Harem House Chapter 38
Added 2025-06-21 12:00:10 +0000 UTCKelly’s Thursday went better than most. Waking
Comments
i love the little real life reminders in here about “hey, dudes, if a woman wants to take care of you, f*cking let her! upholding the masculine ideal is exhausting!” this is what separates your writing, S.E. good shit as always.
MJS
2025-07-08 10:19:22 +0000 UTCYeah, I moved it to the dinner conversation to give it more room to breathe and more back and forth. I think it works a lot better.
S. E. Aeghann
2025-06-23 02:39:13 +0000 UTCI like the change in the Lynn plotting by the girls. Being IRL makes that conversation more believable.
David (Dobie) Gillis
2025-06-23 02:36:33 +0000 UTCGlad someone is catching the errors. Sorry I have been slacking off. Thanks saffy.
David (Dobie) Gillis
2025-06-23 02:35:06 +0000 UTC"For the love of God, read the room, George" made me snort my drink, lol. I'm glad it was excruciating in a good way? Or at least an entertaining way, I hope.
S. E. Aeghann
2025-06-22 23:53:06 +0000 UTCMe: "Shut up, George" "...Shut uuuuuup, George." "....for the love of God, read the room, George." Excruciating 👍 You regularly manage to surprise by making the characters uncommonly mature, and I really appreciate it. It's a bit like the antithesis of reality television: adults handling adult shit.
Trey
2025-06-22 23:27:35 +0000 UTCI kinda get the feeling that Deb might help the girls with getting the evidence though
deamon121
2025-06-22 21:14:18 +0000 UTCI am still a bit surprised that none of the girls has mentioned Lynn's apology dinner to Arthur. I know it is because they know he will tell them not to go and now, with Deb and George aware of what Lynn did, I actually don't know if they should even go ahead with their plan.
Flamethrow
2025-06-22 04:33:54 +0000 UTCGood catch!
S. E. Aeghann
2025-06-21 18:33:16 +0000 UTCGeorge reached across the table and squeezed Deb’s hand again, holding it in his and not letting her go. Honey, you always find the good in others. -> missing start quotes before ‘Honey’
saffy
2025-06-21 18:31:32 +0000 UTCNormally, if Kelly spent the night at Arthur’s, Katelyn would be waiting for her at home in their apartment. This time, Katelyn was with her.
S. E. Aeghann
2025-06-21 18:24:49 +0000 UTC…except Katelyn joined her return and wasn’t waiting for her at the apartment. -> not sure I understand this sentence!
saffy
2025-06-21 18:22:43 +0000 UTC
