Quaranteam: North West Chapter 24 (Alpha)
Added 2024-01-17 06:24:54 +0000 UTCThis Alpha draft won’t be official until it
Comments
Great chapter well done
Todd Garrison
2024-02-03 02:21:54 +0000 UTCOr should I have said, same bat place, same bat channel
Ian B
2024-01-28 18:26:38 +0000 UTCDUN DUN DUUUUUUN!!!
Ian B
2024-01-28 18:25:14 +0000 UTCCan I suggest that you add the dates of when each chapter takes place in the overall quarenteam universe. Your time line is behind CP most current chapter, but it would help with keep in my track of where your chapter falls within the overall universe?
Smcrae5639
2024-01-19 02:06:22 +0000 UTCI forgot about Melody.
Josh Will
2024-01-18 06:15:10 +0000 UTCWow, double slip - Misspell Erica, where it's supposed to be Leo. Hah! The second one I definitely remember being annoyed at using 'kitted' twice in one sentence and must have just kept writing after erasing it. Changes made in the main doc and will roll out in the Beta! Andy's team is 23 as of what's live on Literotica at the moment (including himself). As for potential partners for Harri? Who knows what's going to happen cause this IS the apocalypse...
BreaktheBar
2024-01-18 06:05:04 +0000 UTCYou call Leo "Eric" at one point, and the following sentence feels like there is a word missing: "I was kitted out again, carrying both the M4 and MP5 that Miriam had sent me back when she’d first me out as the ‘Sheriff.’ " Otherwise, very tense and very cool chapter. Anticipation for the next one is high. By my count, Harri is at four confirmed partners and has sixteen or seventeen potential partners. That would put him even with Andy Rook if you're counting that sort of thing.
Josh Will
2024-01-18 04:34:29 +0000 UTCWhat do you mean? Of course the crazy militia built the very first skybridge and no one has noticed! Noted, haha. Thanks!
BreaktheBar
2024-01-18 04:00:54 +0000 UTCGood chapter. Only thing I caught that should be corrected is here where you said "barn of some sort in a previous life, though it had satellites hooked up to its roof " It should be satellite dishes hooked up. Don't think the level of tech required to tether actual satellites to a building and remain in a geosynchronous orbit over the ground tether's base.
DevilDoc82
2024-01-18 02:11:34 +0000 UTC....and we're in crossover territory!
patient1
2024-01-17 18:04:34 +0000 UTCPlease! Lets not wait too long for next chapter! This one was awesome.
Psychopuppy
2024-01-17 14:53:05 +0000 UTCAnother great installment. Thank you for getting into the rescue. If there is any way to bump the next chapter up in the rotation to get that closure let us know.
Revan
2024-01-17 14:13:41 +0000 UTCHolt shit this chapter was intense! Loved it
SovietDegendays
2024-01-17 13:18:23 +0000 UTC
