Ch4 pg21 revisions
Added 2017-04-25 13:00:43 +0000 UTCThe latest page had a bit of a journey, you could say. Got all three versions for you here.
I've really been trying to focus on page composition, thinking on how to better guide the reader's eye through the page. And in text-less action scenes like this one, composition becomes especially important so readers can get what's going on and in what order.
First version - second row would've been read in the wrong order, which wouldn't have been that bad since they're technically happening simultaneously, but moving on from that row would go all wrong as there'd be no organic way to read the biggest panel.
Second version - second row messing me up again, but this time for different reasons. Marya breaking out of the panel directs the eye to the right place, but I was trying to cram too big images in too small a space and the overlapping arm was not coming out good at all. Also the panels' shape was contradicting the eyelines within the panels (Marya's arm). Also I came to the conclusion that the unconventional curve of the last three panels was a bit iffy.
I really liked the big panel of Vard dashing forward with his shield up, but ended up scrapping it to combine with Marya and show a more direct angle. I added Mischief and his smoke screen to aid the story; felt the three just charging in with no cover was a bit awkward. Second-to-last panel fit in a tight space as a bit of a "by-the-by this is where Marya's bolts are hitting".
So there you go! Composition is important. It's a goddamn pain, but important :D
