Font of Fertility Ch. 21 (Alpha)
Added 2023-05-24 07:49:52 +0000 UTCThe content of this post has been removed for the time being as I, Break, make sure that the story fully complies with Patreon ToS and does not risk my platform. If this post has not been edited back into existence after some time, assume that the content has been made available in a larger bundle.
Sorry for the inconvenience, hopefully all will be righted soon.
~Break.
Comments
Both chapters 20 & 21 were awfully short. I loved em, but not enough to them. Hopefully you can flesh them out more when you go for the beta revision.
Bart
2023-06-07 22:36:43 +0000 UTCThat would be SOME character development. "Benji's arc is DEATH!"
BreaktheBar
2023-05-28 04:36:16 +0000 UTCDamn I just had a thought; it seems like Benji is gonna get caught up in all of the magic stuff and end up helping the person going against Jerry, potentially replacing them at their seat by the end of the story, or just dying horribly for character development
cet
2023-05-28 01:42:42 +0000 UTCI think you forgot he's a Fertility Seat... of course women are instinctively drawn to him.
JC
2023-05-27 13:32:07 +0000 UTCLike, I get the actual plot needs to move forward, but maybe throw in a few chapters (or sub chapters) that are just "here is the exciting sex we had this week." Every time there's a reference to how long it's been, I start thinking that maybe Jerry's sex magic is just unconscious because random women you walk up to probably aren't this willing to join a harem after just a week and a half. I love the series, but a lot of the character development seems like it's at writing speed instead of story speed. This guy was a virgin a month ago and now he's got a woman so convinced that he's a master of sex that she is willing to join his harem? Or maybe that's a subplot. Ndia implied that he should just be forcing women in. In spite of his opposition, I'm not sure anything like that could be managed in the real world without magic.
FlareNight
2023-05-26 15:29:20 +0000 UTCWait What? Awesome can't wait for the next chapter.
Psychopuppy
2023-05-24 15:39:01 +0000 UTCYour a sex wizard jerry!
SovietDegendays
2023-05-24 14:32:11 +0000 UTCbookmark... argh, way to end this on a cliffhanger!
JC
2023-05-24 11:14:44 +0000 UTC
