Quaranteam: North West Chapter 25 (Alpha)
Added 2024-03-02 09:39:34 +0000 UTCThe following story is based on the fantast
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Good chapter but not a fan of it dropping in between the previous cliffhanger. This is where I send angry letters and when winds of winter is coming out sheesh lol
SovietDegendays
2024-03-08 07:48:18 +0000 UTCInteresting intermission giving us Leo's perspective of recent events. As much as I liked it...I hate you just a little bit for delaying the continuation of the raid from the previous chapter. &$%#+(@#% cliffhangers!! I only spotted six editing issues while reading through this... 1# You swap between Yvonne and Yvonna several times, not sure which spelling you are meaning to use. 2# He watched enough to see Leo actually leap into Harri’s arms - "Leo" should be "Ivy" here 3# Dani stood up from her folding lawn chair and went to Dani, leaning down and hugging her tightly. - The second "Dani" should be "Erica" 4# He could feel her pussy clenching ridge of the ridge of his cock head. - I believe this should be "her pussy clenching the ridge of his cock head" 5# “Hey,” she said, joining the table as she slid in next to Sabrina on the bend and gave the blonde a wink before leaning forward to look at Leo and Dani. - Pretty sure "Sabrina" should be "Spencer" 6# “You sister kinda scares me,” Rachel said. - "You" should be "Your"
Mehntal1st
2024-03-04 06:02:36 +0000 UTCGreat chapter. I was hoping you would develop Leo’s perspective at some point. I know folks will be craving more on Harri but this was great and developed lots of the other characters in meaningful ways. The jump back in time was a bit disorienting. Maybe in the beta release move the first part of this story into the beginning of the last chapter - because this is the first time your telling things from Leo’s POV so when you do this deep dive it will flow with the main story better. That way it’s just switching perspectives and not time lines as well. Or not - you’re much better at this writing stuff than I am. A small typo “enduced” should be induced.
Dragondoc
2024-03-03 21:33:16 +0000 UTCpleeease prioritize the next chapter for this!! i know you’re experimenting with new schedules and what not, but you’ve now used the tension from the cliffhanger to full effect! we need to know how Harri handles the situation he’s in!!
Harmonizing
2024-03-03 16:02:21 +0000 UTCI have been looking forward to the next chapter of this all month. This was a total let down. In my opinion you should keep this from Harri's POV with small select other POV's when needed to show somthing. To get a massive chapter that does nothing to advance the main story is very disappointing. I hope we don't have to wait another whole month for another update.
robert macrae
2024-03-03 15:56:14 +0000 UTCI understand the frustration when reading the story month-to-month, but I do sometimes need to make decisions about the Overall reading experience for people picking up the story in the future. Not getting the immediate resolution of the Rescue Mission is the right choice for the story as a whole, but it's a pinch that I understand in the Right Now.
BreaktheBar
2024-03-03 03:46:46 +0000 UTCSometimes the tension is just too ripe not to use it to it's full advantage.
BreaktheBar
2024-03-03 03:44:25 +0000 UTCKept waiting to move to Harri perspective but I really enjoyed Leo’s perspective. Well done and excellent long chapter
Ian B
2024-03-03 02:28:28 +0000 UTCI think Dani hugged Erica on the roof, not Dani.
Gregg Hagerty
2024-03-02 18:05:04 +0000 UTCBut I'm still all in on this great story!
Trav
2024-03-02 14:55:20 +0000 UTCBeing a bit of a stinker is putting it mildly. Hanging onto the side of this cliff is pure torture. The chapter is outstanding, no doubt. Despite the brilliance of the chapter, I found myself raging against hearing about Leo.
Trav
2024-03-02 14:54:58 +0000 UTCAfter a delay, we get... More delay. I get you write what comes to you, but not getting movement on the main plot from Harry's POV is frustrating. I like learning more about Leo's head, and what's going on with him and his family, but to dump it here was an exercise in frustration for me. My suggestion would be to start getting better at working Leo updates into the story, rather than giving us another massive info dump in the future.
Jason Hatter
2024-03-02 14:03:09 +0000 UTCIt’s a very good chapter and I really enjoyed it, but you and your cliffhangers. I was hoping for resolution on the rescue mission. Please don’t keep us too long on the next chapter.
Todd Garrison
2024-03-02 10:57:42 +0000 UTC
