Font of Fertility Ch. 30 (Alpha)
Added 2024-03-22 02:00:15 +0000 UTCThe content of this post has been removed for the time being as I, Break, make sure that the story fully complies with Patreon ToS and does not risk my platform. If this post has not been edited back into existence after some time, assume that the content has been made available in a larger bundle.
Sorry for the inconvenience, hopefully all will be righted soon.
~Break.
Comments
Great chapter, and absolutely loved how this chapter closed out. (Thanks for not hitting us with another gut wrenching cliff hanger)
Trav
2024-03-22 15:37:34 +0000 UTCMan I need more font releases still my fav story from ya
SovietDegendays
2024-03-22 14:58:36 +0000 UTCHas it really only been six weeks?? Good lord a lot has happened in such a short amount of time... The Moira situation gave me 'Friends' flashbacks when Monica slept with a high schooler thinking he being a "senior" meant college... Personally I don't see an issue with an age gap as long as both are legal, consenting adults. Who cares as long as you make each other happy? I can see why you were torn about including this sex scene as the end of the previous chapter...but I stand by my belief that this would fit better as an ending scene with Jeremiah exiting her apartment after the encounter, rather than starting the chapter with it feeling like you walked in on something that had already started and hitting a quick tone shift, if that makes sense. In my opinion, I think starting this chapter with him arriving home would set the chapter up better. Just a flow thing.... Here are the obligatory editing catches: 1# "I gathered her hair much as I had before, one hand holding it to the back and side of her head except for you bundle of strands that fell from her forehead." - "you bundle of strands" should be "a bundle of strands" 2# "She was trying to learn what I liked, and what really sent chills through me, as she leased me with her lips and tongue." - "as she leased me" should be "as she pleased me" 3# "She sat up,p dressing herself about halfway down..." - "sat up,p dressing" should be "sat up, pressing" 4# "Her nipples were little rubbery nubs and as she settled down with me fully inside of her a teased one with a couple of fingers." - "a teased one" should be "I teased one" 5# “I want you to fuc me now. Like last time.” - "fuc" should be "fuck" 6# "...our blondies coming together hard enough to clap the back of her thighs to my pelvis." - "our blondies" should be "our bodies" 7# "My release revived quickly and I rang my fingers through the hair on top of her head..." - "rang my fingers" should be "ran my fingers"
Mehntal1st
2024-03-22 12:47:38 +0000 UTCOtherwise, great episode. Lots of issues raised.
patient1
2024-03-22 05:02:20 +0000 UTCOne lapse into second person.
patient1
2024-03-22 05:00:55 +0000 UTC
