Biology Project 6
Added 2024-03-19 02:11:47 +0000 UTCSorry it took so long. My friend's project took me a week to finish. Hopefully I'll be back on track now
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A nice site. It seems like the girls' idea goes a bit wrong... π€ Of course, we already know how this story will end. At least we readers were able to participate in the development. (Thanks) π According to your announcement, there are still 1 or 2 pages waiting for us... So I assume there will be a lot of events waiting for us on the next page. π€ The attempt to contact Angelica, the desperate attempt to wake her up, and of course the futile struggle (from the survey). Since there are always around 6 pictures per page, the story may seem a bit rushed at this point. Especially considering that on the page afterwards, Angelica has to wake up and realize what happened and then show her reaction to it (also from the survey). I don't know how much you want to hear my contribution to the story again or what you're planning for the last two pages... π€ But I would perhaps plan two sides to the two girls' fight for survival. And another one for Angelica's perspective as the finale of the story. This means you have enough space for each phase of the two girls. (Contact, attempt to wake up, argument/perhaps blame from Amy to Amber?). At least from this perspective, it seems to me that the majority of this idea came from Amber. Therefore, after losing the fight, it would be understandable if there were a (short?) argument between the two. This would ensure that there could be a full page at the end for Angelica and the conclusion of the story. As has often been said: a beautiful story. And the pictures are really well done. π (And sorry for my renewed, unsolicited post. I hope it doesn't seem rude of me. With translator) π
Xigbar
2024-03-19 17:16:15 +0000 UTC
