Technically We're Still Engaged
Added 2023-10-11 08:35:53 +0000 UTCThis story was originally released on Literotica under the Taboo category, and this rewrite of the short series replaces that content for a broader audience. Much of the plot of the story remains similar, but details have changed and the entire work has gotten a bit of a facelift. It was originally written in 2015 and 2016, so some of the technology and internet norms are different than today. I hope you all enjoy this new version!
In TWSE, you can expect Exhibitionism and Voyeurism through the internet, masturbation, toys, semi-public sex, oral, FF, MF, and MFF.
Thanks to Ante_Matter, wherever you are, for your help on the original.
EDIT: I have removed the story text from the post because it was too long and crashing some folks' devices/apps and computers. Sorry for any inconvenience.
Comments
A bit late to the party, but I really think this needs, at least, an epilog. A, this is how it ended up and this is what their relationship to each other is now, down the line, chapter.
Falstaff1960
2024-04-11 16:52:36 +0000 UTC👍 👍. I really like your writing!
Rhino 77 Pilot aka George McElhoe
2024-03-19 01:07:34 +0000 UTCAgreed. I had the same issue with the original but enjoyed this version a lot
Ian B
2024-01-23 20:42:32 +0000 UTCI'm begging you to change your mind on this. The story works far better with that tension in it, and it's much hotter that way too. Without it, it's just sort of unclear why he doesn't just go for her from the beginning.
JC
2023-10-28 11:09:44 +0000 UTCNo.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-28 10:25:44 +0000 UTCI mean, will there be an updated version on Literotica - that is, this, but with "cousin" put back in
JC
2023-10-28 10:23:32 +0000 UTCThe original from 2016 is still available on Literotica, but this will be the version I post anywhere else.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-28 10:22:02 +0000 UTCSad to lose the relative part. Will there be an uncensored version of this revision elsewhere?
JC
2023-10-26 08:11:58 +0000 UTCThank you for this. It was nice to read an entire story in a sitting.
Robots101
2023-10-22 18:16:06 +0000 UTCYou're great at male romance. I'm going to have to read through the original version, since I suspect most of my complaints are from the awkwardness of removing the cousin element and keeping the same story.
FlareNight
2023-10-13 04:56:28 +0000 UTCI really enjoyed this
Rick Shaw
2023-10-13 04:28:14 +0000 UTCUnfortunately yes. It's a 50k word story, so New Patreon was crashing for folks.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-12 03:23:40 +0000 UTCI never got very far in the original but reworked to best friend worked a lot better for me. Great story.
zktvo
2023-10-12 00:41:45 +0000 UTCLoved the original, this one is pretty hot as well. ;) Edit suggestion: didn't seem to phase the other people - faze
HN
2023-10-11 21:39:40 +0000 UTCSo it’s pdf or epub only?
Salvo
2023-10-11 20:47:22 +0000 UTCSure! Also, during the show he watches live in TX, you have Mel arching her bag...I think it would be sexier if she were arching her back?
Toodles McGhee
2023-10-11 19:44:25 +0000 UTCAlready fixed in the new docs!
BreaktheBar
2023-10-11 18:46:07 +0000 UTCGreat do over. Still two references to "Cousin" that were missed.
Jeff Hughes
2023-10-11 18:25:45 +0000 UTCMan I remember reading this years ago sheesh
SovietDegendays
2023-10-11 18:24:09 +0000 UTCGot it! Thanks.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-11 17:48:49 +0000 UTCFixed! Thank you. Thought I got them all.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-11 17:48:38 +0000 UTCI have edited out the text from the post, which should help those who have had crashing issues. At over 50,000 words, and Patreon messing with the UI, I have a feeling it was just too big. I have also fixed those couple of small edits that I missed.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-11 17:47:46 +0000 UTCGreat story! One editing note: towards the end you refer to Mel as the MC’s cousin. Probably left over from the original story. “though I was a little surprised as well that my cousin was back down to the sexy grey…”
Revan
2023-10-11 15:41:58 +0000 UTCNo issues with my original Pixel...
Toodles McGhee
2023-10-11 14:55:18 +0000 UTCI do prefer this to the original, no such thing as hot relatives in my world so those triggers go the opposite way for me...but you missed an edit in the last paragraph of chapter 5.
Toodles McGhee
2023-10-11 14:54:21 +0000 UTCYeah, same here on a Pixel 6. Not a huge deal, but maybe a bug you could tell Patreon about? They might take a bug report from a creator more seriously
AndyWanKenobi
2023-10-11 13:48:49 +0000 UTCDamn! Excellent story! Would love to see more of it.
crc08
2023-10-11 13:16:24 +0000 UTCOops.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-11 09:21:36 +0000 UTCNot sure why, maybe the length of the post, but this post crashes the app at least on my phone. Great xD.
Kalak
2023-10-11 08:53:16 +0000 UTCClassic Me - Set some short-term goals, get immediately distracted. I've wanted to do this rewrite edit for a LONG time now to get this story over here on Patreon. I hope you guys enjoy!
BreaktheBar
2023-10-11 08:37:00 +0000 UTC
