Font of Fertility Ch. 24 (Alpha)
Added 2023-08-29 07:43:56 +0000 UTCThe content of this post has been removed for the time being as I, Break, make sure that the story fully complies with Patreon ToS and does not risk my platform. If this post has not been edited back into existence after some time, assume that the content has been made available in a larger bundle.
Sorry for the inconvenience, hopefully all will be righted soon.
~Break.
Comments
agree - this one is the best!
JC
2023-10-26 05:54:44 +0000 UTC"I knew I heard it but my brain just didn’t comprehend the very sound of it, let alone the meeting." I think you meant "let alone the meaning" here. "...then returned to the Bed and Breakfast with Angie to spend the night cuddling with her since she hadn’t gotten that yet." As a previous commenter pointed out, I believe you meant "with Anna" not Angie. I got to say, as much as I love your AMA and Quaranteam stories, Font of Fertility is still my favorite. I just love the world you've crafted and the characters all have their unique facets that make them interesting as they grow and develop, even the "one-night stands". It's so unlike many other harem-type stories that tend to throw two-dimensional fuck fodder at the reader. I felt the Esmerelda lunch was well-done, giving her just the right amount of crazy to make the reader uncomfortable and presenting the interactions exactly how I would expect an unstable, powerful, Death wizard to communicate with those "beneath" her. Her teleportation at the end was perfectly creepy too. Break, you do character development and interactions so damn well and I love the interplay between Jeremiah's girls and him in each chapter. They keep the story flowing and are definitely the best part of this series. Oh, and the shadow thing at the end....what a cliff-hanger!
Mehntal1st
2023-09-21 21:53:32 +0000 UTC> If I were reading my life as a story, I would think the author didn’t have a clue and needed to scrap the whole story and start over. This cracked me up, considering all the rewrites!
JC
2023-08-30 09:09:23 +0000 UTCUhh... It's a lot to process, in part because it's been a while and I was blanking on the names. I probably have everyone straight at this point, but I feel like I should back up a couple of chapters and read them again as if this is a novel rather than a serial. Maybe Jerry and his girls need to compare notes with Victorius and the sex pixie to get their memories and opinions, presumably they are at least as old as this death seat. It would also be enlightening to talk to his witch classmate about who are the currently powerful individuals and groups of magic users in North America so that he knows who to worry about and to whom he might reach out in the common interest. He acquired fire magic from a sexual encounter, surely there are other skills to pick up.
patient1
2023-08-30 05:33:15 +0000 UTCHonestly I like the chapter as it is. A chaotic mess of emotions and uncertainty, trying to cling to the mundane but unable to do so as the new responsibilities make their presence known. Much is learned, little was answered. The story traces Jerry's path pretty well.
Krysm Phoenix
2023-08-29 20:57:34 +0000 UTCOkay not autistic. Just extremely calculating. With centuries of traumatizing experience. Her ethics and morality are so wild. Checks out for an immortal.
Krysm Phoenix
2023-08-29 20:52:02 +0000 UTCbottom of page 20/top of 21... “Well, no,” Benji said. seems it's missing what Benji is saying no to.
DevilDoc82
2023-08-29 19:02:52 +0000 UTCThis is a big part of why I had to rewrite the chapter several times. "Another long conversation that moves the story incrementally" felt wrong, but it's what my planning and the timeline required. Unfortunately, this is the issue with writing a massive, ongoing story that was started 8 years ago as a fun 'magic sex!' story - I just don't have the same development early in the story to set up what should be happening now. I'm working my way around to it, but it's like pulling a heavy trailer - the turn needs to be wide enough that the whole thing doesn't jackknife or flip over.
BreaktheBar
2023-08-29 18:48:56 +0000 UTCthere was some fun stuff in here, but I’m starting to feel like the story has stagnated a bit. the stuff with meeting the other seats and all thats was super interesting, and this meeting with Esmerelda was interesting, but I’m getting a little tired of hearing “I just don’t have enough information”. part of this might be the fact that I’m reading the chapters as they come out and not as one like full novel, but it feels like the story has become 1. really good sex scene 2. little bit of magic intrigue 3. Jerry goes “whoa, I really don’t know what’s going on, let’s wait a bit before we do anything” 4. repeat not trying to seem too negative, I’ve still really enjoyed keeping up with new chapters. it just feels like the social aspect has really been developed and flushed out, and the magic has been pushed to the side recently, which is a shame, because I thought it was a highlight of the series
Harmonizing
2023-08-29 18:40:38 +0000 UTCCorrect!
BreaktheBar
2023-08-29 16:36:21 +0000 UTCAfter the 5 way you have him cuddle with Angie at the B&b but I think that should be Annalise
bigfatmatt01
2023-08-29 11:49:18 +0000 UTCThis chapter took 4 rewrites to get to this point, and I'm still unsure about it. Comments are super wanted!
BreaktheBar
2023-08-29 07:44:32 +0000 UTC
