The Afterparty: The Bully (Collected Version)
Added 2023-02-04 10:51:02 +0000 UTCThis is not new content. I wanted to get a new, non-series post up over on Literotica and took some time to cool down on all the series writing to do an editing pass on Afterparty: The Bully. It will be going up on Literotica, so I figured I'd make a downloadable version available here for all you fine folks.
No core content has been changed since I originally posted this series. Some grammar points have been cleaned up, and the chapter breaks have been removed and blended together to make it a seamless story. When it posts to Literotica it'll go up under the NonCon/Reluctance category, though it could have gone under the Group category instead. I just don't have an NC/R story yet so why not?
I'll eventually give the Pool Edition this treatment as well. And yes, I'm aware of the irony that no one ever got in the pool in the pool edition.
Anyways, this collected story is 48,000 words so I'm not going to post the text for the sole reason that reading it on Patreon would be a major pain.
Comments
I truly enjoyed the Backyard story more. This one was harder to like, only because Tom was such a conflicting personality while John and Matt were so pathetic and weak. Ironically, I identified with Tom a lot… too bad he comes across as so self absorbed. However, he truly seems to understand and relate to women and what they desire, in spite of what’s politically correct. The story could have been much more interesting if Matt and John hadn’t been so disgustingly weak and pathetic by comparison. The dynamic in the Backyard version where all 3 guys had something to offer was more enjoyable, but I found myself actually rooting for Tom - especially with Nicole and even Miranda to a lesser degree. The major thing that was unbelievable about Tom was his level of experience and maturity while still in High-school. It was literally written as if Tom was a college Senior while everyone else was in High-school. I was pretty wild and didn’t get that level of control or experience until I was just out of college. Ironically, his level of experience does match with his being so in-tune with the girls’ individual personalities, kinks and emotional needs in each scenario. It humanizes him and makes Tom an extremely relatable anti-hero. And as awesomely slutty as Sarah was, I was constantly hoping her sister Tiff showed up to send the story over the top… but alas, this crazy night had about as wild an emotional rollercoaster as could be imagined for the parties involved and as many revelations as anyone could believably imagine. I would however, LOVE to see another version of this imagined by asking readers their wildest experiences, then weaving them all together into another Truth or Dare game. If there were some way to take the best of both stories and turn this into a series, that would be amazing 🤩.
EroticPoetic
2024-10-14 21:33:14 +0000 UTCSPOILER: ||Reread - love this story. I'm normally super against things like NTR, but in this case Miranda wasn't even John's girlfriend, she was just a crush that he was too afraid to even pursue. And at the end, He and Matt even ended up better off because the sluttier girls were willing to train them. At least now they won't go into college as sad as they left high school.||
Shadracht
2024-07-29 21:17:06 +0000 UTCLoved this story
Hornygolfer69
2024-05-13 17:01:40 +0000 UTCI didn’t like Tom, and to be fair you told me I wouldn’t in the intro. But out of him and John he was less objectifying of the ladies. I think I might of liked this story better if I hadn’t of read the backyard one first. Thank you for sharing
Ian B
2024-01-22 04:21:16 +0000 UTCI enjoyed the story. There is love hate relationship with Tom. I believe this story could continue on. I remember a long running story on Literotica about that request her husband make her his sex slave and then next door neighbor joins in the fun becoming a slave. It was a great story. I could imagine both of these girls accepting a collar from Tom and becoming his subs. His girlfriend would accept it also. Could you imagine the social aspects around school with them being collared and other girls being interested. Then the guys and girls getting upset that he would force them into it but instead they wanted it.
Brett
2023-10-17 17:24:42 +0000 UTCbreakthebarlit@gmail.com, or you can message me here on Patreon.
BreaktheBar
2023-10-13 18:52:09 +0000 UTC@breakthebar, do you have a contact email? I’ve looked for it here, but can’t find it if it’s there.
Jon
2023-10-13 15:59:24 +0000 UTCBrutal. I hate Tom with every fiber of my being and but am disgusted by John too. Especially the end. I’m not sure how he could ever face Nicole again
Jon
2023-10-06 23:00:31 +0000 UTC
