Quaranteam: North West Chapter 21 (Alpha.2)
Added 2023-11-02 23:38:55 +0000 UTCThis is the second Alpha draft of Chapter 21, a
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Yep this version was alot better
SovietDegendays
2023-11-03 06:23:34 +0000 UTCI didn't have a problem with the previous draft, but this one is a marked improvement. Much more conflict, tension, and action. Kashm and her dad sound fascinating, and I am very eager to hear more of their story. Very well done sir.
Josh Will
2023-11-03 04:39:14 +0000 UTCI think I like this version better. The bikers seem more threatening and the encounter ending seemed more earned than the previous one. Though, while waving another beautiful lady in front of our protagonist is on brand, it is feeling like his potential partner pool is getting a bit unwieldy.
Mehntal1st
2023-11-03 04:05:38 +0000 UTC
