and sharing passions/interests. Dani is a huge plus for getting the more out of his league partners but not sure it's good for the health of the group to get Dani admirers mostly. Sorry for the ramblings. :P
Adub
2024-07-11 01:47:28 +0000 UTCFreaking awesome chapter. can see some new story lines developing. But I've gotta ask, is it only me (highly possible) who is happy Leo is a great friend to Harri but frustrated that he seems to end up with some of the hottest gals instead of Harri?
Trav
2024-07-10 20:47:09 +0000 UTCThe last two chapters were worth the wait. Hope life is treating you better. Love the addition of Macho as the cats in the OG QT story are some of favorite moments to read. The Miriam/Laura arrival had me laughing. Thanks for all you do and write.
Adub
2024-07-10 18:10:55 +0000 UTCI love me some QT:NW goodness and appreciate that this was a more sedate chapter about the families without some major crisis Harri needs to tackle, but damn you for delaying Miriam again... I swear you are doing this to frustrate me specifically... 😡 I also like Mary being mentioned again...I definitely feel like she may be the next "damsel" that will need to be rescued as that whole commune thing still sounds fishy as hell. ...and now for the obligatory corrections: #1# "...when I had cut in as it looked like she was going to rip the man’s throat out with his teeth..." - "his teeth" should be "her teeth" #2# "...various ancestral crimes the Federal government had committed the Native American population..." - "had committed" should be "had committed against" #3# "Miriam had come to fetch us herself when it was time for us to, just a little before lunch." - "time for us to" should be "time for us to go" #4# "...was to check in on Kara, Gerty and Tanay,..." - "Tanay" should be "Tanaya" #5# "We both sighed, forced to acknowledge at least for a moment the state of the world." - With this sentence structure, there should be commas around ", at least for a moment," #6# "Erica snorted. “Well, she’ll impress him. I don’t want to think about whether my brother will or not.”" - "she'll impress him" should be "she'll impress her" since she is talking about Dani impressing Laura #7# "Miriam made an effort to re-introduce herself to everyone, and to check in on Tanaya, Gerty and even Karal..." - "Karal" should be "Kara" #8# "They got a round of applause for the ladies..." - "for the ladies" should be "from the ladies" #9# "I heard Dani apologising for not telling Ivy and Vanessa..." - I think you meant this to be Kyla apologizing, not Dani as I don't think Dani knew about the pregnancies
Mehntal1st
2024-07-10 13:01:46 +0000 UTCTypo: at dinner after Miriam and Laura arrive, Kara has become Karal
Michael Duke
2024-07-10 05:38:32 +0000 UTCCliffhanger ending I see lol
SovietDegendays
2024-07-10 05:38:01 +0000 UTCTypo: as Harri is dropping V off and going back Tanya is misspelt
Michael Duke
2024-07-10 05:22:23 +0000 UTCUp next: Masseuse and the MILF Part 2, OFG
BreaktheBar
2024-07-10 03:57:34 +0000 UTC
